Because you asked for critical commentary!
Criticism: The pose is a little awkward. It feels like they are stiff like Lucy's arms folding gives them the illusion of being too long and too straight. If you look at your arm, you can notice curves and a sense of flow from the shoulder going thick thin thick thin wrist hands. Don't be afraid to flesh this out more (I noticed you were doing it, probably to make her look thinner). Mike's position looks forced, try to mimic his pose and notice how your arm looks more "tucked" in or if he's leaning on it try to compliment that by shifting his shoulders.
Hands: I notice that you have trouble drawing hands (like most people) so here are some tips for the future. Look at the hand anatomy; you have a wrist, a palm, knuckles, fingers, and a thumb. The thumb should start from the wrist and slope up to desired length. The main component after this is that the thumb should end halfway up the palm. That actually the hardest part of drawing hands, the wrist, the palm, and the thumb. The fingers should have a natural curve while resting rather than outstretched. That's all the tips I can personally give you. The rest is gained through studying anatomy, either via googling it or looking at your own hands and practicing.
Other than that, I love this. The position of the camera is excellent as you got the anatomy right (for your style) as we look downwards. The legs look long in a good and sexy way with the muscles all nicely shaded and brought out. I love your shading with a mixture of yellow and purple and using TEXTURES (drools) to bring out details such as Mike's scarf and Lucy's bow.
I hope this helped!
Comment ID #60118
I normally don't draw fan art. But I've been looking for ways to practice my Chiaroscuro in pen and ink. I also have been practicing cleaning up scans in photoshop. I admit that I went a bit over broad and changed the colors of the pen and ink. Also I used the cheap inks on this, so its not that great. I need lots of critical commentary on this so I can get some fresh ideas.
June-pay_Eeyorey on January 14, 2014.