Bittersweet Candy Bowl

Well, this is actually a story I made last year. I figured I should rewrite for Halloween.

Warning :
-Possible crappy English. If there’s any grammar error or something like that, please, tell me.
-This story have some disturbing things. This is why It is NSFW
-this story is told in first-person perspective. Well, At least it supposed to be.

Also, this is my first fiction I’ve ever posted on the Internet, so, if I made any mistakes,please excuse me,and help me to fix it.

First part


“ ….Good Morning, And you’re listening to The Voice Of truth, the news radio at 98.75 FM…..Last week, Three identical-looking teenage girls are reported missing in the Roseville Area. A search party has been assembled, but has not yet made any progress….”

That’s what the radio said that morning. Unpleasant news for breakfast, heh? Yes, three identical girls, missing. Here, in Roseville, where I live. I don’t really care about it, though.
I’m done with my breakfast. Now it’s time to go to school.

At school, everyone is talking about the missing girls. Paulo, Mike, Daisy, Tess, Sue,David….Everyone. This makes me sick. But that’s not enough, heh? They thought I’m going to be the next victim.

This happens at lunch time; we were sitting together, enjoying our meal. Everything is just fine until Paulo said; “Lucy, I think you shouldn’t go anywhere alone right now If you want to go somewhere…just…call me, okay?” .“What? Because of that…Missing girls?”, I responded. “Yes”. “Look, Lucy, there are already three girls missing. And they all look almost the same. Don’t you see the papers?” Said Mike. Yes, I’ve seen the missing girls’ portrait in the papers. They have two things in common; White fur, and are around 14 to 16. Same as me. “Look, I’ll be fine” I said. I’m a bit scared, actually, but I don’t want anyone to be concerned about me. “heh, wonder why they’re missing?” Ask Tess. “Well, I heard they got kidnapped” said Daisy. “The motives are unknown, however” She adds. Okay, the bell rings, and we returned to our class.

From Lucy’s point of view?
EDIT: Don’t bother replying ^_^

@ Sammy : yes.

Second part

Everything goes normally after that. Nothing serious. Although that missing girls still haunt my taught. Well, it’s 4 p.m., now. Time to go home. I walked to home alone. I must’ve forgotten what Paulo said earlier. On the way home, someone approaches me. young adult. Wearing a trench coat and his eyes have different colors. “Excuse me, miss” he said. “Yes?” I responded, feeling scared. “I’m sorry, but do you know where the minimarket is? I’m new, here.” Ask the guy. “Oh, it’s over there, In front of the pharmacy” I said, feeling a bit relieved. “Oh, thanks” said the guy. He left. I don’t really think about him anymore after that.

So, I arrived at home….Doing things I always do; put my bag, Take a shower, eat, and relax. It’s a pretty tiring day. I stayed home until I Paulo called. He asked me to come to his house to do our homework together. So, I went to Paulo’s home. On the way there, I saw the trench coat guy again. Sitting on a bench. He stares at me. I didn’t think much about that, though, I already got used being stared by guys…or perverts.

Part three

I arrived at Paulo’s home at 5 p.m. I greet his parents, and went to his room. He waited there. So, we started to do our homework. In the middle of it, Paulo asks, “Lucy…have you met someone weird today?”. “ Yeah. One guy. I think he’s 20 or something. He wore a trench coat, and said that he’s new, here”. “Oh…I saw him too. He has Heterochromia, Right? I saw him in the minimarket” Said Paulo. “Then looks like we both have seen this guy” I said. “He kinda looks suspicious for me, Kinda like Augustus.” Said Paulo. “You should be careful”. “Don’t worry, Paulo. I’ll be fine. I can take care of myself, you know. You needn’t worry.” I said.


Two hours passed. We finally finished our homework. He treated me with some rock candies and soda. I decided to leave after I finished them. And It’s dark out there. “You want me to walk you home?” Ask Paulo. “…no. Don’t worry. I can walk myself home.” I said. “Look…this is not the right time for you to be a stubborn girl, okay…Now let me…” “No, don’t worry. I’ll be fine. I have a pepper spray here in my pocket” I said. “Well….okay then. Do be careful”. I kissed him goodbye, and went home.

Part four

It was about 7.15 p.m. I’m on my way home now. And the streets are empty. The stores are closed. I’m all alone, and I noticed that the trench coat guy is right behind me. I think he was following me. Scared, I decided to take prepare my pepper spray. And think of a strategy…something like that. Just to make sure whether he’s really following me or not. 10 meters in front of me, there’s an alley way. I decided to enter the alley. I think, if he walks pass the alley, it means he’s not following me. If he entered the alley, that mean he’s following me. He entered the Alley.
Now I knew that I’m being followed, I turn back, tried to spray his eyes with my pepper spray…but too late. I felt an electric shock in my back.And I lost my consciousness.

Part five
WARNING : THIS IS THE MOST DISTURBING PART

I awakened, and found myself inside some sort of house, tied on a chair, naked. Shocked, I struggled, tried to break free, but I can’t. My Cunt…It felt sore…There’s blood on it. God. Looks like someone just took my virginity while I’m knocked out. I started to cry…And I noticed that there’s three other chair right in front of me. I saw three girls sitting on the chair. And they’re already stiff. I can see some flies flying over their heads. I shouted, Cried. And someone came in. It’s the trench coat guy. He grins, and said, “Why are you crying, girl? Why…don’t….you…smile?” He takes his trench knife, and…and…and…..

I’m scared….

NOW DIS IS A KNOIFE!

STABBIN’ TIME!

STAB STAB STAB!

Anyway, is not really that disturbing.

Freaked out. That is pretty disturbing. You better be a girl! cause when boys write that stuff it just shows that 1. their perverts 2. they, like bad stuff like that happening to girls or they really want to do ‘that’ to a girl

sexist much?

what dose it mean when a girl writes that then?

is that the end of the fan fic? anti climax check.

@magical : well, it’s not finished yet. I’ll post the climax today…or tonight.

Dirt, STFU&GTFO

oh, OK.
not to you sammy

yea after reading “Love me” there’s pretty much nothing that will disturb me, until i forget about it at least

@ treeless Druid
I think you need to search blue waffle up in google immages

Or the Three Carter fanfic, seriously should never had been made

See wakes up naked…

Thats very strange since she is usually naked anyway.

No virginity, not surprised, most likely gone anyway.

Other than those, decent story.

@magical, nah I found the fanfic a bit worse than that, it’s more the whole intense pain that occurs in the story than disgusting things

@ dotzrus : …you make a good point. Well, okay, let’s just say that she wore some clothes now. Thanks for pointing my mistakes…

Meh. Not scary at all.

(Climax?)

“……Good Morning, And you’re listening to The Voice Of truth, the news radio at 98.75 FM….Yesterday, Police arrested a man who is found to be the kidnapper of four girls who went missing three months ago in Roseville area. The Kidnapper’s name Is Peter Lloyd, a 20 years old male. Police found and arrested him near an abandoned house in Roseville area. The Officers who were assigned to search the house are shocked to found all the victims, dead on the second floor of the abandoned house, Tied on a chair, and each have been given a Glasgow smile. At the house’s basement, Police also found a decaying body of a teenage boy, who is later identified as Carson, Who has been missing since last Halloween…..”

I read that, and the whole story suddenly became funny.

Then I realized that you were saying that the kidnapper killed Carson, not that he was Carson, and I went to ‘Huh? What did he do to piss him off?’

He killed ALL of them,

DUDE KILLED A MAIN CHARACTER.

wow

its just… wow

how could you find it in you to kill Lucy

i mean its your fanfic, but… whew.

oh yeah, glasgow smile, REALLY creepy.

uh…just want to tell you, the ‘abandoned house’ here is the same house where lucy and her friends left carson.
I…just think you should know

It pretty much says it in the comic/fanfic.

how did no one get that?

…anybody want an alternate ending?

if it makes the obvios clearer to people without being stupid somhow.

And I mixed up Carson and Carters’ names. Again. Like I always do.

Ok, that makes sense, then.

@the one with a lot of numbers in his name

You dont have to have an alternate ending if you like what you have.

I personally dont care

Just dont add a time paradox or everything will get screwed (like Lucy).

(Warning-Disturbing Content, and might offend some people)

Peter Lloyd’s Arrest File

I want to end this story with this.

…Well then…That was…Messed up. I like how you gave us the police report.

People love killing characters!

Thanks for the heads up, but after that freaking ‘love me’,
this isn’t going to mess with my mind…

People love killing lucy O.o
Why doesn’t someone write a normal fanfic?

@migrant : Honestly, I don’t killing her. She’s my favorite…. but the story demands it. Someone must be killed.

I actually wrote this for a writing competition, two years ago (it’s not “last year” as I mentioned above, I checked the date and It’s actually 2008!) , And this story, at first, has no relevance with BCB, but I figured I should re-write it for a Halloween post in the forums, and make it more…BCB. Also, “Peter” is actually a human, not a cat, nor a fanchar.

At first, I don’t Intend to kill Lucy.

In the first re-write, Lucy actually woke up before she got raped. Peter got mad, and took his knife and tried to kill her. but just before peter delivered his first stab, Paulo comes with the others, and knock Peter out, and turning him in to the police. Lucy lives, But traumatized. (and afraid of trench coat and trench knifes from then on, aside from water) then in the anti-climax, Lucy is being treated by a psychiatrist.

I scrapped this Ending and replaced with the one I posted, The original ending, Because I figured it would be scarier and more disturbing that way…But I still lost to “Love Me”, Am I not? It’s way more disturbing.

Maybe I should write or draw a Guro story next time.

And….About the normal fanfic….I’m sorry, But I’m used to write horror fictions….I watch slasher film too much.

Binary said: Maybe I should write or draw a Guro story next time.

Noooo!!! No more of tis shit!! Write some indiana jones adventure or some friggin drama! What’s with the disturbing rape/murder stories??

EDIT: I don’t mean the story was badly written, just the shitty genre, is all.

(EDIT 2: You name always reminds me of a joke. “There are only 10 types of people in the world: Those who understand binary, and those who don’t!&rdquo

@ Migrant : no…I’m just kidding….Sorry if I annoy you. I can understand many people don’t like the genre.

hey, thanks for your suggestion! I’ll try to write an adventure story, then.

And oh, just want to tell you, I actually wrote some sort of…adventure story, Which is, unfortunately, A post-zombie apocalypse story, like the one Kirkiss wrote in “Left 4 LOL” thread. But It set in Bali, and I left it unfinished, because I don’;t have much time, and suffered from writer’s block….

And I think I need to read or watch more adventure or drama story from now on.

oh, don’t worry… ahn, 1010011010101 (random 0s and 1s)

You DON’T want to be “better” than Love me.
I still have nightmares with that >_<

@Migrant,
hehe, too bad that joke can only be written, it’s hard to tell it xD

Zombie stories are cool, as long as they don’t get too gory. I actually mind gory movies a lot less than stories. I guess because of the difference in pace and the higher level of involvement with stories in text, it just becomes much more horrible.

But yeah, write an adventure story, that would be cool. Have someone wearing a cowboy hat for no apparent reason.

Also, no need to apologise, I read the warnings and decided to read the story anyway, so my own fault, I guess.

@ Lyucs : I don’t. But if there’s a horror story competition , Yes.

Wait…10 people? you mean 2, right? I get it. (10->2)

Binary.
10 is 2.
That’s the joke =D
Sorry for ruining your joke, migrant xD

Hey, where did your name come from, anyway?

@lycus : are you asking migrant, or me?

I’m Lyucs! Lyyyyyuuuucssss!

>_< *sob*

I was asking you, 101010 dear.
its so hard to write your name

Just call him binary.

@lyucs :Migrant is right. Also, sorry…I typed your name wrongly.

Well,
01 = 1 = “A”
10010 = 18 = “R”
1011 = 11 = “K”

01-10010-1011 = “A.R.K.” , the initial of my character.

not to be confused with Ark, another guy in the forum. I believe our similarities is a mere coincidence. So, I’d prefer being called, “binary guy”

I knew it had to be something like that.
but I changed for numbers so it went
only 1-18-11. No meaning.

Cool name.
Binary guy.

about my name, its okay, I joke around about it, but it doesn’t really bug me =D

EDIT- because of an earlier post on this thread, I thought you were a girl >_<
That’s why I added the ‘dear’ in my last post.
Sorry ‘bout that.
ILB is rejoicing.