He suggested that Johnny bring Vicks to pick up girls with. He couldn’t believe it! That white-furred, dirt-faced, birman brute was the quickest way to end up single at the end of the day. One dopey grin and half the girls in the room would forget Johnny existed. Worse yet, “the Jock” rarely even tried to get with any of them! Well…except the occasional fling with Sophia, but that hardly counted. Such a waste.
Sure he could be handy to have around sometimes…but today? Today Vicks was the last person Johnny wanted to see.
But then there he was, the big oaf standing proud beside one of the white tables setup outside the Mitts restaurant, guzzling down a tall glass of orange soda; A soda he likely got for free Johnny noted, which frustrated him even further.
As he got close one of those massive arms waved at him, Vicks giving him a wide smile as he put the empty glass down “Hey Johnny boy, where ya been? Frowns telling me ya either got shot down by some looker, or didn’t manage to pull that pooch out of his hole..”
The BilliCat gave a sigh, shaking his head “The man doesn’t know what he’s missing. I mean really, I was doing him a favor here…” slumping down into one of the plastic outdoor seats as he spoke.
With a hearty laugh Vicks gave his response “Hey! Won’t mark him wrong for doing what he loves. Got a good head for that sort of thing… but it wouldn’t hurt ‘ehm to get a girl for himself either!”
The cat leaned back in his chair, tail a twitching, as he opened his mouth to respond only to get interrupted by a calm, and feminine voice
“I agree”
Johnny glanced to his left and saw Samantha taking a sip from her own soda at the table nearest him. His older sister, by a year, ‘adopted’ sister mind you; not that anyone save a blind man would make the mistake. He was a well groomed, very hansom feline with a stylish short bang, while she was a ‘dog’, lady like with dark-grey fur, long black ears, and a white braid. She looked up at the two, raising the girly wicker-hat, one of many she was often seen wearing.
“He’s spent far too much on his own as of late, as much as I like seeing Dan showing some independence..” Those content brown eyes of hers looking straight at Johnny for just a moment “..Some fresh air wouldn’t hurt him one bit, a girlfriend is just the thing for him.”
The fair ladies words only making the giant white feline erupt with laughter once more “Ha! Pot calling the kettle black by the sounds of it… last I checked girl you ain’t getting much of either”
The dog-girl, in her white spring dress, looked to birman with a soft smile “Now that was uncalled for, I’ve spend plenty of time outside and you know it, Vicks”
A smirk appeared on the large cats chocolate colored face, responding in his usual chummy, yet taunting, manner “Yer Papas front porch don’t count princess, and I can’t think of a time I seen you with a boy… half thinking I never will.”
Sam’s smile grew from the taunt, as she responded with some sarcasm of her own “.. maybe not.. but please tell me you aren’t volun…”
CREEK
Johnny shifted in his seat abruptly, the noise stopping the yammering of the two, the awkwardness of this little conversation having left a frown on his face “Off topic! We’re talking about Dan, you got an idea or what Sis?” his serious tone returning Samantha to her usual respectful self.
“.. yes, yes I do. You see there is a reason…” Vicks getting an accusing glance this time around “… I’ve spent so much time alone lately. ‘Rhythm’ has been playing the house cat just as Dan has. She has a family reunion come labor day and she was hoping to impress them all with a performance…given how active she normally is this I think all this time cooped up isn’t good for her”
The dog girl paused for just a moment to take a sip from her drink, the boys seeming to be getting the idea “She’s told me she finds Dan kind of cute, so why don’t we try to set them up on a date? It’ll get them both outside for a day and they might even work well together.”
“Dan and the pest huh?” Vicks thick-white-eyebrows quirking, combing a hand through the mess of hair on his head as he considered the idea. “Hey, if it gets her off my back, I’m all for it!”
As Vicks and Samantha started to discuss ideas on how to set the two up Johnny leaned back in his seat, the end of his tail twitching with every thought. Alice, or ‘Rhythm’ as she preferred to be called, was Samantha’s best friend, and quite the cutie too boot. Sure, she wasn’t as curvy as he’d like, bit flat really; but Johnny wasn‘t that fussy: that pink kitty was cute! He’d always hoped to get with her someday, she was barely a year older then him after all, but every time he tried it all he got was “CREEP!” and a smack across the nose. Maybe if Sam put a good word in for him he’d have a chance…but yeah…that wasn’t happening.
He scratched his chin thoughtfully. To pair her up with Danny? It wasn’t a terrible idea…it could work….
Ideas started to flow through his mind. Suddenly the cats jade eyes lit up and a large grin made itself known. He sat up, slamming both hands against the table bringing a sudden stop to his companions discussions for the second time “Ha! I got it! Whatever ideas you two got, drop ehm… we’ll get these two love birds together, don’t you worry……all you need to do is listen to what Johnny Mitts has to say”
[To Be Continued]
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OPTIONAL MATERIAL:CHARACTER DETAILS
Ages/Birthdays:Sam 16 (Jan 11) John 14 (Oct 21) Dan 15 (Mar 10) Sophia 16 (feb 27) Vicks 16 (June 2) Alice 15 (Nov 13)
Dan, and John will be starting their second year of high school in September along with the Main BCB cast. The other four will be starting their third year.
Height (Shortest to tallest): Alice, Dan/Sophia, Samantha, John, Vicks
Name:Samantha Mitts
Nick Names:Sammy, Sam
Species:Canine; Unknown Mix
Mood:Content, and gentle
Accessory/Clothing:Sun Hat, and a Spring Dress (Various styles)
Build:A little tall, average build.
Fur
ark Grey, slight blue tint. Has a few darker speckles on her shoulders, and waist.
Hair:Snow white, worn in a braid that reaches halfway-down her back.
Face:Brown eyes, a tad on the pretty side. small nose, short snout.
Ears:Black, and hanging. Medium sized, and not hair like.
Tail:Very small, and cute with a white dot. Not visible when dress is worn, she’s rather embarrassed by it.
Name:Johnathan Mitts
Nick Names:Johnny, Bro, Horn-Dog, Creep, Pretty-Boy
Species:Feline; BilliCat
Mood:Smooth, and stylish/Annoyed, and vindictive.
Accessory/Clothing:A single red necktie.
Build:Slim, but tall.
Fur:Black. Turns white on his chest, stomach, Wrists, Feet, tip of his tail, and part of his neck. Well taken care of.
Hair:A short black bang combed towards the right.
Ears:Left ear always tilted down.
Face:Large Jade colored eyes. Good looking… if a little feminine.
Tail:Slim, and a decent length. Nothing special.
Nameaniel
Nick Namesanny, Danny-Boy, or just Dan.
Species:Canine; Golden Retriever/Beagle
Mood:Mellow. Sometimes a little unsure.
Accessory/Clothing:Hoodie during the winter. Other wise nothing.
Build:A little short, average build.
Fur:Short, Golden in most areas. Has a large dark-brown patch on his back.
Ears:Tilted up lightly, but hanging. Barely reaches his cheeks. Point straight up when surprised.
Face:Grey eyes, notable snout. Looks a little puppy like.
Tail:Average length, lightly curved, and smooth.
Name:Sophia
Nick Names:Cheese, and Crackers, Fire Cracker
Species:Canine; Charles Spaniel
Mood:Confident, and aggressive
Build:Curvy, and of average height
Fur:Orange, on the thick side.
Ears:Large, covered in curly fur, and hanging somewhat like hair. Very circular in shape. Often compared to large Ritts crackers much to her annoyance.
Face:Yellow eyes, Longer than average snout but not extremely so.
Tail:Average length, lightly curved, wavy on the bottom.
Name:Vicks
Nick Names:The Birman Brute, The Jock, Biggs
Species:Feline;Birman
Mood:Mirthful, Chummy
Build:Like a boxer. Broad shoulders, fit, and strong build. Often mistaken for a college student.
Fur:Off-White, a little thick. Turns to a dark brown on his face, upper arms (but not his hands), feet, and the lower third of his tail.
Hair:Left to grow wild, and free. Matches the color of his fur (Bang is brown, hair down his neck is white etc)
Ears:Rather on the small side. Dark brown.
Face:Navy Blue eyes. Hansom, though still clearly youthful. Eyebrows are large, and white making them stick out.
Tail:Thicker on the end. Fur gets matted, and unkempt at the tip.
Name:Alice
Nick Names:Rhythm. The Pink Pest.
Species:Feline; American Shorthair
Mood:Cheerful, extremely energetic, and emotive.
Accessory/Clothing:Rain-drop shaped earing on right ear. Stylish boots, and Open/Sleeveless Jackets (Various styles).
Build:Slim, and petite. Shortest of the girls. Looks younger then she is.
Fur:Short, and dyed pink. White on her stomach, and chest.
Ears:A bit large adding to her childish appearance.
Face:Large brown eyes, rather cute.
Tail:Long, thin, and extremely flexible. Very animated.
Comment ID #24414
An interesting start… Colour me intrigued. It’s well written & structured…
I look forward to reading more 
Comment ID #24433
GOD DAMMIT I WANTED TO BE THE FIRST POST *pouts*
Comment ID #24833
… is no one reading this? or is it just no one is commenting 
Comment ID #24843
i read this but i didnt bother commenting,it was really late
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Part Two of Four
Rhythm’s house often made Samantha ponder if this was how a mouse saw the world.
She had been friends with the pink feline for years and she had walked through these doors countless times, but the small mansion still gave Sam that slight surreal feeling. The place really didn’t have those things that most people connect with the word ‘mansion’ there were no grand stair cases, intimidating portraits, bronze busts, or eccentric architecture here, all she saw was safe and familiar to her. The typical things you’d see in a suburban home, just….bigger and better.
She’d have asked an actual mouse its thoughts on the matter but they always got annoyed by questions like that.
Samantha simply followed her ears, the low drumming beat leading her upstairs and towards the second door on the left. A soft smile came to her lips as she entered Rhythm’s music room. The petite pink cat was in quite a silly pose, balancing on one heel, one foot ahead of her, hands spread out for balance, and a book on the nose.
The grey furred dog got the first word out, “Oh my…someone has a lot on their mind I see?” looking over the high-energy feline who was wearing her usual stylish boots and open jacket. ‘Dressed like Sally Acorn at a freaking rave’ the boys would say, not that Sam was all that clear on who Sally acorn was.
It had struck Sam that the girl never wore pants or a skirt. She wasn’t really sure why something like that would seem odd all of a sudden, it’s not as if either were required things.
Rhythm blinked, abruptly glancing aside as her thoughts were interrupted, the book just dropping to the floor as she catapulted herself towards the dog, and latched on with glee. “Sammy! I was about to call you and everything!” She said as she started dragging the still calm Samantha towards all her little toys, her dyed short hairs long tail waving about as if she were the dog in the room.
“Come on, come on… gotta have a listen to this. Working on it all day. Think they’re going to like it… well okay all the old geezers and stuff won’t, but my cousins will!” the high energy girl reaching for her synthesizers controls, one paw pushing up dials, as the other danced about the keyboard to her left. More synthesized instruments and artificial sounds joining the drumming from before.
The dog adjusted her hat lightly speaking up again “…actually Rhythm I was here to…” but before she could finish her best friend was already talking at light speed. Alice clearly being a far better talker then listener, not that Sam ever minded.
“See! Sounds great! I’m not sure about the drum beats though, maybe I should turn them down a bit? Maybe put a little….. mumph?”
One gentle finger was raised to the perplexed girls mouth, her tail curving as if to try and form a question mark as the Canine explained “Stop being adorably energetic for just a moment… I have something for you..” the cats wide brown eyes getting all the more curious as a letter was brought to her attention.
It only took moments for the thing to be snatched, torn open, and read. Rhythm absorbing the written words as quick as she could, blushing from many of them.“… a secret… admirer… oh! Come on tell me who it is! You know who it is!” the girl said, almost hopping with her words.
Sammy just shook her head “All answers will be given when you see him…just try to relax a bit…” but Samantha’s words were lost, as Rhythm was beaming with even more energy then before, leaving the dog to just sigh and think to herself…
I hope this is a good idea…
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The way Vicks figured it, this entire plan was damn well too round about for his tastes.
Really now… why were the lot of them bothering with all this sneaky stuff? With the fake-letters to get ehm both on a date? Like something out of a bad cartoon; the ones where all the teens look more like aliens then people, and there’s always at least one rich stuck up kid or something…
Best he can remember plans like this never worked out for the toons either….half the reason he didn’t watch much cartoons these days. Save some of that cool stuff Danny has showed him… guys got a good nose for that too.
Now if it was Vicks making the plan? Well it wouldn’t be much of a plan, but it’d be a better one! He likes ‘er, she likes ‘em, so tell it to them straight, and give them a good kick towards the theatre. Done. Hell, make it even simpler: Grab ehm both, lock ehm in a room for a day, and let nature take its course. No room for mistakes that way. I mean sure they’d be seeing red for a few hours over it, but it’d be a different sort of red after a while.
Ha!
But… oh well. He’d agreed to the plan, so he was going to stick with it now. Samantha gave Johnny the nod on it, and she had enough sense to make a few dollars… so why not go along? ‘Sides it’ll make a good story to tell the boys once the summers over and Johnny-boy’s ideas always ended up being a laugh riot anyway.
As Vicks passed through the kitchen Dan’s brother, dressed in his greasy work clothes still, gave his greeting without even looking up from the news paper.
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“Afternoon.”
Vicks smirked lightly, and nodded back “You have a good one Roy” continuing his walk towards the door, Danny the entire time still slung over the jocks shoulder like a sack of potatoes and looking quite confused.
“What! Hey! Roy! I’m being kidnapped here, Help dammit! BRO!” The golden mutt struggling a bit to escape but to little avail against the Brutish Birman, Roy only turning to the next page in response.
Poor old Danny continued his fruitless fight as Vicks whistled a cheerful tune on the way out the front door. With a light toss he finally let go, the brown backed dog landing on his rump with a flinch and an “Ow!” regaining his bearings quickly as he started to get up. “What the hell man? I was in the middle of something down there dude!”
To which Vicks just gave one of his signature hearty laughs “Exactly! All those bells, and whistles you got down there, any word I blabbered out you’d toss aside. Thing is Danny-boy today’s a lucky one for you” Dan just glared at first, still looking a bit confused as Vicks handed the letter, folding his arms as the Mutt tore it open, and started to read.
“……wait… this is…. But… I mean look at her. It’s not like I never thought it but…” those grey eyes slid over every word a second time “I always figured she liked you dude…”
Vicks shoulders raised in a heavy shrug “Ehn maybe she did, but the girls gotten wiser since hahaha! Now the days a wasting, If I were you I’d get my butt moving… last thing you want to do is keep the poor girl waiting!”
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Brrrr-RING Brrr-RING Brrr-RING
Sophia’s eyes snapped open as the sound sent tendrils of pain through her forehead. The orange Spaniel instinctively grabbing the pillow and sheets. Not that either helped stopped the doorbells drilling song.
“… nugh… too early to get up… way too early….. dammit someone get the door already!” leaning up from her little fortress of solitude long enough to yell, before falling back in a slump, hand rubbing her now bloodshot eyes.
From down bellow she could hear her mother yelling back “Don’t you talk to me like that! It’s the middle of the day! Maybe if you didn’t spent every night-who-knows-where….. ” her mothers voice trailing off into annoyed muttering after that.
With some effort the dog-girl got out of bed, stepping over some of the mess towards her mirror, the face that stared back looking miserable and angry. Right now she didn’t care much though. She quickly brushed down some of the misplaced fur before heading out towards the bathroom for a proper hot shower to remove whatever aches she was feeling.
But she wouldn’t get there before another shout stopped her “Sophie! It’s for you honey! One of your friends from school!” The voice just a bit more cheerful, given her mother approved of her ‘school friends’ compared to the night-crowd.
The stubborn dog gave an exasperated sigh turning towards the stairs, running down them with quite a racket. She expected it was Rhythm, or preferably Vicks, but instead found a different bi-colored feline staring back at her with a wide smile.
“Hello~ Fire-cracker. Another fun night on the town I see?” Johnnies eyes wandering over the attractive girl, though Sophia was too annoyed to care right now.
“… Not in the mood for the damn Ritts jokes… what do you want pretty boy?” She grumbled one hand combing through the curly fur on the large, round hanging ears that earned her those nick-names “You better not be looking for a date, you know the answer already…”
Johnny just gave a light smirk back, shaking his head, and waving one finger “Oh no no no, you misunderstand my purpose. I’m just a simple delivery man….”
Out of no where Sophia found a letter stuck in front of her face, looking at it curiously, as Johnny just kept talking.
“Trust me, you don’t want to shoot this messenger”
Comment ID #26239
Yeah that took a while didn’t it? Hahaha. Ah well. Part three is done as well, though it’s still in its raw draft form. Should get it fixed up within the next few days (Maybe)
Wonder if anyone’s reading this?
Comment ID #26256
I am! Good job so far. Like the meta-comically ironic bits best, but that’s just me.
Comment ID #26268
Oh, and I sort of forgot the whole
[To be Continued]
Thing. Ah well more of a formality really.
Comment ID #26281
I’m reading it.
I find it a little hard to keep track of so many new fan characters… And this is pretty much the epitome of what Souppy’s been saying about how the fan character stories don’t seem to make much sense, in that they’re not really fan fiction, seeing as this one doesn’t even involve any of the BCB cast until after part Four…
But none the less, your writing ability is solid, and the story is intriguing. I’ll stick with it
Comment ID #26290
Honestly Maverik you’re absolutely right. This isn’t REALLY fan-fiction and there’s a reason I stuck a question mark up there in the topic . More of an expanded universe story then anything to do with the main cast. Like the various Star Trek, or Star wars Novels that don’t involve any of the characters from the Movies, but take advantage of the established setting.
Really I’ll admit that I could have put all these characters in their own darn setting, ignoring BCB all together….but… despite that… It just wouldn’t have felt honest given it’s very clearly BCB inspired. Perhaps I’m just crazy?
But ehn what’s the harm? What better place to find people interested in a story about teenage dogs and cats but here?
Of course now I almost feel bad for posting it here hahaha. Ah I over-think things too much
Comment ID #26824
What inspiration from BCB? The high school setting? I could very well say BCB is a fanfic dedicated to Degrassi or something, these “fanfics” are really confusing the shit out of me now. Do people fake the concept of the BCB setting in their stories just so they have an excuse to post their work on the BCB forums?
Why don’t people just say “hey guys this is my original story with original characters in an original setting”? Halo has nothing to do with BCB, and yet I totally welcome people making topics about it on the forums. So why don’t people start posting their original art and stop shoehorning “oh but it’s a story relating to BCB! It just features 90% my fancharacter lol”
HOW IS IT A FANFIC THEN JESUS
ORIGINALITY IS WELCOMED PEOPLE stop getting me excited over fanworks that aren’t even fanworks and are just works.
And the real crying shame is that I REALLY like this story, you’re very visual with your writing and I’m really interested in what happens next. I’ve definitely gained a liking for the characters, especially Rhythm right now, she’s super cute and it helps that you portrayed her so well.
Just.. next time say it’s your original story. Inspiration can create original stories, BCB isn’t a “fanfic” about Cardcaptor Sakura after all, and that was one of my BIGGEST inspirations in the romance department.
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Got it, Got it, no worries here. That was honestly my intent since Maveriks first post on the matter. Blame my silly paranoia on labeling it a fan-fiction to begin with. Will say the whole ‘Pretend it’s a fan fiction so I can post it here!’ idea never came to mind.
But yes…Teenagers and cat people aren’t trade marked ideas to anyone but VG-Cats fans, and they’re only concerned about the latter. I shouldn’t have been so worried about someone shaking their head at me saying “Original character and setting DO NOT STEAL!”
Will say I’m surprised at Rhythms popularity as the few folk I’ve shown this to on other chat lines have liked her too. I mean I love the girl too, but was also worried people would think her personality was just a bit too much.
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Part three of four
‘Dan and Alice should make a cute couple’, Samantha thought as she sat alone outside the Mitts restaurant. There were no college students taking a break from class, old friends meeting for the first time in years, or even a family of five out for a day of casual dining. With the evening rush still hours away she only had her own thoughts to listen to.
It should work out fine. Johnny’s plan wasn’t the most practical one they could have come up with, but given how excited he was about it she saw no reason to say no. It was harmless; even if the two figured out the letters were fake, Samantha knew that they would go along with it anyway.
She let out a sigh, glancing towards the sidewalk. There was this odd little pain in her gut that kept on nagging her. Something wasn’t right.
The dark grey dog shifted in her seat lightly, hands reaching back to tug at her braid as if it had been misplaced, her words quite serious as she spoke to herself “There is no reason for me to be worried about this…”
A brow was quirked as the girl spotted someone running towards her. Someone she really didn’t expect to see. As he came to a stop near her table panting and gasping she said his name in a curious tone “…. Daniel?”
The golden mutt raised one finger, leaning against the table after his hurried run “..H—Hey… Phew.. Hey Sam.. Just a second..” He chuckled out nervously as he straightened himself out finally starting to catch his breath. But it was the next few words that left Sammy even more confused.
“I …Yeah…I got your letter”
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Rhythm hopped playfully from stone to stone not daring to touch the dirt of the park path. Two things flowing through her mind, the sound of her music and the thought ‘it had to be Vicks.’
She made another hop, arms spread out for balance, as her right foot did its work keeping her steady on the awkwardly shaped rock. Who else could it be?
Samantha spent plenty of time with Vicks. They talked a lot. Laughed a lot. Surely if he were to trust someone to deliver a letter it’d be her! Sure he pretty much ignored Rhythm all of last year but that didn’t mean… The pink cat girl lost her balance just a bit, sliding back as her tail became a panicked zig-zag, barely straightening herself out just in time.
But it’d been months since he’d last seen her and as they say “Absence makes the heart grow fonder.” She made the next skip, her left boot making a perfect landing as she continued to think. Who else could it be? Sam didn’t know many boys well and that creep Johnny would just tell her in person
The rock under her shifted forward from her weight all of a sudden; ears and tail sticking up in a panic as the rest of her went down with a “AH!” an abrupt cord from her earplugs almost seeming to herald it.
The petite pink cat girl got up with a low ‘Ow ow ow…’ rubbing her backside. She stood up again having clearly failed to avoid ‘death by lava’ but that wasn‘t her major concern right now.
“Danny?” She said aloud as the thought struck her. It could be Danny couldn’t it? The girl started simply walking down the path, eyes idly glancing at the trees beside her, tail doing its own little dance of thought. Sammy has known Danny for ages after all.
“Johnny, Sammy, Danny. I know too many ‘Y’ies” Rhythm thought aloud again as her brain took a sudden left turn, if only for a moment, before returning to the golden mutt.
That wouldn’t be so bad. Danny was cute in that puppy dog sort of way and the stuff he talked about sounded pretty fun. Movies and monsters and games and other weird things! The thought of which brought a light laugh to the girl. Yeah that wouldn’t be bad, though she still had her bets on the Birman.
The girl started to skip again as the music in her ears became all the more cheerful, this time being sure to avoid the stones rather then make a game of them. But before she got far a whisper brought her to a sudden stop, the words lost to her.
Rhythm glanced left and right in a hurry, tail checking her blind sides as if it had eyes of its own, but both found nothing. She shrugged, took a step, and then the voice came again sending a shiver down her spine that left her fur reaching for the sky.
“… what the… who’s doing that? Stop making fun….oh..” she questioned, oh so confused, until she realized the obvious “Oh. Oh! Right! I‘m a dummy”. Quickly she plucked out her earplugs, the music finally fading as the whisper became a clear and smooth voice.
“Ah…. Finally! My pretty little pink kitty…I was worried you wouldn‘t come…”
One of her large ears gave a twitch at the voice not liking the sound of it. She twisted around on one heel staring at the speaker with one simple grumbling notion, “You’re not Vicks”
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C’mon you idiot! Dan thought to himself. She couldn’t even bring herself to deliver the letter! She’s way shy about this and she’s waiting for you to make the move! Start the conversation!
The two had barely looked towards each other during their little trot down the road. Dan only managing a few nervous remarks, which only got similarly brief responses from the girl who was clearly uncomfortable.
Anything! Just say…
“…. Something… Something we should talk about something” Danny said looking back towards Sam with a smile “So, uh, what’d you been up to lately?”
She looked back at him with those pretty eyes for just a moment before staring at the sidewalk her hat bringing a shadow over her face “…Nothing really. Just reading mostly. Yourself Daniel?”
Dan just rubbed the back of his head “Right, yeah! Nothing really either I guess… well except you know, the movie stuff you know? Got a new camera and everything… it’s awesome, you should see what some of the software can do too… I got this great idea….”
His words stopping as he glanced her way, the Grey Dog still staring down as Dan cursed himself. Stupid, Stupid, she doesn’t like Sci-fi you know that! Boring her to death… something else…Gah damn it dude! You’ve known her since you were six….think think!
Danny let out a sigh, feeling defeated until an old memory caused him to look up in a hurry “… Hey… remember that time back in elementary? Grade four..? I… think it was after the Christmas holidays or something…but yeah, Johnny was sick for a freaking month. Dude was a mess so it was just the two of us..”
Samantha finally looked up from her little sulking session, not looking directly at the Mixed Retriever just yet “It was… Two weeks not a month. But yes I remember. Though it wasn’t really only the two of us..” her serious tone making him flinch “I had my own classmates if you might remember.
“Yeah yeah, you were a class ahead….” the thought disheartening Dan for a moment but he was quick to regain his stride. “We still hung out though! Every lunch hour it was me and you, gotta remember that”
She glanced his way again, this time a bit longer, her voice more casual as she responded “We… played board games didn’t we..? Checkers… a few others…”
“like monopoly!” Danny interjected, an cheerful tone in his voice rather then a nervous one “Heh…You always wanted to be the Wheel barrow. Hahaha the look on your face whenever someone tried to take it…”
He looked her way to find Samantha finally giving a faint smirk, the golden mutt doing much the same at the sight of it “God I remember that now…. Why in the world was I so focused on that wheel barrow …I must have had a reason…” her hand was raised as she laughed “… Oh I’m going to remember this later and be kicking myself for it. Didn’t you… Just before Johnny got better, you made your own board game..?”
“Ah… crap… you remember that? Castle Crackers .. yeah. Giant piece of garbage that was” Danny in turn chuckling to himself as Samantha just gave him a dismissive wave, the ice apparently broken.
“Now don’t be silly, it was adorable. Pieced to together with scotch tape and drawn in crayon…it was sweet really. Though I can’t remember the rules…I think we made them as we went”
Dan couldn’t help but blush as he glanced towards the street again. His wagging tail noting that this was considerably awesome “… really thought it was cute huh? Heh… I wonder if I still have that thing……Hey! How about we do that sometime.” Samantha giving him a curious look as he spoke “The board games I mean. We can get together and roll some dice… well you know, with everyone else too..”
Samantha just stared for a few moments blinking, Dan naturally worrying that his idea was dumb until she finally answered with another of her wonderful smiles “Yes.. Danny I’d like that.”
A large grin went over Danny’s face, grey eyes admiring the girl beside him for a few moments. Sure they had known each other for years, but that letter… that freaking letter had so taken him off guard. “You know… Sam I..”
Suddenly she stopped dead in her tracks a sad look going over the girls face as she looked at Daniel who was looking confused at the sudden stop. “Danny…. I’m sorry… I’m really sorry for this.”
“Whoa, whoa, It’s…cool.. It’s cool” He waved his hands in front of him one paw reaching for her shoulder “I mean… I know you’re nervous about the whole date thing. But really Sam…” But Sam only shook her head, surprising the boy as she stopped his advancing paw.
“Dan…you don’t understand. I didn‘t plan this” her voice just the tiniest bit cracked as she looked into the boys eyes.
“I wasn’t the one who wrote that letter…”
[To be Continued]
Comment ID #29351
Yikes the Sam/Dan conversation sort of got stretched out a while didn’t it? Hope it isn’t dull given you don’t really know the characters yet. As always comments are welcome.
Comment ID #29642
Epic story with epic characters. you, sir, are a freakin’ awesome writer. Props to you!
Comment ID #29679
Freaken Rhythm stop being so freaken adorable holy hell
also I’m sad for Danny I do admit I kind of stopped paying much attention to their chat until it got to the games part, but overall I was most entertained!
I keep thinking Vicks and Danny are the same person
Comment ID #29696
Heh the word epic makes me think of adventure heroes and grand journeys through fantasy worlds! But hey I’ll take what compliments I can get!
Hm maybe I should have gone for a more body-language focus rather then Dan’s inner thoughts for the earlier bits of the chat? Would have been better at showing the starting level of awkwardness without the dullness.
Don’t see the Vicks and Danny comparison though.
Comment ID #29995
I don’t think it’s a flaw with your writing, it’s more me having very very bad memory of names and constantly forgetting who is who.
Comment ID #31879
Part Four of Four
“No. No Vicks isn’t here… He’s off on a date with Sophia, last I heard” Johnny said as the smile was wiped from his face, disappointment in his voice. The tuxedo furred cat sitting back on a park bench, head turned slightly away.
The words made Rhythms body tense up for just a moment as they hit her like rocks. Abruptly she rose both hands in the air, voice full of disbelief, and a tiny bit of angry “You’re not Danny either!”
The boy sighed, learning forward in his seat, his right ear falling to match his left “…..and Dan’s on a date with my Sister…” the poor pink cat almost stumbling back as she heard it.
B-b-both of them? Both of them taken? On the same night? The same night that Johnny decided to do this? There was no way she could believe that, it just couldn’t be true. That stupid creep was a big fat…
“Liar!” She pointed straight at the bi-coloured feline “There’s no way that’s true” she took a step back, folding her arms as her face picked up a frown “You’re just lying to me so that I…”
“Do you really hate me that much?” John‘s words bringing her own to a stop. He just stood there, staring with those Jade eyes, nothing but seriousness on his face as if waiting for an answer…but for once in her life, Rhythm was at a loss for words.
He turned away rubbing his white furred wrists. “… You’re not even going to give me a chance…? I mean.. I thought with Sam putting the good word in for me I might have had a chance..”
Rhythms anger quickly started to shift to guilt as he started to walk away, more depressing words being sent her way “….Just… Forget about it Alice. I’m sorry for dragging you out here tonight…”
As he got further and further away the pink feline just felt terrible. Tail having dropped dead, as her arms were pulled close, and her head hung low, many thoughts running through it…
Sam thought this was a good idea? She knew it was Johnny. She HAD to know it was Johnny. But Johnny’s a creep! Johnny’s always been a creep!… Isn’t he…?
Those sad brown eyes glanced up from the ground once, then twice, then a third time. The white tip of Johnny’s dragging tail still easy to spot. Her hand cautiously started to reach out until she finally spoke up, jogging forward after him. “… Johnny… I’m sorry. Johnny! Wait up for a second!”
The girl skid to a stop as Johnny did, leaving her only a few feet behind him. “.. I’m sorry! Really! Bringing up Vicks and Danny like that…” she tugged on her ears as if they were to blame “I was a giant-freaking-Jerk-Jerk there wasn’t I?”
If only she could see the huge grin that Johnny was sporting at that very moment
He gave a slight shrug, his voice still having a slight bit of disappointment in it. “… Yeah… just a tiny bit… but it’s not like I didn’t deserve it. I really have treated you badly all these years Alice. It was… just that…” he stared down at his open palm taking a breath.
“You were right. You were always right. I acted like a giant creep. I mean…that’s how I got the girls attention you know? Wearing masks…pretending to be someone I wasn’t and well…. Look at where it‘s gotten me?” he finally turned around a soft smile on his face, his friendly gaze making Rhythm blush lightly before glancing away from uncertainty.
Johnny let out a soft chuckle, taking a step closer to her as his arms spread out “See… that’s why I did this. I really DO like you Alice! A lot! We’ve known each other for years now…. So… I want you to know the real me. Not that Casanova idiot that everyone expects me to be…”
He stole another step forward, the pink cat blinking in surprise as a paw was put lightly on her shoulder, glancing at it, and then toward the Billi-Cats signature tie “…Look…Danny and Vicks are both crazy for over-looking someone like you. I don’t care what they think” a finger raised the pink cats chin so she couldn’t avoid that soft smile any longer.
“You’re the one I want.. won’t you at least give me a chance?” He smiled while Rhythm could only twitch and mumble out “Um’s” oh so utterly confused. Was Johnny really that bad? Did he really mean that? Maybe she had been too cruel on him, maybe he’s changed, maybe that’s why Samantha set her up on a date with him like this.
Finally she gave him a soft smile back those cute brown eyes of hers half closing “I guess…. I guess everyone deserves a chance huh?” the two started to get closer, Johnny’s arms wrapping around her, as the Pink feline leaned up, one foot off the ground, their eyes closing….
Then came a sweet blushing kiss that finally wiped the Pink cats doubts away. Rhythm getting lost in it for a time. The feeling that tonight might turn out better then she expected going through her mind.
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Comment ID #31880
That is until her eyes went wide and her tail shot up, its hair looking like it took a static shock.
What. Is. That. Squeezing. My. Butt.
One of her paws made a fist that went flying into the stupid pretty boys jaw as the war cry was shouted “CREEP!”
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Vicks stared in the bathroom mirror, his large hand combing through his unruly brown and white mane. Sure, the damn thing was normally a giant god damn mess, but right now it was even worse then usual. Not that it was stopping Vicks from grinning any.
A feverish giggling came from the room behind him. The same laugh that had been whispered in his ear when his hair was brought to that terrible state. The brutish birman strolled on out of the bathroom, leaning against the door frame as he looked over to Sophia; The Orange Spanial laying back on the bed, reading a sheet of paper that was risen over her nose.
She turned his way with a huge smirk wiggling the sheet “Ah… Damn it to hell… this ‘letter’ ‘oh yours’ is sappy as heck…”
Vicks large white eyebrows quirked curiously as he walked on over. Sophia handed it to him, rolling over onto her stomach as the Birman just looked confused at what he was reading. “I didn’t write no lett….”
Sophia letting out another laugh before he could finish the thought “Do I look like a moron? Of course you didn’t…The pretty boy gave it to me… heh idiot actually thought I’d believe it was from you” She stretched a bit until she was in a kneeling position continuing her little explanation “But I don‘t give a damn what that Weasel is up to….I wasn’t going to ignore a good idea when it comes to me…”
Those blue eyes stared her way for a moment and then back to the sheet. Another hearty laugh escaping Vicks “… Going to be in dentures if I read all ah’ this heh! Guess I owe Johnny-boy one… course going to have to tell him next time to get me a girl who isn’t a red-nose short of a clown!”
Sophia leaned back, a sinister smile on her face as she made her retort “Oh the dirt faced ass thinks he’s clever. Or maybe that isn’t dirt… might explain the smell you have half the time”
But Vicks wasn’t so easily insulted, his smile stayed as he gave her a dismissive wave back “Ha! If clowning don’t suit ya, construction sounds about right! Won’t even need a vest….always needing new cones that lot.”
She shifted closer to him, raising her hand to knock the boy on the head half a dozen times, smile changing into a grin, as the tail continued to wag “Construction?! Yeah right! That’s your job lummox. With a skull as thick as that they won’t even need to give you a damn helmet!”
There were more grins to be had as Vicks just looked her way, preparing his next little joke. But he didn’t get to say it. Two arms wrapped around his and a sudden pull forward making sure he’d be silent for at least a little while.
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Tonight was a success Johnny thought as he walked on home. Sure if Dan were here he’d be saying Johnny ‘dug too deep’ that he’d gotten greedy. That he had her in the palm of his hand and if he’d been patient maybe he would have gotten more?
“Dude! You don’t spend forever saying you’re not a creep and then try to grab some ass!”
Is what Danny would say…well okay no he wouldn‘t, but something like it. But yeah: Screw that! A true man enjoys the little victories. Johnny had gotten a kiss from Rhythm and that was something he couldn’t have possibly gotten without his plan.
The knob was turned. The door was opened and shut behind him. Thus Johnny was inside his home again, still in his confident stride as he made his way down the front hall, one hand after the other, tail waving behind.
It was a clever way to get it done really. Getting Sam’s ‘Good word’ without her even realizing it; pure genius. The other two letters were sure to bring good things too he noted. The Jock would likely think he ‘owes’ him one now… and Danny? Sure Danny had no chance in hell with Sammy, but this entire experience would help him grow some more and hopefully put the golden mutts mind on the girls once again.
His wide grin stayed with him during the entire walk to the stairs eyes looking up them as he made his way to his room… only to stop as he saw a familiar figure above. “Hm..? Hey Sis. How’d The date go?” his grin finally fading as he got no response.
The grey dog girl just stood there hand squeezing the railing. Her signature hat missing, her braid undone, the skirt of her dress swaying ever so lightly. The fallen white hair, which normally looked quite nice, was now just covering her face.
Finally she looked up and those eyes, that look, that glare, making Johnny step back. The swollen brown eyes just glaring as she did not say a single word the silence sending a shiver down the boys spine. She took a breath, finally speaking in a voice that would cut through steel.
“Jonathan…”
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Ten minutes later the shaken boy tumbled into his darkened room, hurriedly closing the door behind him. Much of his fur was permanently on end as he made his way towards his bed, pulling on his tie to loosen it. He made one final note to himself…
“…. Right then…no more playing matchmaker.”
[Matchmaker:The End. See you next time~]
Comment ID #31881
Awesome story, I’m glad things worked out for the better. 
Comment ID #31882
That’s our first story done!
Anyway if you read it: Comment on it! It’s always good to know how many are reading my works and how I can improve them.
A big thanks to Neo/Kariz for doing the proof reading for me. The grammar for these works would have been a lot worse without his assistance.
You can expect more stories from me in the future. As before: This is an on going series so we’ll have more tales to tell about these six. I’ll likely try to find a place to post them beyond just these forums as well. Given I’ll be not be advertising this as a fan fiction, though I still might play around with the occasional cameo from other works.
A few little nagging details I’d love the other writer types around here to share their thoughts on….
Was it a good move to note Johnny’s evil grin? Or should have I left you guessing on if he was being honest until the very end? Or did knowing he was evil help add drama to the scene?
For that matter in the same scene was the focus on how adorable Rhythm was a good idea? Allowing the reader to like her and in turn be more concerned that she was being seduced by Johnny whom we knew was a lying douche-bag? Or.. was it just too much and overrides the tension?
The last scene with Sam. Did it work well to have the ‘ten minute cut off’ leaving you wondering what happened to leave Johnny shaken? Or would I have been better off actually showing it?
Did the Vicks/Sophia scene at the end work well as a comedic break after the er… ‘dramatic climax’? Or was Rhythms punch oh justice enough comedy on its own? Mind you the scene was also a way to tie up loose ends and establish how the two got along.
I’d also like to note there was actually another scene in part three that got cut out. Showing what happened with Vicks and Sophia in a comedic fashion, foreshadowing their later scene. But… I felt it didn’t suit the mood and part three was already long enough. I might write these scene again later and post it as ‘Optional reading’
Comment ID #31886
@Sean
… Uh.. I think you missed the second part there dude..unless you read it in less then a minute hahaha.
Comment ID #31887
Sorry I did, glad this shall be continued then.
Comment ID #31931
Quite the entertaining story you have here. I thoroughly enjoyed it, although I, like Taeshi, have trouble with names sometimes, so I was finding it a little hard to keep track of who was who. Though, really, the only way this would have been fixable would have been to have a single main character, and to filter in the others slowly, considering the cast size. But then, I don’t know how that would have worked for this story.
As for your questions… It depends on what you were going for with the JohnxRhythm scene. Did you want us to fear for Rhythm? Or did you want us to believe that maybe John was a nice guy? Both ways work. It’s just a mood decision you need to make.
I think it was a good idea to focus on Rhythm’s cuteness, as it made me really like the character. It also gave her possibly the most definite personality of the story, which meant I always knew who she was.
The last scene worked fine with the cut off. But I AM a little lost as to whether or not we saw what happened to her on the date. If not, I’d assume we find out later? Though, the impression I got was that whoever she was with tried to rape her. So I duno. Take that as you will.
The Vicks/Sophia scene was fine. It broke things up nicely, and you definitely needed a scene break there, so it’s all good.
Anyways. All in all I enjoyed it ^_^ I look forward to the next one.
Comment ID #31948
Tried to.. rape? What? Hahahaha okay I’m a little lost on that one. I guess I can somewhat see it…but it is a big leap. Particularly when you go back and re-read the Sam/Dan scene and the general tone of this story.
I was trying to portray Sam as Scary… in a somewhat silly fashion as if she were something out of a horror movie but yeah. That Johnny was ‘in for it now’ as it were. Maybe I over did it some?
She was upset because she broke Danny’s heart, not because he tried to do something like that to her. And.. well.. she wouldn’t have been forced into that situation in the first place if it weren’t for Johnny’s selfish meddling.
I’ll keep in mind the issue with character focus with the next major story though, as people do seem to have a hard time keeping track of Six new characters being introduced all at once. Just will need to figure out a good way to get all the scenes I want out of it still.
Before… the next story though there will be a few ‘short’ ones. A few written in a ‘Chat log style’ and a few one/two pagers just to fill the gap between August and October.
Comment ID #36247
Great story, couple things:
1. Use italics. you tend to bolden what would normally be italicized. Not a big deal, but… (Me being over-analytical, I think you can relate?)
2. Now ya got me wishing Johnny was genuine, so I could ship johnnyxRythm!! > *grrrr…*
3. Johnny reminds me a bit of Paulo, Rythm reminds me of Daisy, and Vicks reminds me (sort of) of Abbey without the temper!
(Note: Just organizing my statements, not necessarily all criticisms!)
Comment ID #36308
1. Yeah bit of a nit pick ain’t it? I prefer to use Italics to occasionally represent thought rather then emphasize words. Just a style choice I suppose, though… likely not the right one grammar wise.
2. kekeke. Sorry~ You’ll get actual romances later.
3. Hm.. Johnny=Paulo I can see. They’re both ladies man types who are more then willing to put on an act to get the girl. The main differences is… well Paulo is simply the better man. Johnny is far more selfish and full of himself; while Paulo will question his actions, and feel bad about his failures.
Rhythm=Daisy is… a bit thinner. They’re both high energy, cheerful girls but I don’t think the comparison goes much further then that. This should become clearer once I write more about her.
Vicks=Abbey Okay I don’t see this one at all. Seriously now, what the heck man? I realize this story didn’t identify the characters as well as I would have liked (Hopefully the next planned story will) But… Abbey? Vicks..? You sir are crazy.
Comment ID #36360
I… told you it was flimsy. It’s… complicated in my head.
But that doesn’t mean I’m not crazy; I take that as a compliment!
Comment ID #36364
Is Rhythm really thinner than Daisy? Rhythm sounded really skinny and gymnastic, and Daisy is part Ragamuffin, who are really huge cats. Her father’s genes made Daisy a bit smaller than normal ragamuffins, but Daisy is definitely gonna grow :-[
Maybe I just don’t wanna draw her as a fatty. *Hit*
Comment ID #36366
…But what’s gonna stop other people?
Comment ID #36374
I’m sorry Icaras, you’re crazy, it’s a white padded room for you *Boots*.
Abbey and Vicks *Shakes his head* The mirthful jock compared to the serious intellectual? What are you on man?!
Oh yes. Rhythm is WAY SUPER FAT. Eats too many sweets, and lives a rich-life style don’t you know, and Samantha likely provides her with more too. Daisy’s a twig next to Rhythm the god damn pink fatty. Too much cotton candy clearly.
Though.. really Skinny and Gymnastic is accurate XP
Comment ID #36378
*facepalm* Maybe i didn’t make myself clear. They may not be similar characters at all, but the social behaviors of these characters remind me of others. whether it goes farther than that is simply coincidence.
Comment ID #36384
Btw, do you think there will be drawings of the characters? You’re one of the first authors to give me a good mental image of the characters, but it’s still easier if I have a picture.
Comment ID #36777
Art of the characters? Ehn.. besides unexpected fan-art I doubt it. I do have a friend who owes me a few commissions so we’ll see, there are other characters I’d love to have art of too.
Comment ID #37694
Well, then why does this have the art tag?!
Btw, do you mind if I cut and paste your OCs’ info into my fancharacter thread?
Comment ID #37697
*blank stare* writing is considered an art form dude. As for the fan-character thread…. ehn…. I’d rather not.
Comment ID #37700
*Facepalming*
Comment ID #37998
oh i got a thank you and i didn’t notice that til now? : / i suck sorry bribri, your welcome btw :3
Comment ID #37999
@Bribri: technicalities ftw!! Overthinkers unite! There should be a literature/fanfic category on the forums, don’t you think?
Awww, but your characters rock!! Oh well, that’s why I asked permission.
Comment ID #38000
Edit effed up my browser, disregard.
Head back to the forum index.
Comment ID #24405
So what the heck is this you ask? Well.. It’s a fan fiction…sort of. Scroll down to read it, or continue reading my little rant here I don’t mind heh. This is the beginning of an ongoing story called Cookie Jar. It’s about Six teenage friends who go to the same school as the BCB crew. How they get along with each other, their lives, and the dramas they’ll have to deal with.
One thing you’ll notice right off the bat: None of Tae’s characters are in this! What sort of fan fiction is that?! Now, now calm down. This is the first story involving the group, and I wanted them to be the focus to help introduce them. You’ll get more cameos, and second-stringer spotlights once they’re back in class….though the six will remain the focus…as I’m a bit of a wuss when it comes to using other peoples characters. Sorry ^_^;;;
A thanks to Kraiz for proof reading the darn thing for me. I guess I could have tried to make these guys their own world… But it was BCB that inspired me to make them, and it felt like I was being a biter other wise. You can expect the second part within the next few days, as the draft copy is finished and just needs some fixing.
But right enough explanations: where’s our story?
‘Matchmaker’ will be the introductory tale for my little gang of misfits here, and will be posted in four parts. The first part is bellow, along with some optional material detailing the main characters appearances. This story takes place during the summer prior to the BCBs casts second year of high school.
Feel free to post praise, or hate! Both would be great!
===MATCHMAKER===
Part One of Four
“This freaking sucks” The slim BilliCat boy thought to himself, walking with an angry slouch.
It was a sunny August day as he made his way through the downtown streets, grumbling as he passed by the various window shoppers, not bothering to glance their way. That is until a chatty gang of attractive girls went by; The fifteen year old teenager walking backwards for further inspection. The sight did not improve his mood as he had hoped.
He stopped long enough to tug at his red necktie in frustration, the girls having walked out of view, “Just ain’t the same…” his eyes idly slid towards the sky “What the heck is wrong with that guy? Here I am checking out the girls on my own….tch…waste of my time”
The black and white feline twisted around again, getting back into his grouchy stride, remembering the conversation he had not long ago
“What’d he mean ‘No’”
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“What do you think I mean dude? I’m busy!” The golden-furred mutt declared, one paw gliding across the keyboard in front of him; the monitor above it the only light source in the shadowy basement: full of half-done horror props, and other movie-maker nick-knacks.
“Busy?! Dan! Danny-boy! My main man!” his white wrist doing a light roll with every line, “Busy is what you’ve been all summer. Take a break, have some fun! Listen, you don’t know what you’re missing out on here” The cat spread his hands wide as if describing some huge fish that had to be caught.
“They got this little theme park thing setup by the mall now, plenty of girls running around looking for fun, and that fun could be us!” To which Dan just shook his head, eyes not leaving the screen
“Dammit Johnny I busted my balls working for this gear.” He turned his seat to face his best friend, one hand placed firmly on the expensive camera beside him “Now that I got it I want to see what it can do ..”
“Exactly!” Johnny proclaimed, his grin as wide as ever, finger pointing right at Danny’s newest and most prized possession “That thing is what makes you the perfect wing-man. We tell the girls we’re making a movie and we need a few extra actors, hell you can even bring the thing and….”
As the greedy white hands got closer to the camera Dan’s eyes went wide, and his short, floppy-ears perked up with fear. He quickly pulled the thing off its tripod, and hugged it closely “No way Bro! No. Freaking. Way. I did not run around in a chicken suit like a tard for three months to have you break my stuff..”
The tuxedo furred feline stepped back, disbelief in his face “But, But… I need a wing-man… how about we…”
Dan frowned, placing the camera carefully on his desk before looking back at the screen “… dude.. look. I’ll always be your bro, but we can go chasing girls everyday when school starts again. Just take Vicks or something…you don’t need me” the dog boy giving one final dismissive wave behind him, and the battle was lost.
….Vicks…
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Bribri May 19, 2010, 10:12 PM EST.