Bittersweet Candy Bowl

This is a story featuring my character Ren Fisk and Lucy, in the syle of a journal. Kind short, but I like it.



October 21st, 2007

Today, I noticed something. Well, more like someone. Apparently there’s this cat girl in my class named Lucy. She looks….good, I must admit. Kinda weird for me to write that, I don’t like complimenting people. Anyways, she’s been in the same class as me for months yet I never noticed her. I think I’m gonna go out and talk to her tomorrow.
-Ren Fisk

October 22nd, 2007

Tried talking to Lucy in English. I slipped on a binder (why it was on the floor I’ll never know) and hit my head on a desk. Jimmy ain’t too happy about that.

-Ren Fisk

October 24th, 2007

Just got back from the hospital. Had to get a few stitches put in. Jimmy says if I keep taking falls like that he’ll tell my intestines to strangle my brain. He’s just saying that though.

-Ren Fisk

October 25th, 2007

I ended up getting my chance to converse with Lucy today. It wasn’t much; I said hey and she called me a jerkface. Jimmy laughed. A lot. He’s been pretty annoying recently. Still, it’s not like I can get rid of him.

-Ren Fisk

October 26th, 2007

Today I had an actual conversation with Lucy. Something about the weather. Shortly after we started talking though, she got all embarrassed and left. I’m hoping to be able to actually talk to her soon; maybe there’s a chance we could be friends. Gotta finish this, Will and I are going out to throw rocks at train cars.

-Ren Fisk

October 27th, 2007

Last night Will and I met Lucy at the old railroad station on the edge of town. She looked like she’d been crying. I asked her about it, and after insulting me for awhile she told me her story-apparently she loved some guy named Mike but he didn’t love her, and when she found someone else, he became a skeezball. In return, I told her about the accident and how Saint Jimmy became part of my mind. She said she’d never met someone with two personalities. Makes me feel unique.

-Ren Fisk

November 9th, 2007

I’m feeling more miserable than usual today. Don’t feel like talking about it; I’m just gonna give Jimmy control and sleep.

-Ren Fisk

November 10th, 2007

I guess I should write about what happened, it might make me feel better. Me and Lucy had become friends since my last entry. We did stuff together and hung out together. I finally got the courage to ask her out, but she shot me down. She said some mean stuff about how every guy she dates ends up hurting her, and how I’d do the same thing. Jimmy got super pissed and took control for a few minutes. He was screaming at her, saying to “Never insult my friend again!” He had her in tears before we passed out. I don’t know why we did; I guess Jimmy overwhelmed our body. I feel terrible, and Jimmy won’t stop apologizing. At least he cares.

-Ren Fisk

November 11th, 2007

I felt slightly better after writing yesterday’s entry, so I thought I should finally write about the accident. Two years ago, my best friend Will and I were taking a walk to Gamestop to loiter. As we were walking, a drunk driver swerved by us and almost hit Will. He’s like my brother, so I pushed him out of the way and I got hit instead. I flew into a tree and passed out. I fell into a coma and met Saint Jimmy, the embodiment of all my pent-up anger and other emotions. When I awoke, I kept switching from Ren to Jimmy uncontrollably. Eventually we settled it out though.

-Ren Fisk

November 12th, 2007

I talked to Lucy about what happened. She said I was a jerkface and wouldn’t talk to me for awhile, but I was pretty persistent. Eventually she forgave me, and we agreed to just stay semi-close friends. Not what I hoped for really, but close only counts in horseshoes and handgrenades.

-Ren Fisk

Hm, an interesting way to write.
It’s kinda bland, but at the same time allows room to imagine the situation.

Yeah, I thought it was good this morning, but when I thought about it later I was like “…..FECK.” Too late to edit it, oh noez!
EDIT-This isn’t canon in Taeshi’s world (obvsly) or mine. Just thought I should clear that up, some people make fanfics canon in their own comics/cartoons/whatevs.

Green Day references abound. This made the last two hours of my day.

@Taeshi: Hey! Don’t be slamming the crazy people! If everybody was sane, the world wouldn’t be any fun, now would it?

But yeah, I didn’t get the whole Jimmy thing at first either.
As for the actual writing, it’s not BAD, mostly just from a decidedly odd perspective. Could definitely use some work, but how many of us write in perfect prose in a journal/diary?

I for one like the concept. The way you slipped Jimmy into the mix was actually kind of clever (even if the character is a little cliche’d).

My only gripe is that it’s yet another character crushing on Lucy…

Yeah, I’m not too keen on fan characters snuggling up to Lucy all of the sudden, personally, but I love the whole split personality dynamic. And, really, I can’t tell whether her reaction to finding out about it off-handedly like that would be realistic in regards to her character or anything, but that’s kind of a grey area. Really, I don’t think we can be sure how accepting she’d be so at least attempting to flesh that out is a pretty ballsy move.

But one thing that would’ve been neat to see (and this is just my Green Day fanboy talking) is if he referred to her as Whatsername at least once before the end, know what I mean? xD