Bittersweet Candy Bowl

I apologize for making another thread for my fanfic. Its just…the last one had a typo on it. Everday Superhero. I’m surprised no one caught it. EVERYDAY. Everyday. Everyday. EVERYDAY. EverYday

Ahem. So I apologize, but I do want people to read this story, and no one is going to read a story if the title is misspelled. That just looks sloppy. So here it is. The official thread to my fanfic, the Spectacular Silver Sentinel, a superhero take on the Bittersweet Candy Bowl world.

The story will follow along with the canon story as best as I can make it, and I will do my best to give you an entertaining superhero story with drama and cats.

Here is the first chapter. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6371509/1/Legacy

Here is the latest chapter. All Hell’s Eve! http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6371509/3/ The_Spectacular_Silver_Sentinel

http://www.bittersweetcandybowl.com/candybooru/ post/view/1930

So wait , is there a chapter two? Cause I see the first and the third chapter linked

I hope the fury of Zivix is something like Fawful.

3 typos/bad grammar I saw:

During the rescue of Carson: You has considered (should be have)

Near the end of the page, before switching to the aliens: And what were you doing during the whole thing? (This may be just me, but it doesn’t sound right)

4th line of the final section: …young Earthling. Fine him (find)

@Treeless, On the top and bottom right (I think bottom) there is a drop down menu of all the chapters.

“Greetings! I am of an ancient alien world you can not comprehend, and you, Silver Sentinal, have broken Ordinance 476.564.57 of the Murian Dictate, and need to pay this 150 Credit fine.
Sign here… and here… AAAND here.
Ok, you’re all set. Arrive in Court on the 82nd of Dorlon and you’ll be all set.
EVIL!”

Space politics. More dangerous than ANY alien monster or supervillain.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6371509/2/ The_Spectacular_Silver_Sentinel

Chapter 2, if you can’t find it.

And its Silver Sentinel, Gameking218. No a in the Sentinel.

Didn’t say it in my earlier post but I like this comic, it’s an interesting

-read, fail post sry lol

I’m glad you like it. Thank you. Stay tuned for more and for Michael’s first supervillain.

I like the name of said super-villain.

Huma?

For those curious, the Huma is a Persian, mythical bird. Like the Phoenix.

This is awesome. I had seen some of the art in the Gallery about the Silver Sentinel, but now i understand.

You’re writing is great, King, aside from a few grammatical errors here and there. I’m patiently waiting for Chapter 4.

Also, I want to make a video game out of this. Just sayin’.

Fair warning, updates may take a while for this story. I want to try and follow the plot of the actual comic, you know, to build a sense of drama of sorts. If it takes a long time or I have an idea I want to play out, I will update my story without letting Taeshi finish her chapter.

So don’t expect the next chapter until the middle of the after Halloween chapter.

http://www.bittersweetcandybowl.com/candybooru/ post/view/2089?search=king_%28artist%29

My friend is coloring this picture right now and she will hopefully be working on a comic for the fanfic.

The next chapter is kinda long. Thirteen pages. You guys want me to break it in two or just leave it? If no one responds, I’ll just leave it as is.

Up to you, if you feel it is too long then cut it. If you feel you can get away with it than just leave it as is

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6371509/4/

The Silver Sentinel VS Huma The Firecat.

Huma: I’m a bird, damn it!

oh man, and that was just 1 of 5 people that they have up there…

Does anyone think I’m using too many fancharacters? I know how Taeshi feels about most of them and I would like her to read my story….

I have self esteem issues.

there wouldn’t be able to be very many villainous characters without fancharacters really, unless every one of Mike’s friends turned evil and got superpowers, but that’d be lame.

…right?

That would be lame. Looong chapter this time. enjoyed the length, but not the wait. shorter chapters closer together updates, if you can manage it. Other than that, usual grammatical errors and good story and character portrayal.

Would not be surprised if King has a chapter planned where Lucy is kidnapped and is implanted with the nanobots.

Thanks for the reviews.

If someone can give me a more detailed look at my mistakes, that’d be great.

Also….I may or may not change ONE of Michae’s friends into a villain, but that would take a believable reason, good writing, and a nice costume.

most certainly a nice costume.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6371509/5/

There. Faster, but shorter, updates. I don’t know if I can KEEP doing this as I am busy with high school and other stories, but I’ll try.

This is the first chapter to NOT have a BCB character in it. Its more setup than anything else for the next chapter….If Taeshi is reading this, you may hit me.

Thank you, King!

No problem. I thank all of you for reading.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6371509/6/ The_Spectacular_Silver_Sentinel

NEW CHAPTER.

One thing that bothered me, Roseville, CALIFORNIA??? Does it snow in california? I don’t thinks so…

Do you live in California? Nope, didn’t think so ^_^

Forgot to read the last chapter…

Why did I think they were turned into the Yellow Devil from Megaman, but with sludge? Then it said there were no legs.
Next chapter…
Stupid LEGACY, Maishul tried to let Lucy down easy, but the next day she went bitch mode.

Ok well I don’t but it doesn’t make since. Unless of corse its northern California, but then he should have said something.

Generally people won’t give a crap about that kind of thing if it’s a well-written story ^_^

TK Maxx!!

When you said LEGACY was trying to be Mike’s Love Guru, I can’t stop thinking; LEGACY: Voiced by Mike Myers.

Great chapter, like the execution of the distrust idea.

I like California….Okay. So I had to pick a place, and I live in California, so…Yeah.

I sure as hell wasn’t going to pick NEW JERSEY!

I kid, I kid. No offense to Jersey people.

If anyone can give me a better place, I’ll edit it.

@ David Idea Inc.

I’m not perfect at writing drama. I’m much better at two people beating each other than two people being all….romancy.

LEGACY sucks at being a love guru.

Sometimes the light at the end of the tunnel isn’t the promised land…
It’s just New Jersey.

@King
I personally hate writing action. I would much rather write romance all day long.

Or Pittsburgh.

or where I live.

King, that’s kinda what I meant. LEGACY doesn’t get the whole picture from not understanding the emotions.

Oh. Then you’re spot on. Perhaps a few supervillains will fix Mike and Lucy’s relationship?

Oh, and does anyone know Mike’ little sister’s name?

The light at the end of the tunnel is the train coming in the other direction.

It’s a good story

The light at the end of the tunnel is the Batmobile.

@King
Used to be Cindy, but Taeshi changed it to a younger brother instead of a sister, named Chris. Or it got changed. All I know is it’s Cindy/Chris.
Oh! I got it!
The child is a shapeshifter with no definite gender. In an effort to learn his shapeshifting abilities he has the unfortunate inconvenience of flip flopping between genders, and as a result personas.
Obviously, that’s it.

Makes about as much sense as Huma the Firecat.
(I get hit by a fireball)
Huma: I’m a bird, damn it!

I’ll just keep it as a girl, and keep her name as Cindy.

Since Fanfiction is acting all bitchy, I’ll just upload the new chapter onto here directly, then Fanfiction.

Murky Waters

“…Any reason why you’re hanging outside my office?” Duncan asked as he looked away from his paperwork and saw the Silver Sentinel hovering outside his window, the sun setting behind him. The police chief opened the window and stepped back, letting him fly in.

“I take it you’ve read today’s newspaper?”

“I have…”

“And?”

“Officially, I condone your actions and will do everything in my power to bring you to justice. Unofficially, you are free to do as you please. But I’ll be watching. You’ve done good by me so far, Sentinel. I like to think you really are here to help…”

“I am. I promise, you won’t regret this,” the Silver Sentinel responded, before the door to the office was opened by a young, male cat officer.

‘Michael, time to go. ‘Sludge’ has appeared again,’ LEGACY stated.

“Sir, what should we do with-Sir, look out!” The cat pulled out his gun and aimed it behind the chief, his hands shaking as he looked at the Silver Sentinel.

Realizing what he had to do; Duncan spun around and gave a dramatic gasp, before drawing his own pistol. “What the heck are you doing in my office!?” He shouted, before pulling the trigger. By the time he and the younger officer did though, the Silver Sentinel was out the window. “I’m too old for all of this superhero nonsense,” the chief sighed, rubbing his forehead.

Our story now shifts to Jasmine and Paulo on their date, madly mashing buttons at the arcade, trying to beat the other at one of the many fighting games.

“Come on…Come on…” Paulo whispered, pressing down rapidly on the blue and red buttons, his other hand moving the joystick around. Jasmine was on the other side, fiercely doing the same, her tongue sticking out in a show of adorable determination.

In the end though, Jasmine jumped with joy as Paulo’s fighter screamed in pain, before dying. “Take that!” She yelled, pumping her fist into the air.
“Not bad, Jasmine,” the male cat smiled.

“Thanks. What do you want to play now?” The two linked their hands together and walked around the arcade. The carefree moment was put to a halt though as the Silver Sentinel was thrown through the wall, landing in front of them with the remains of the stone wall around him. “AHH!” Jasmine screamed as Sludge entered the arcade, his blood red eyes looking at them before it let out a loud roar.

The cats and dogs quickly began to run out of the arcade as the superhero and villain continued their fight. The slime monster grabbed the Silver Sentinel by his leg and slammed him into the stone wall, cracking it, before he threw him into arcade game, knocking it over.

Outside, Paulo and Jasmine had suddenly stopped as the girl looked behind her.

“My purse!”

“I’ll get it!” David smiled, jumping out of a nearby bush and smiling at the two.

“You were spying on us, again!?” The Somali cat growled.

“I told you I was doing my Final Fantasy Cat impersonation!” David responded as he ran into the arcade.

“David! Wait!” Jasmine screamed, following after the dog. “It’s too dangerous!”

“Jasmine…! Aw man,” the cat sighed, following after his girlfriend and best friend. The three teenagers ran into the damaged structure, and saw Sludge being thrown and crashing nearby.

“I got it!” David smiled, picking up a brown purse, before feeling something hit his head. “Ow. Huh? Uh oh,” he whispered, as the ceiling cracked and quickly crumbled, falling down on him.

“DAVID!” Jasmine and Paulo gasped. The Lab was saved though, by an unlikely hero. Sludge consumed the chocolate dog and quickly did the same for the couple, protecting the three of them within its slimy mass as the entire arcade fell apart.

Out of the rubble, the Silver Sentinel rose, untouched thanks to a powerful psychic shield. He saw a black, ball of slime covered in some debris and watched as it shook the broken ceiling off and spat out three teenagers.

“W-we’re alive?” Paulo realized, before smiling and hugging Jasmine. “We’re alive!”

“Thanks for saving us, Mr. Slime Monster,” David grinned. “High five!” He shouted, holding up a paw. Sludge looked at the teenager before simply nodding his head and gently patting his melted had with the teenager’s.

“You…you saved them. Um…Thank you,” Michael slowly said, walking closer to the black creature. Sludge looked at him and then looked at the kids before suddenly punching the silver superhero, sending him flying into some nearby power lines, electrocuting him. “Guh!”

“AHHH!” Sludge roared, pushing David to the ground and roaring again, scaring the three teenagers away. He then redirected his attention to the Silver Sentinel, finding the armored hero gone. The supervillain soon found itself crushed as the Sentinel flew down from above him, crushing him under a powerful telekinetic field. He quickly escaped though, by slipping through the cracks in the ground.

LEGACY, where is he?! Michael thought, quickly flying into the air for his own safety.
‘Do not ask me questions you know I cannot understand. I already stated I cannot detect this substance.’

“Look out behind you!” Paulo warned, pointing behind the Korat.

“What?” As soon as he turned around, the hero saw a tidal wave of slime behind him, which fell upon him and slammed him into the ground. “Get off!” He demanded, firing a shockwave of psychic energy, but the monster just took the place and continued to try and crush the superhero. “I said…GET OFF!” Sludge exploded and his pieces scattered everywhere, some of even getting on the few brave fools who had stayed to watch the fight. Michael rose up and looked at the goop, seeing that it was already beginning to form together again. ‘Please tell me you have a plan.’

‘I always do. Putting marker on your visor.’

Michael suddenly saw a pointer appear on his visor, and he turned his head to where it was pointing at. He saw a nearby manhole and nodded his head, running towards it. “Hey, Sludge! Come and get me!” The Sentinel threw the manhole cover off and jumped down into the not so spacious utility tunnel. The slime monster quickly followed, slipping down the hole and crawling over the pipes after the hero.

“AHHH!” He roared, its blood red eyes spying the silver superhero standing not too far from him. It jumped off the pipes and was about to consume the hero again, before the pipes around them suddenly broke; unleashing hot steam into the monster’s face. “AHHHH!” He screamed in pain as Michael ducked, causing Sludge to miss him and fall onto the ground. More of the pipes were broken by an invisible force, causing more steam to hit the mutated creature.

As Sludge screeched in agony, Michael kept breaking pipes, increasing the temperature in the tunnel. It did not take long for Sludge to be reduced to a bubbling, black puddle.

‘Is he…?’

‘He is still alive. Commence with deactivation of nanobots.’

The armored hero nodded and placed his hand on the puddle as the surrounding pipes were forced back together by his telekinetic might. A small spark was seen between his hand and the slime, before it began to change its shape and form, turning back into an unconscious Rick.

With a sign of relief, the Silver Sentinel carried Rick out of the tunnel and onto the surface. Soon, police cars and an ambulance arrived, but when they did, they found no traces of the Silver Sentinel. Just an unconscious Pug.

“Another failed experiment,” Zivix sighed, as his computer told him that the nanobots within Sludge had been deactivated. “This Silver Sentinel is powerful. But he can’t last forever.”

“Sir? What exactly do you plan on doing now?” His assistant, Alinor, questioned.

“Hmmm…Perhaps one experiment at a time just isn’t enough. Why don’t we go for two this time?” Zivix suggested, pressing a button on the console in front of him. A screen lit up and focused on the Siamese cat twins, Michiko and Akane.