Bittersweet Candy Bowl

Just though if this cool chapter of Lucy,Mike &,Sandy just know

(this chapter happens after Mike Finally Found Sandy)
(if that chapter ever happens)

This Chapter is Called ” Hacked !! ”

” Part 1 ”

it goes like this…….

Mike just Discover a really cool online game. he so good at it that he has special items that no one else has in the game does.

But!!!! 1 day Mike as Sandy to keep an eye on his Account while his out grocery shopping.

Mike: Sandy ill be out grocery shopping to buy something for lunch.
can do me a favor to keep an eye on my PC for me while im gone?

Sandy : Sure Maishul Hurry back OK?♥

Mike: Thanks Sandy i wont be long OK bye……♥

After Mike left Sandy’s now keeping an eye on Mike’s account. Then suddenly she saw someone advertise a site in the game.
she visited that site and it said, they will give free items in game. (just put the players username & password in this site and the free items will automatically be place on the players account).
Well Sandy wanted to do something nice to Mike while his gone like getting those free items.

then quickly without thinking Sandy Place Mike’s Account on the site. how did she know his account? (she saw it written in a piece of paper right next to the keyboard -_-).

then after she place Mike’s Account, the client of this was disconnected. she opened again and Mike’s items where all gone!!

Sandy: Amm??? where’s are the free items? and where are all Maishul’s items go???………Oh..no…

” End of part 1 “

” Part 2 ”

(Sandy was Shock of what shes done to Mike’s Account).

She didn’t realize the site that she visited was actually a hacked site
made by that jerk from chapter 60 from “Mischief Night” who gave Lucy & others those FREAKEN CANDYCORN!! from last Halloween.

(mean while some other side of the neighborhood)

Jerk Kid: Hahaha !! this is toooooooooo easy !! Stealing others items is like taking candy from a baby !! Hahaha !! Id bet that kid’s crying about his lost items from him mommy Buhhhhhuuuuuu!!! HAHAHA!!

(Back to Sandy)

Lucy take a visit from Mike’s place.

Lucy: Hellooo???……Mike you Home????…….ehh his probably out. well since im here i might as well grab a snack and wait for him.

Then Lucy heard someone crying coming from Mike’s Room.

Lucy: Sandy???……what’s wrong??

Sandy: ohh…..sob…..it’s you Lucy…….sob….i did a bad thing….sob..

Lucy: a bad thing? what are you talking about?

Sandy: Id Visited this site…….sob……that said free items……sob….from where Maishul’s plays……sob……id try to put his account on that site……sob to get those free items….. sob….after that i log-in Maishul’s account again his I….items…..WHERE ALL GONE !!!!!……sob…..sob……

(Sandy cry’s on Lucy shoulders with such guilt).

Lucy: WWWWait your telling me Some Random Player Advertise a Site you never heard of that said free items and You ! Felt for IT?!

Sandy: Lucy Please help me on this….sob…..sob…

Lucy: why should I? clearly it’s your fault for falling for an hack site anyway, you just haft to tell Mike the truth.

Sandy: NO!! if he finds out he wont trust me anymore and probably wont speak to me again…..sob…..Lucy Please….help me…..sob..

(Lucy felt sorry for sandy).

Lucy: OK OK ill help you get those items back just stop crying ok?

(Sandy Hug Lucy Happily with relief).

Sandy: Ohh Thank you Lucy!! how could i Ever Repay you ?!

Lucy: you can start by stop hugging me first.

(Lucy suffocated from Sandy’s Hug)

” End of Part 2 “

” Part 3 ”

(6 minutes later)

Sandy is waiting at the door if Mike ever get’s home.

Lucy: Sandy !! Get in here quick!!

Sandy: did you get Maishul’s items yet?

Lucy: Not yet But check this out !! the game owner traced where Mike’s item is located.

Sandy: Really?? where is it?

Lucy: it’s not far from here, he also gave the address of the hacker on where he lives, So Let’s go Sandy!!

Sandy: OK im right behind you Lucy.

(they reach the other side of the neighborhood)

Lucy: Well here we are Mike’s Items are in their and so as the hacker.

Sandy: can we just ask him for Maishul’s items back?

Lucy: That hacker cant just give those items back by asking him?!
i say will bust in and kick his ass!, what do you say? you with me?!

Sandy: OK?? if you say so…

(Lucy Bust in and Sandy’s right behind her)

Lucy: OK hacker give it up!!…… no use of hiding the game owner said our friends items is in this address and we want it back!

Jerk Kid: Well Well if it isn’t vampire girl from Halloween.

Lucy: You !! your that jerk that gave us that Sleeping tablets and made Mike Sick!

Jerk Kid: Hahaha !!you still remember me? men! that trick Never gets old!,it’s too bad about your friend, he must be pretty stupid to eat those tablets.

Lucy: Shut Up !! you almost got him killed !! you Jerk !!

Sandy: what’s going on Lucy?

Lucy: While your not here yet this guy gave us this Candycorn from Last Halloween Mike ate it all and got sick.

Sandy: Gasp!! how could you !!

Jerk Kid: Im a Jerk what do you expect it’s my job to do things bad. DUHHH!!

Lucy: well you better give those Items back !!

Jerk Kid: HUH ! what are gonna do? scratch you nails at me? im soooo scared HAHAHA !!!

Lucy: you gonna regret of what did you just said to me Jerk !!! Yaaaaahhh!!!

(Lucy beating the crap out of Jerk Kid & and Sandy Just watch as she Rip’s him to shreds).

Jerk Kid: OK OK i give i give…..ill give the items back

Lucy: And….!?

Jerk Kid: and ill give mine for free to his account just like my site said.

Lucy: Good !! and if you ever do that again!…. im not gonna think twice off Ripping you lime form lime !! You got that !?

Jerk Kid: Uh huh !! Uh huh (Terrified by Lucy).

Lucy: ok Sandy let’s go.

Sandy: But what about Maishul’s Items?

Lucy: It’s already returned on his account.

Sandy: Lucy thank you for everything you’ve done for me.

Lucy: Nehhh it’s OK you better get home Mike’s probably their looking for you.

Sandy: But Wait what about the hack site?

Lucy: Taken Care off the Game owner banned his IP Adress so he could never use it again.

Sandy: What a relief.

(Later at Mike’s Home)
Mike Just got home.

Mike: Sandy im back……??… Sandy?

Sandy: Hi Maishul♥ what took you so long?

Mike: well i kinda meet David on way to the grocery and well??……

(Flashback)

David: Hey Mike Check this out !! im gonna zoom over all the way out side and passed the speeding traffics !!
(David Riding on a shopping cart).

David: Yo Paulo Push me all the way out side

Paulo: Dude that kinda dangerous you know that?

David: Just Push me Men !!! i can make it !

Mike: Will see..

Paulo: Fine!!……Ready?……..

David: Let it Begin !!!

(David Zoomed all the way out side, then a car crash in to him).

(Paulo just leave quietly with a whistle♫♪♫♪ & Mike left already).

David: I’m OK……

(End of Flash back)

Mike: So that’s what happen? sorry Sandy.

Sandy: It’s ok Maishul i forgive you♥.

Mike: Hehe Soooo how’s my account going anything happen when im gone?

Sandy: Amm??? Id just keep an eye on it just like you told me☺.

Mike: strange i Don’t see this kinds of items before i left?

Sandy: Aaaa??? it’s because someone gave free you items for being a great player☺.

Mike: well that sweet of them to say that

Sandy: and also how a great boyfriend you are to me ♥

(Mike Blush,and just then..)

Lucy came to Mikes Place again.

Lucy: Hey jerk-face! your home im been waiting for you hours ago.

Mike: well sorry about that Lucy, hey! since why not have lunch with us?

(Lucy stared at Mike and Sandy winked at Lucy on their little secret)

Lucy: Sure why not im pretty hungry.

End.


fewww that is alot heheh well this an idea passing by people

Cool.
Not likely, but cool.
=)

What is this i don’t even-

OK Summary:

Mikes Discovers a cool online game, he ask Sandy to keep an eye on it while his gone.
then Sandy saw this Website, she put Mike’s Account (didn’t realize that it was a hack site).

Mike’s Account was hacked!! Sandy felt terrible.
Lucy came & help he out.

They found the hacker and beat the crap out of him.
Mike’s Items were returned & also go free item from that Jerk hacker.

Mike came home ask his account if anything happen.
Sandy just say ” she just keep an eye on it ”

then Lucy came back to Mike place & Mike invite him for lunch.

End of Summary (well just though of this last night).

Its a good idea and its kinda funny, but lucy is out of character.

well it’s still needs a lot more work on how Lucy speak.

WTF IS THIS SHIT

Hahhahaa this edit is awsome

I don’t know if I should love or hate you Gabriel. You make “and then they banged” *shivers* comments all the time… then you do this…

At first when I saw “online game” I thought it was going to be a .HACK style fanfic. Then I realised I’m one of only like 10 people who played it. That and I read the first two lines after it.

LOL Gabriel Kaxbe just something i liked to share.. any way love the edit

I have a feeling that Paulo is going to become a meme in here xD

hahah !! good one

Hahahahahaha… Oh maaaaaaaan… There’s just… So much wrong with this I don’t even know where to start ^^;

Now… Since English clearly isn’t your first language, and you were just imparting a script idea, not actually writing a story, I won’t go into the grammar issues or the incorrectly used words (Ripped him “Lime from Lime” still has me chuckling though haha).

Now, I WANT to address the characterisation, but I must admit that it’s kind of hard to make comment on that considering how most of my issues with it stem from things that may have been cleared up by that point.

My biggest issue is how willing to help Sandy Lucy is. Even after everything, it’s hard to imagine a scenario in which Mike & Sandy are together, and Lucy is just palls with the two. At least, not while they’re still young…

I think the biggest issue with the characters is that it feels like you’ve written this story to take place while they were still kids in grade school, rather than the teenagers they are now (Or even possibly young adults judging by the implication of Mike going shopping etc).

Also worth noting, that the jerk from the Halloween chapter was actually an adult. Not another kid.

Now. The scenario… It’s… Unlikely to say the least… I can’t imagine Lucy being able to so easily contact the creator of a popular internet multiplayer game, nor that said owner would give her any of the players addresses.

I also doubt that Lucy would be so silly as to just waltz up to a stranger’s house and pick a fight in order to try and get Mike’s video game items back. Nor do I think that the jerk would remember her, as he probably handed out those tablets to tons of kids that night.

Now, I do admire this stories ambition. A fun loving silly chapter to peel away at the drama that the comic has become known for. But the problem is that it feels like you’re trying too hard to reboot the series, and make it like it used to be back when Taeshi drew it in box panels, and the characters were more prone to being silly without thought to how things should happen, when now days, it follows more of a “Every action has consequences” path.

Still. It made me chuckle at the sheer ludicrousness of it all, and that’s gotta count for something haha.

Mav, those critique glasses are good. Where’d you get them? It needs… work, but I don’t think it’s irrepairable.