Bittersweet Candy Bowl

yes….Oh yes…

http://tinypic.com/r/2e52ult/7

Ah, young love. So cute.

SHUT UP BARK BARK BARK.

D’awww :3 Hope it all goes well… welcome to the long, slippery slope

I gots a girlfriend

Above is full of win

Nice. Her handwriting makes me judge her for the worse, though.

Congratulations!

I am positively happy for you!
Congratz!

I’m so lonely… : D
jk, Rock On!

Welcome to the rollercoster man

I agree with Suitcase, that was just a whole bunch of cute

Congratulations my friend! Actually…. you’re more like that guy who posted I’m relying to than a friend… Actually, you’re exactly that… Either way! I hope your relationship is a long and prosperous one, comrade!

you do know that there was obvously more to that note so try reading it its easy to say that it was something important because its at the end

Ow, eyes hurting from lack of punctuation…
Other than that, good on ya, mate! So when’s the marriage??

Aww. Do take good care of her, now. ^_^

Awwww,How sweet!!

well congratulations. god bless.

Hmmm… Well I’ve never heard of John, Hannah, Cody or Avery… So it looses marks for being so full of fan characters. But it’s hand written and done in a refreshingly new style, so it may yet be salvageable!

Now, grammar and spelling are a bit of an issue, the most notable being the complete almost lack of any real punctuation beyond the occasional capital letter. This could just be the character’s own inexperience though, and since we’re reading something they’ve created that can slide.

What you wanna watch out for is the fact that allot of these sentences run together and it gets a little confusing as to the meaning. Though, the structure is reminiscent of someone who doesn’t speak English as their first language. Again, this may be in character, but we want the narrative to flow smoothly above whether or not it’s true to the character.

Lines like “Do you understand me so makes no sense hopefully better than Avery a whole lot better.” are really hard to follow and make coherent sense of. If you could polish up things like this, then I think that the whole endeavor could very well be-

What?

What do you mean it’s not a fanfic?

…

Errr…

Congratulations! I ummm… I hope you two are very happy together ^^;

This makes those condoms your mom bragged about giving you soooo much more awkward now

…O.O

Wut

Lolwut*

Best of Luck!

Congratulations! She sounds nice, hope you two are happy together

@jerk
Of course

@everyone else
THANKS!

Her grammar….ugh

good luck

She said yes… the must post this.
On the internet!

This topic has been “Sandvich” approved…that automatically makes your relationship with her destined to be a success. Good luck you crazy cats.

Good Job, Man. Good Job.

i’m also waiting for her to say yes. wish me luck!

i tryed asking somone out, She said no… oh well, Shit happens.