Bittersweet Candy Bowl

I’ll be happy to reread this during my weekend.

Sure. Why not. I’ve got ‘em all backed up on the PC, so I should be able to blast through a bunch. Will have a look when I get home

achuuuuu(im traslating the whole comic for friends changed a lot of speech bubles too, Photoshop ) im a lil sick(flu) sry…

I’ll get right on it.

Done a run through. Here’s what I’ve found. Let me know if there’s any trends I’ve picked up that aren’t worth reporting.

Have read through Chapters 1 - 6. Found the following Errors

C1P5
- Lucy’s blush comes off her face. Looks a little odd (8th Panel)

C1P6
- Paulo’s speech bubble is missing an outline (3rd Panel)
- David’s sentence structure seems odd. “We don’t want to anger park rangers… They’ll summon PARK BEARS.” Feels like Park Rangers & Park Bears need a “The” in front of them? Also, Park Bears feels like it should end with an “!” (4th & 5th Panels)
- No capital T after ellipsis. (13th Panel)

C2P1
- TV shows the word “Kabbooom”. Extra B seems out of place. Assume it’s supposed to read “Kabooom” (2nd Panel)

C3P2
- Odd placement of straight line makes it look like Lucy is saying “I Tyranny?” (7th Panel)
- No capital after M after ellipsis (10th Panel)

C3P4
- Odd placement of a comma between Oh & no (9th Panel)

C4P1
- No capital W at the start of Yashi’s sentence (7th Panel)

C5P1
- The word “Thirteen” is wrapped around to fit the space with a hyphen (5th Panel)

C6P1
- The word “things” is a little hard to read (3rd Panel)
- No capital T after ellipsis (4th Panel)
- Sentence reads “Talking woovt ho’s and stuff” (9th Panel)

C6P2
- Top of page is close to being cut off

C6P4
- No capital L after ellipsis (2nd Panel)
- No capital A after ellipsis (4th Panel)
- “too ask” is repeated twice in Mike’s sentence (10th Panel)

Read chapters 1-14.

C1P6:
-Panel 6. “Hey, lemme go, asshole!!” The comma between “go” and “asshole” should be removed as it just sounds awkward with it.

C2P1:
-Panel 12. “Coetus” is misspelled. It’s spelled “coitus.”

C2P2:
-Last panel. “Who asked you!!” There should be a question mark at the end of the sentence.

C3P3:
-Panel 13. “Did you do well with the math?” Either take off the “the” or add something to the end of “math.”

C4P2:
-Panel 4, there should be more spacing between “each” and “other.”

C5P3:
-Bottom panels. Deteriorating inks.

C6P1:
-Panel 15. “Brittney Spears” is spelled with one “t.”

C6P3:
-Panel 8. The arrangement of Sue’s speech is just weird.
-Panel 9. “it” is barely readable.

C6P4:
-Panel 2. “Likeable” is misspelled. It’s spelled “likable.”
-Panel 3. “Just” is barely readable.
-Panel 4. Dreamy Mike’s speech is barely readable.
-Panel 10. “It’s too early to ask, too.” The period after “too” is barely visible.

C7P1:
-Panels 3-4. Deteriorating inks.

C8P1:
-Panel 12. “So it was YOU who did that!” “That” looks like “trat.”
-Panel 13. Same as above.

C8P2:
-Panel 2. “It’s” is barely readable.
-Panel 9. The “e” in “hear” looks like an “L.”

C8P4:
-Panel 6. Deteriorating inks.

C9P1:
-Panel 6. Deteriorating inks on Yashy’s speech.
-Panel 8. “Again” is read as “agoon.”

C9P3:
-Panel 7. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech bubble.
-Panel 13. The word “final” is hard to make out.

C9P4:
-Panel 17. “Is that codeword for INTERCOURSE?!” There should be a “the” between “that” and “codeword.”

C10P1:
-Last panel. “Go” looks like “yo.”

C10P2:
-It looks like it’s cut on the left side.

C10P5:
-Panel 11. “Guys” looks like “buys.”

C11P1:
-Panel 1. There should be no “the” before high school.
-Panel 1. “You don’t say” should end with a question mark.

C12P28:
-Panel 2. It should be “on” instead of “in” on the sign.

C13P2:
-Panel 3. I think that’s “meno” but it looks like “mono.”

C13P4:
-Panel 1. “is” is barely readable.
-Panel 6. “Somethings” should have an apostrophe.

(Grr. Really hate this constant IP change my internet does.)

Really fun reading through it again. Confrontation had me going again and I was biting myself/some pillow just to tune down my laughter. I’ll probably read through the Old Flame Arc tomorrow. I’m really tired now (just came home from my cousin’s wedding and it’s currently 3AM here XD).

Read through chapters 15-intermission: Do Ask, Do Tell.

C15P1:
-Panel 7. Lucy’s speech is a bit hard to read.
-Panel 13. “I rather not…” It would be better if it read “I’d rather not.”

C15P2
-Panel 5. “Prom” is a bit hard to read.

C15P4:
-Panel 2. “…I ever met.” It would be better if it read “…I’ve ever met.”

C15P8:
-Panel 11. “Bliss” looks like “buss.”
-Panel 14. “Realize” is hard to make out.
-Panel 17. “She and Yashy are sealed.” I think it would be better as “She and Yashy were sealed.”

C15P10:
-Panel 16. “Lucy” looks like “way.”
-Last panel. Deteriorating inks.

C15P11:
-Panel 10. “Choose” is a bit hard to read.

C15P12:
-Panel 1. Deteriorating inks.
-Panel 3. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.
-Panel 3. “…but I just rather not.” It’d be better if it was “…but I’d rather not.”

C15P13:
-Panel 14. “can’t” is pretty hard to read.
-Last panel. Deteriorating inks on Mike, Mike’s shiver lines and Mike’s speech.

C16P1:
-Panel 1. “Mikie, where were you!!” should end with a question mark.
-Panel 2. “But why!!” should end with a question mark.

C16P2:
-Panel 2. Deteriorating inks on Paulo’s speech.

C16P3:
-Panel 5. “Poor” looks like “poo’”

C16P4:
-Panel 3. Deteriorating inks on the teacher’s speech.

C15P5:
-Panel 6. “END” looks like “LND.”
-Panel 14. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.
-Last panel. “Why’d you do that!!” should end with a question mark.

C16P6:
-Panel 2. Deteriorating inks.

C17P1:
-Panel 2. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.
-Panel 3. Lucy’s hand looks weird.
-Panel 4. Deteriorating inks.
-Panel 5. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.
-Panel 6. Deteriorating inks on Lucy’s speech.
-Panel 10. Deteriorating inks on Lucy’s and Yashy’s speeches.

C17P2:
-Panel 10. Deteriorating inks on Lucy’s speech.
-Panel 13. Phrasing is wrong. It should either be “I’ve never seen you like this” or “I never see you like this.”
-Panel 15. “How long were you there!” should end with a question mark.

C17P3:
-Panel 4. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.
-Panel 10. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.
-Panel 10. “…for the rain to dye down.” It’s supposed to be “die” not “dye.”
-Panel 15. It’s supposed to be lightning, not thunder. Thunder is only the sound.
-Panel 16. “I rather not…” It’d be better if “I” was replaced with “I’d.”

C17P4:
-Panel 1. Weird phrasing. I think it’d be better if it read “Too bad my house is to the way of the burning tree.”
-Panel 2. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.
-Panel 3. I think the speech is unnecessary there.
-Panel 15. “Disown” looks like “drown.”

C17P5:
-Panel 15. “Mike” looks like “poke.”

C17P7:
-Panel 1. Deteriorating inks on narration.

C17P8:
-Panel 1. Deteriorating inks on Lily’s speech.
-Panel 3. Deteriorating inks on Yashy’s speech.
-Panel 4. “but” looks like “out.”

C18P1:
-Panel 1. “School is Monday.” There should be an “on” between “is” and “Monday.”
-Panel 4. “You forget my last card…” It should be “forgot” instead of “forget.”
-Panel 10. “the” is barely readable.
-Panel 10. “…just came out of an important interview…” “of” should be replaced with “from.”
-Panel 11. The “i” on the second “important” is barely visible.
-Panel 14. “…best of luck on your future…” “on” should be replaced with “to.”

C18P4:
-Panel 9. “Of course I’d care about…” “I’d” should be replaced with “I.”

C18P6:
-Panel 2. “em’” is wrong. It should be “‘em.”

C20P2:
-It looks cut on the left side.

C20P4:
-Panel 11. “We’ll, deal with it!” “We’ll” should be “well.”

C21P1:
-Last panel. “Then I remember…” “Remember” should be replaced with “remembered.”

C21P4:
-Panel 6. “light” looks like “ught.”

(continuation)

C22P2:
-Looks cut at the bottom.

C23P1:
-Panel 7. Deteriorating inks on the teacher’s speech.

C23P4:
-Panel 5. “…are all these girls gloomy or what.” Should end with a question mark.
-Panel 11. Inks used on Paulo’s speech is different from usual.
-Panel 12. “What’s the point.” Should end with a question mark.
-Panel 16. Inks used on speeches are different from usual.

C24P3:
-Panel 2. “How about not.” It should end with a question mark.
-Panel 10 or 11. Missing lyric. “‘Cause the way I feel I might lose control and let you stay.
-Panel 13. Wrong lyric. “And never let you go.” “You” isn’t supposed to be there.

C24P4:
-Panel 4. “…because she sung on the right side.” “Sung” should be replaced with “sang.”

C25P2:
-Panel 5. Odd placing of periods between “separated” and “when.”

C25P4:
-Panel 2. “Kindergarden” is misspelled. It’s “kindergarten.”
-Panel 3. Same as above.
-Panel 3. “…from what I remember in preschool.” “Remember” should be replaced with “remembered.”
-Panel 15. “Kindergarten” misspelled again.
-Panel 17. Both sentences should end with a question mark.

C25P5:
-Panel 13. Smudged and deteriorating ink on Lucy.

C25P6:
-Panel 11. Last word on the speech of Paulo is hard to make out.
-Panel 15. “This’ll” looks like “rus’ll”

C26P1:
-Looks cut on the left side.
-Panel 8. Weird phrasing. “I don’t see what’s so hard…” It’d be better if it read “I don’t see why it’s so hard…”

C26P2:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

C26P3:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

C26P4:
-Looks cut on the left side.

C26P5:
-Looks cut on the left side.

C26P6:
-Looks cut on the left side.
-Last panel. “Who the hell ARE YOU!!” It should end with a question mark.

Intermission: Lucy’s Birthday P1:
-Panel 6. “Joyious” is misspelled. It should be “joyous.”

C27P2:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

C27P3:
-Looks cut on the left side.
-Panel 10. “Those” is repeated in the sentence.
-Panel 10. There should be an “of” between “one” and “those.”
-Panel 11. “You’re joking, right!” It should end with a question mark.

C27P6:
-Looks cut on the left side.

C28P2:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

C28P3:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

C28P4:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

C28P5:
-Looks cut on the left side.
-Panel 11. “Where’d you come from!!” It should end with a question mark.

C28P9:
-Panel 4. Deteriorating inks.
-Panel 14. There should be an “it’d” between “that” and “loosen.”

C29P2:
-Panel 9. “catch” looks more like “caton”

I’ll look for more.

Read through chapters 29-Intermission: Out of the Frame.

C29P1:
-Panel 2. Paulo’s speech should end with a question mark.

C29P2:
-Panel 10. “Other” looks like “omer.”

C29P3:
-Last panel. The “i” of “idiot” in Tess’ speech is missing its dot.

C29P4:
-Panel 6. “SMACK” looks like “SNACK.”

C30P2:
-Last panel. The “i“‘s of “idiot” in Lucy’s speech are barely visible.

C30P3:
-Panel 3. “should” looks like “shard.”

C30P4:
-Looks cut at the bottom.

C30P5:
-Panel 3. Deteriorating inks on Sue’s speech.

C30P6:
-Panel 11. Deteriorating inks on Lucy’s speech.

C30P7:
-Panel 12. Deteriorating inks on Lucy’s speech.

C30P10:
-Last panel. “NOTHING” looks weird.

C30P12:
-Panel 17. “why are you suddenly the best swimmer ever!” should end with a question mark.

Intermission: Wishful Thinking
-5th row of panels. Deteriorating inks on speech bubble and ellipses are barely visible.

C31P2:
-Panel 4. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speeches.

C31P3:
-Panel 2. Mike’s speech is barely visible.

C31P4:
-Looks cut on the right side.
-Panel 1. The “i” on “tilt” is barely visible.
-Panel 9. Deteriorating inks on speeches.

C31P5:
-Panel 15. Augustus’ speech is awkwardly worded out. I can’t think of a fix to make it right.

C31P6:
-Panel 10. The text is barely readable.
-Panel 15. “All I have left now is walk away…” I think it’d be better if it read “All I can do now is [just] walk away…”

Intermission: Break Time P1:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

Intermission: Break Time P2:
-Looks cut on both left and right sides.

C32P3:
-Panel 15. “arguing” looks like “or giving.”
-Panel 15. Deteriorating inks on Augustus’ speech.

C32P7:
-Looks cut on the left side.

C33P2:
-Looks cut on the left side.

C33P4:
-Panel 6. “So” is hard to read.

C33P7:
-Looks cut at the bottom.
-Panel 3. Deteriorating inks on David’s speech.

C34P1:
-Panel 5. “What are YOU, the most apathetic friend in the world?!” There should be a question mark right after “What are YOU.”

C35P1:
-Panel 12. “court” is kinda hard to read.

C36P1:
-Panel 2. “owl” looks like “cowl” thanks to the smack effect.
-Panel 3. Deteriorating inks.
-Panel 4. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.

C36P6:
-Looks cut on the right side.

C37P1:
-Panel 14. Deteriorating inks on Lily’s speech.

C38P2:
-Last panel. “Eyeing” is misspelled. It’s spelled “eying.”

C38P3:
-Panel 9. “harrassed” is misspelled. It’s spelled “harassed.”

C38P14:
-Panel 7. The other quotation mark after “magical” is barely visible.

C38P16:
-Panel 2. “Really!” should end with a question mark.

Intermission: Out of the Frame P4:
-Panel 11. Deteriorating inks on Sue’s speech.

Intermission: Out of the Frame P5:
-Panel 15. “Geez, what do you want me for!!” It should end with a question mark.

Intermission: Out of the Frame P6:
-Panel 2. The “r” at the end of “rather” is pretty hard to see.
-Panel 13. “greenie” looks like “greeve.”

Read chapters 39-47.

C39P1:
-Looks cut on the right side.

C39P2:
-Panel 2. “…tomorrow was gonna like the last day…” There should be a “be” between “gonna” and “like.”
-Panel 14. “Why’s it gotta be me?!” Wrong phrasing. “me” should be replaced with “mine.”

C39P3:
-Panel 10. Deteriorating inks on Daisy’s speech.

C39P4:
-Panel 10. The question mark on Daisy’s speech is barely visible.

C39P5:
-Panel 9. “Hi” looks like “it.”

C39P7:
-Panel 3. “it” is kinda hard to make out.
-Panel 14. Deteriorating inks on Abbey’s speech.

C39P8:
-Last panel. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.

C39P9:
-Panel 2. “SHE” looks like “SHL.”
-Panel 3. “relax” is pretty hard to read.

C39P12:
-Panel 7. “he’ll” is pretty hard to read.

C39P13:
-Panel 4. Mike’s speech bubble and ellipses are barely visible.
-Panel 14. “life” is pretty hard to read.

C40P1:
-Panel 3. Deteriorating inks on Mike’s speech.

C40P4:
-Panel 9. “Woah, now I really want these photos.” “these” should be “those.”

C40P5:
-Panel 4. Deteriorating inks on Paulo’s speech.
-Panel 13. “true” is pretty hard to see.

C40P6:
-Panel 2. Deteriorating inks on Tess’ speech.

C40P12:
-Panel 14. Deteriorating inks on Daisy’s speech.

C40P17:
-Panel 11. Deteriorating inks on Daisy’s speeches.
-Panel 12. Deteriorating inks.

C41P1:
-Panel 10. The “it” on Augustus’ first speech is hard to read.

C41P4:
-Panel 3. “ironic” is pretty hard to read.
-Panel 13. “in” is pretty hard to read.

C43P27:
-Panel 6. Paulo’s sentence should end with a question mark.

C43P28:
-Panel 6. “I didn’t know you have a boyfriend.” “have” should be replaced with “had.”

C44P6:
-Looks cut at the top.
-Panel 3. Tess’ sentence should end with a question mark.

C44P20:
-Last panel. Zachie’s speech is missing punctuation marks. After “yesterday”, there should either be a “.” or “!” After “hell”, there should be a “?” and after after “him”, there should be a “?”

C45P8:
-Panel 4. “Eyeing” is misspelled. It’s spelled “eying.”

C46P17:
-Panel 2. “Kizuna and me…” Wrong phrasing. It should be “Kizuna and I.”
-Panel 2. “Slideshow” looks like “slideslow.”

I can’t believe I’m nearing the end again D:

Read chapter 48-latest page.

C48P1:
-Panel 2. “Where is he…” Should end with a question mark.

C48P5:
-Panel 10. “Why should I tell you!!” Should end with a question mark.

C48P6:
-Last panel. Paulo’s eye looks off.

C48P7:
-Panel 8. “him” looks like “bim.”

C51P10:
-Panel 2. Paulo’s face looks off.

C52P6:
-Panel 16. “What the hell is ‘nice’ at this school…” Should end with a question mark.

C52P9:
-Panel 1. David’s eyes aren’t colored.
-Panel 10. David’s face looks off.

C53P2:
-Panel 2. Abbey’s speech should end with a question mark.
-Panel 10. “What do you know!” Should end with a question mark.

C54P2:
-Panel 1. “May I have your attention please!” Should end with a question mark.

C54P5:
-Last panel. “What!” Should end with a question mark.

C54P6:
-Panel 1. There should be a question mark right after the sentence “Why the hell pick him.”

C55P1:
-Panel 4. Paulo’s eyes look off.

C55P2:
-Panel 2. David is missing an eye.
-Panel 9. “Why.” Should end with a question mark.

C55P4:
-Last panel. “RIGHT” Should end with a question mark.

C55P5:
-Panel 4. Paulo’s face looks off.
-Panel 11. “Jerk do you mind” Should end with a question mark.

C55P7:
-Panel 8. “We’re not dancing, you know” Should end with a question mark.

C55P10:
-Panel 1. “Why’d you wear high heels you idiot” Should end with question mark.
-Panel 2. “Whodafeckcares” should end with a question mark.

It’s over D:

Feel free to judge my corrections and don’t hesitate to reread through the comic. I might’ve missed some.

And I did miss something…

C30P3:
-Panel 9. “rest on” is repeated in Mike’s speech.

NP. Just doing my part to make the overall outcome better