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Comment ID #128091

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…. maybe for the Future i made a Fancomic of BCB :)

Raxki November 17, 2010, 10:07 PM EST.

Comment ID #128110

that’s more than I’ll ever be able to do.
Try to do them a little cutter, that’s what draws people in!

Lyucs November 17, 2010, 10:21 PM EST.

Comment ID #128116

I like the art style and the comedy. More pages please.

TheLightorTheDark November 17, 2010, 10:27 PM EST.

Comment ID #128119

it was my first time i can improve practice make perfect :)

Raxki November 17, 2010, 10:30 PM EST.

Comment ID #128121

I like it. It reminds me of my fan fic. assuming that Sam is human.

HB November 17, 2010, 10:32 PM EST.

Comment ID #128122

I meant cuter. D’oh.

Lyucs November 17, 2010, 10:33 PM EST.

Comment ID #128124

HB: yup is a world were humans and furry lives the years is around 2007-2013 some were in betwent

Lyucs: Ok i will try

Raxki November 17, 2010, 10:38 PM EST.

Comment ID #128132

What I do for grammar and spelling is to put my script through Microsoft Word.

Your dialouge is full of errors, and also confusing. When I write dialouge in a convo, I place it in chronological order going up to down. Also, don’t stray away from contactions. Saying “If you do not make a move on her I will.” (thats not what you said, but a close example.) Doesn’t that sound stale? Sounds too robotic.

Otherwise, it’s mediocore. Not terrible, but not godly. Practice makes perfect, of course. c:

Jinx November 17, 2010, 10:48 PM EST.

Comment ID #128136

it was my first test comic duh there be errors . but kk thanks :)

Raxki November 17, 2010, 10:52 PM EST.

Comment ID #128151

Panel 4… does he have a sniper rifle that shoots pellets?

David Ideas Inc. November 17, 2010, 11:05 PM EST.

Comment ID #128153

it supposed to be paintball gun…..

Raxki November 17, 2010, 11:10 PM EST.

Comment ID #128158

And I havent intruduce another of my main character
Hiro Toyama
currently age:13
Nationality: Japan
Specie:Cat

Raxki November 17, 2010, 11:18 PM EST.

Comment ID #128159

Oh, okay. I didn’t know what exactly that gun was so I just went for something that would probably fun to screw around with.

David Ideas Inc. November 17, 2010, 11:19 PM EST.

Comment ID #128163

i just drew the gun what first came to mind

Raxki November 17, 2010, 11:21 PM EST.

Comment ID #128268

Hey, guys, you can say what you want, but let’s try to be nicer while doing it >_<

People are so harsh in the internetz.

Lyucs November 18, 2010, 1:59 AM EST.

Comment ID #129139

People can say what ever they went behind a CP but went face to face they(not you guys on BCB forum) Chicken out

Raxki November 18, 2010, 7:20 PM EST.

Comment ID #129193

I sometimes wondered why it was PC instead of CP.
Then I found out that PC is for personal computer. =D

Lyucs November 18, 2010, 9:02 PM EST.

Comment ID #129197

i never notice that good search

Raxki November 18, 2010, 9:10 PM EST.

Comment ID #129335

TheLightorTheDark do you have a account like Deviantart or facebook to sent you more test comics for not post them here since it have no relation to BCB or can i post on this here?

Raxki November 19, 2010, 3:00 AM EST.

Head back to the forum index.

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