Bittersweet Candy Bowl

#1 It will get more interesting.

#2 No, its Dotzrus online

Do you need more info for my characters?

Not now.

Chapter 12
You In?


To make it quick, all of the fainted guys were dragged home, and David was held down and tossed into his front door. Mike said goodnight, Amaya went home, and Dominic went to his tree.

NEXT FLIPPIN DAY!!


Not a cloud in the sky, sun is shinning all of its light onto this morning. Saturday. The beginning of a beautiful weekend. Mike walked to the tree to greet Dominic. He wasn’t there. Mike got together with the rest of the gang who discussed about Dominic’s true form. They all found him in the middle of the local park as a cat again, sitting in some shaded grass, meditating.

“Uh, hi Dominic.” Mike said with confusion in his voice.

“Shouldn’t you all be in school.”

“It’s the weekend. No school. Whatcha doing?”

“Feeling the Cosmic Order around me, feeling all living things around me, sensing their every move without seeing, hearing, or touching. That’s why I knew that all of you were here without looking at you and that David is picking his nose behind all of you.”

They all turned to David, who was indeed, picking his nose.

“Aww man. Not cool dude.”

“Grooooss!” the girls all cried.

“Anyway, I sense you have questions for me, and do believe I owe you answers. But let me start you off. My name is Dominic, I am an Elemental, my species is a Neo Alpha. I can control many of the nature Elements and some not so natural. I came here from another Universe in search of an artifact here. I also came here for some R&R but it seems your troubles won’t even let that happen. I did not mean for me to cause any trouble, but Mike was kind enough to offer his friendship, which I grateful for.”

“Prove it.” it was Abbey again, crossing his arms in disbelief.

“Alright, you all deserve proof too.”

Dominic then held out his hand to the nearest water fountain. He closed his hand and the fountain exploded!

“Holy shit!!” Paulo yelled.

But Dominic continued his demonstration, he open his hand and slightly waved it around and the fountain reformed back together, in one piece. Then he held his up to them and a flame out of nowhere appeared in hand. It wasn’t burning him. He then changed it into water which he then threw at Mike. The ball of water hit him square in the face. Then Dominic stood up and held his hand up to Mike, and with a quick reflex, wind started coming out of Dominic’s hand and dried Mike off.

“Anything else?”

Everyone else shook their heads no, except for Abbey who countered,

“Tricks, illusions, a.k.a., FAKE.”

Daisy looked at him hurt at his unwillingness to believe. Then Dominic looked at all of them and with a big smile said,

“You want to try it?”

Haaahahaa! This will probably cause them some trouble.

You have no fucking idea

Chapter 13
Fire, Water, Earth, Air; With your powers combined, I am Captai…
Ahh screw it.


“You mean your going to give us powers?” Tess asked baffled by the fact.

“Yes.”

“So we can fight bad guys?” David blurted.

“Sure.”

“Do we get to choose?” This time it was Mike.

“You have already chosen.”

“WHEN??” they all asked.

“Your personalities have already given me decision of what to give you, to do this you must obey three rules.”

“What?”

“1. You must NEVER use you power in front of others without powers useless it is a time of great crisis or someone’s life is threatened.

2. You must swear to go though the training, ALL OF IT.

3. You must TRUST me.”

“What if we don’t follow these rules.” Abbey wanted to know.

“Well, then I would have to kill you.”

They all turned to Dominic in shock.

“Your bluffing.” Abbey continued on.

Dominic out of nowhere formed a dark blue sword with strange markings on it and held it up to Abbey’s neck. The cold metal gave Abbey goose bumps.

“This is a Chaos Long Sword, crafted from Adamantium, which means it can cut though pure diamond, and still come back for more, or I could drop the sword, and create a mini black hole in your chest causing you to implode. Either way, your silenced.”
They all stared at Dominic in silence, was he really capable of doing such powerful and destructive things? What was he planning to do if he gave them all Elemental powers?



Wait til Next Time!

…. That is one way to shut someone up.

Yeah, right.
‘STFU or I’ll make you implode’
Try to make a comeback for that :/

Your story actually reminds me of a story I made way back, about elements and stuff, but aliens weren’t involved.

Anyways, cool story, bro.

Well, to clarify, Dominic isn’t an alien. I consider aliens the green things with massive heads. David is too stupid to realize that though.

Elections are finally over, no more damn commercials for two years

Chapter 14
Unleash Your Inner Self


“Well, are you in? I won’t kill you if you say no. You simply move back to your lives, and as an added bonus, I’ll stay out of your lives, it’ll be like I was never here. What do you think?”

The rest of the group shifted uneasily. Daisy looked at Abbey with intensity knowing at what he was thinking.

“Well…” Mike stopped, everyone looked at him for speaking. Then he continued,

“Could we make up our minds and tell you tomorrow?” he finally said.

“Sure, I’m not in any rush, please take your time. I understand its’ a life changing decision.”

And with that, Dominic opened a portal with a motion of his hand, he walked through, and the portal disappeared.

“That was cool!” David yelled.

“Yeah…cool” Mike whispered.

The group went their separate ways, thinking about their choice to make. Mike heard from behind him,

“I’m not doing it.” It was Lucy.

“Why?”

“I don’t trust him.”

“Why wouldn’t you trust him?”

“Why would anyone just walk into our lives just to give us unimaginable powers free of charge? Sounds pretty suspicious.”

Mike then thought of the truth behind that. But then Sandy came to his mind. These powers might give him a chance to see her.

“I’m doing it.”

“WHAT?” Lucy yelled.

“I trust him. I don’t know about you, but I’m going to do it, and you can just stay here and have a boring ordinary life while I’m doing the incredible.”

With that, Mike stormed off. Lucy was left there, crying. She didn’t trust Dominic, but she didn’t want to give up Michael, not yet. She ran home.

Goodnight and Good bye.

Oh lucy you’re so horridly conflicted. That is actually pretty close to how she would act.

Where is the first Forum entry that this originated from? I’ve seen it before, but I can’t find it anymore.

Anyway, it’s an awesome story so far. I do have to be a grammar nazi for a moment and say; you have a tendency to write periods instead of question marks. I urks me.

I’m waiting for more!

There, i found the Forum post, and made some comments as well as a character bio, because this is amazing. Whether you want to use him or not, that’s up to you. I can’t make you change your mind, it has to be your choice.

…Great, now you’ve got me quoting the story.

(Positive enforcment)

l2grammar
your =/= you’re

Although this does have an intriguing (lol@spelling) storyline. Keep it up

Dude. I get you want your fic noticed. But Don’t spam my famcomic thread! That’s just not cool.

Long Live Dotzrus!

Just to clarify to those who want a certain fan character in, they will not appear until the main characters are more attuned to the Elements, blah, blah ,blah, and more outer worldly things start to appear.

Note: Dominic is Chaos, which means he fights for good when Evil is more powerful and vis versa. That means when he fought for Evil, he made many enemies who will hunt him down.

Chapter 15
A New Virtue:
Trust


…The Next Day…


Sunday morning, Mike finally woke up after sleeping in. He heard a noise from his window. Ting. Then he heard it again. Ting. He crawled out of bed to the window. TING.
He opened the window and a rock smashed him square in the face. Everyone was in Mike’s yard, looking up at the window for Mike. Then they all looked at David who was the one throwing the stones. Mike got his scarf, grabbed some buttered toast and before he got out the door,

“What happened to your nose?” it was Mike’s mom.

“Guess I slept on it wrong.”

“Do you need a bandage?”

“No, I’ll be fine.”

‘After I beat the living daylights out of David.’ Mike said to himself.

“Alright, have a good time with your friends.”

“Thanks, see ya mom!”

Mike ran out to greet his friends. He looked at David and pummeled his face left and right until Sue and Tess held him back. Paulo laughed with Jasmine, and Lucy just stared at them, emotionless. They all walked to the park. Dominic wasn’t there. Then a flash of red light appeared above them. It got brighter and a man landed in front of them. He looked like Dominic’s true form but with different features and clothes. He had a strange symbol on his chest like Dominic’s, but backwards. He then spoke with a dark voice,

“Greetings, my name is Insanity, servant of Unity. Do you know if there are any warriors of Chaos here that I may purify them this world?”

Everyone looked at the man, thinking of whether or not to answer him. He clearly wanted Dominic, but to purify him, whatever he meant by that. They notice his sword, gun, and what looked like an orb of some sort, things that one would usually bring if one was trying to be friendly.

‘TELL ME WHERE THE CHAOS INFECTION IS NOW!!” Insanity boomed.

His quick tempered shocked all of them. Paulo started to back away when the man drew his sword.

“YOU ARE ALL CORRUPTED! YOU MUST ALL BE PURIFIED IN THE NAME OF UNITY!!”

Insanity approached them slowly. Tess tried to run away but ran into nothing. It was like an invisible barrier! He was almost within slicing range when he felt a tap on his shoulder.

“Hey, creeper.” Insanity turned around to see Dominic, “Leave them kids alone.”

Dominic then punched the man in the face so hard that it sounded like all of Insanity’s bones in his face broke. Insanity got up and swung his sword at Dominic but each slice was parried by Dominic’s sword. Then Insanity drew his gun and fired what looked like an intense beam of energy which Dominic just vanished into thin air and reappeared behind the man. Dominic then took the butt of his sword and smashed Insanity in the back of the head, bringing him down to the ground.

“Teleporting, no fair” Insanity groaned.

“No, I just faster than you.”

Then Dominic held his hand up to Insanity and suddenly, Insanity caught on fire. Insanity didn’t do anything but stand up.

“Ha, I to control Elements, fire does not hurt me.”

Just then Insanity waved his hand at Dominic which caused spikes of earth to come out of the ground to impale Dominic. Dominic then quickly maneuvered to avoid the deadly spikes and shot a ball of darkness at Insanity hitting him in the chest making him unable to move. Before Insanity got up, Dominic was on top of him with his sword and another identical sword(which came out of nowhere) to Insanity’s neck.

“Curse you, you scourge of the Cosmos. Chaos will never take over the Cosmos.”

“Unfortunately, Chaos isn’t the one trying to assimilate all living things under tyranny. Unity is the true enemy to all, not Chaos, Chaos simply keeps balance.”

Insanity turn his head to Mike and the others,

“Do not believe his lies, he will kill you when you back is turne…”

And with that, Dominic pulled both of his identical blades together, killing Insanity. Dominic then stood up and with a wave of his hand, Insanity’s body disintegrated. He then turned to them,

“Sorry about that, happens all the time if your someone like me. But please ignore this bastard, Unity scouts are thick-headed and large temper, but there’s more of him where that comes from… Anyway, did you make up your mind?”

They all couldn’t get out of their mind of what Insanity said. Don’t trust him. Don’t trust him. He’ll kill you. He’ll kill you. But then Mike stepped forward and proudly stated,

“I’m in.”

Yeah, first fight scene.

And so 1/6 of me dies. We’re down to the true 5 parts of me now.

I’ll probably sound like a grammar nazi, but you should proofread your stories, and after that, have somebody else proofread them before posting them.

Just a thought.

@Light
Don’t worry, you can’t go INSANE anymore.

@Boom
Ok, you still understand it though, right?

Chapter 16
Everybody Only Gets One.


“I want to join.” Mike continued.

The rest of them were stunned, but then Paulo stepped forward,

“I’m in too.”

“Same here,” it was Jasmine.

“Count me in.” David said cheerfully, “ I want to fight bad guys.” Kizuna was right behind him happy to be near David,

“Might as well.” McCain said quietly.

“Don’t forget us.” Sue said while looking at Amaya who nodded happily.

“This will be fun,” Tess was walking towards the group.

“Me too.” Daisy said in a firm voice.

Everyone looked at her with concern, but not for her. They all looked at Abbey who was in shock at Daisy’s reply.

“But he killed that man…”

“If he didn’t do it, he would have killed us. Dominic was trying to protect us, don’t you understand Abbey.” Daisy said while giving a sad look at Abbey who was stuck.

Tears were coming out his eyes when he heard his girlfriends final answer. He stuttered until,

“Fine… I’ll do it, BUT NOT FOR HIM!! I’m only doing it for you, Daisy.”

They hugged, then everyone turned to Lucy who was staring at her friends in disbelief.

“I…I…I don’t know.” she started crying. The girls went to comfort her.

“It’ll be okay, you can trust him, you can trust all of us. We would never let anything happen to you,” Sue said with a comforting voice. Lucy looked up with blurred eyes at Mike who turned away. She continued crying until…

“I’ll try.”

They all hugged. Except for Dominic who all of a sudden, saw a vision, he was used to it before, comes with powers of Chaos, unpredictable, this, he could easily tell was a futuristic vision. He saw Mike, on his knees, looking at a white cat with black hair that Dominic had not seen, Mike was crying and turned around to see Lucy. But she was different, she had Unity symbols on her. She showed no fear or sadness, only anger and hate. Mike backed away and Lucy walked slowly toward him with a metal glove with long claws, with blood on them. The vision blacked out, and Dominic heard a boy scream.

He opened his eyes to reality. Lucy was happy again and everyone ready for the once in a lifetime chance to get these powers Dominic promised. Dominic had this happen many times before, but he knew that there are many different possible futures, this could have been one out of a thousand different futures, time could only tell. But for know…

“Good, I’m happy your all in. I will grant you your powers tomorrow and begin training. I need rest, all of us do. So…… Goodnight.”

They all were surprised at what he had just said. They just got there and it was 9:00am. Mike looked at his watch and saw the time was 7:00pm. They all saw Dominic walking away when David blurted,

“Hey Mr. Dominic, HOW OLD ARE YOU??”

Dominic stopped, turned, smiled, and walked away.

“If I told you that, you would wet yourself.” he said to himself.

And probably not count the # of zeros

I was thinking of saying 3,000,000

but…

Oh well thats acceptable too. I meant that he would say a word that they recognized and knew was huge but didn’t know the # of zeros it represented.

Like…

Supagatrillion…

Chapter 17
Intermission
Slumber Party, Part 1

The girls came to a decision to have a slumber party before they were giving Elemental powers as celebration. Before going to Tess’s house for the party, they told the guys.

“That’s stupid, why would you celebrate if your going to be yelled at, overworked, and using every muscle to the limit. Training isn’t fun. Abbey pointed out.

“Can I come, PLEASE!” Paulo begged.

“NO!! Girls only, and were going to invite ALL of the local girls.” Sue confirmed.

“All of them, and you plan to tell them that you have a friend from outer space who is going to you super powers out of friendship?” Mike countered.

“No. Were going to tell them that it’s just a party, for no reason, but just for fun.” Tess finished.

The girls all walked away leaving the boys alone, to themselves.

“This sucks. It could have been more fun with one guy, me, and all of the local girls.” Paulo moaned.

Then they all heard a voice from behind them,

“Ah, women, still the one thing that’s still a mystery to me.” it was Dominic.

“Oh, hey Dom.” David said sadly.
“DON’T CALL ME DOM!” he shouted, “I’m not a big fan of nicknames.”

“Sorry.”

“It’s okay. So they dump you or something.”

“Their having a girls only slumber party. I personally think it’s stupid.” Mike replied.

“Oh well, that they way women are.”

“Didn’t you say you had a girlfriend?” Paulo suddenly asked.

“Yes, except that were actually married. I didn’t want to tell you that because I didn’t want you to think I was one of those ‘Have sex, get married early’ people.”

“Oh, all right.” Mike said thinking about Sandy.

“So, you guys want in on this party?”

“WHAT?” they all shouted.

“Well, there are two things I could do. One, I could make strange things happen that would ruin the party, like making all of the food levitate and hit people, or make the lights flicker constantly and make creepy noises that usually scare girls that age, or infest it with insects. Either way, we get a laugh.”

“And option number two?” Abbey asked interested in Dominic’s plan.

“Or… I could transform us all into girls, and we could go into the party, and learn some of their secrets, disguised as girls, although I’m worried that David would ruin it.”

“No I wouldn’t!” David reacted.

“Oh don’t give me that. If I turned you into a girl, you would feel your breasts the entire time.”

David shut up, he knew Dominic was right, the others laughed.

“Same goes for you Paulo, you would play spin the bottle with the girls, and tell them to take their tops off.”

Once again, Dominic was right.

“Anyway, what’s your choice?” Dominic finally asked.

“OPTION TWO!!” Paulo and David yelled.

“I’m okay with #2.” McCain said.

“I’ll go with two.” Abbey replied, actually liking Dominic’s plan.

“It’s all up to you Mike.” Dominic looked at him waiting for the finally answer.

Mike grew an enormous grin,

“Let’s do it.”

Testosterone boost.

This is getting really interesting. Also, I laughed REALLY HARD when you did the:

“Hey creeper. Leave them kids alone.” Thing there. I saw what you did there.

Thanks.

Hmm… this last chapter made me have nasty thoughts…

Mikayla(girl mike) x Lucy

>=3

Chapter 17’
Intermission
Slumber Party, Part 2


“Ready?” Dominic said calmly, noticing the other guys nervousness.

“Okay, were ready.” Mike answered for all of them.

Dominic, without another word lifted his hand at the other guys and a light radiated from them. Their physical forms were changing, they were getting shorter, thinner, prettier, and LARGER CHESTED! Dominic looked at his work and smiled.

“Well, how do we look?” Mike asked in his new feminine voice.

“Good, good,” Dominic said embarrassed, “Just a few minor details to fix.”

Dominic raised his hands at Mike and McCain, McCain’s clothing turned into a dress and Mike’s scarf turned into a bow.

“That’s better.” Dominic then looked at David, who was crying.

“Now what? Breasts too small.” Dominic said angrily.

“NO! NO! NO! MY DICK IS GONE!” David screamed.

Then all of the guys looked down and moaned at the agonizing fact.

“Well, that’s what happens when you’re a girl, just live with it, you’ll get it back before the night is over.” Dominic said ashamed at the guys immaturity.

“Do we have til Midnight like Cinderella?” Abbey asked looking at his sexy tail.

“No, I will turn you back once were done. Just try to stay calm and act girly, I guess.”

Then Dominic was engulfed in a cloud of smoke and emerged as a dark grey female cat, very attractive, and with a beautiful voice.

“Alright girls, lets party.”

They walked toward Tess’s house, the music could be heard from around the block. They turned the corner and saw have many girls there were. There were about 250 and a lot of security guards walking around.

“Don’t worry, we have the best disguise, just look.”

They looked at what Dominic was pointing at, it was Carson, crying, he had been kicked out. Then there was Carter with cheap lipstick on and a box on his ear.

“I Love Lucy.”

The guys(girls, but you get the point) walked toward the door and were stopped by a hulking security guard.

“Names.”

Dominic spoke up,

“My name is like, Darby(Dominic), this is like Michaela(Michael), Patricia(Paulo), Monica(McCain), Abigail(Abbey), and Danielle(David), and were here to party!”

“Go through.”

They all walked in nervously and Dominic turned to them,

“And that’s how done girls. Remember the plan, no screwing around, and if you have to go to the bathroom, HOLD IT.”

It was going to be a long night.

To.. many..rrur things to say.
Overloading on…. irrelivancy!
“each slice was parried by Dominic’s sword”. You don’t parry a slice, you parry stabs.
Referance of family guy referancing spiderman lol.(“everybody gets one&rdquo
rule 63?
age is over nine thousand!

@Dirt

I understand:

1.Parry comment
2.Family Guy
3.Over 9000

What’s rule 63?

I take it back:

Rule 63 is a rule of the internet that reads as follows: “For any given male character, there is a female version of that character.” This rule’s exceptions are only in the instance that A: the male character is already so androgynous that a female version would be basically the same, or B: the female version hasn’t been drawn yet.

Google’s an amasing thing, yes?

Yes, but i used Urban Dictionary

Okay, I need a lesbian fan character QUICK!!

Someone who would stalk one of our trans-sexual characters.

Ideas, names, personalities, ANYTHING!

Hurr, hurr…
Reaches only to 47, tho…


Anyways, liking it very much.

Use everyone’s attraction to mike in a subconscious manner.
Have them act strainge. you couldn’t have them go to far indevidualy though.

That’s an idea.

And lusy would be the perfect candidate as she is unaware, boyfriendless, dislikes most boys by default, and would eventually suspect mike. She would totally be hitting on mike until she figured it out. She should be pretty desperate for some love just like she has been in the commic. Her only mental blocks are discomfort with people and her dislike of girlish activities.

edited out

…in due time…