Bittersweet Candy Bowl

*Googles Alex McLeish up*

Well of course you’ll have to introduce him! He’s the bloody manager after all!

lolz I just didn’t wanna bring another Alex in…

So what animal would he be then?

an old dog with new tricks

nah i dunno, wat u think?

Chapter 15, The next day

Alex McLeish lolled his head to one side, he had allowed that Pospech to return home for the rest of the season. And it was starting to pay its toll, they had already slipped out of the top 7 and were 9th with 8 games to play, Europe looked a distant challenge. He stretched out in the chair. It had been a long time since Birmingham city had been in the Premier League, the only thing they could do now was try to get into
the Europa League, and the only way that would happen was with Pospech!

“McLeish! Phone call, It’s Pospech’s agent.” His secretary called. Alex got up from his chair. and walked through to the negotiations room. He picked up the phone and spoke quickly. “Dave, we need him back if we want Europe, we would also consider buying him for more than £20,000000.” McLeish’s ears pricked up. “£25,000000? Thats a bit much isn’t it? Hmmm, Ok , he’s living in Cabarosa right? Thats just down the road, ok £25,000000 it is, on 1 condition!…”

“£25,000000 if he finishes the season with us, if not, £20,000000! Ok ok Dave just listen. Cabarosa is just down the road, well 2 hours drive but thats beyond the point.” McLeish yawned. “We train there anyway, he can just come with us.” McLeish smiled. “Thats fantastic thank you, now I just need to inform him, do you have his mobile number?” Alex noted down the number and clicked the phone off, then punched the number into his phone.

“Alex stevenson here.” The answer came. The name didn’t ring a bell to McLeish. “Ummm hello, this is Alex McLeish, is Pospech there?” He spoke softly. “Umm I have a bit of a confession, I am Pospech, he was a made up character so you wouldn’t bother me.” Alex spoke. McLeish sighed, this was the second time this had happened. “Well thats ok, but you need to start training again, I just bought you for 25 million pounds! On the condition you played the rest of the games this season.” Alex’s eyes widened. Then he sighed. “Ok but I’m gonna bring someone to training with me. He’s good.”

“No Alex you cannae bring another person.” Mcleish spoke, his scottish accent breaking out. “We have 30 players, we can only have 2 more players.” Alex sighed. “Just let him try, you woke me up at 5:00am to force me to play football for you, at least do something for me!” Alex replied assertively. Mcleish thought about this for a moment, then sighed. “Ok whats his name? An evil smile curved around his lips as he spoke. “David!”






yep, not alot of David so far, actually i don’t think any, I’m gonna enjoy writing the training session

Oh man, how’d David get there? XD
This’ll definately get Alex in shape.

*Blaze uses revive*
*Topic restored 999 hp*
*Topic used random spoiler*

Yeah Jack and Alex may be a bit hostile at 1 point in the next chapter ^^

Heh, I wonder what’cha planning?

Oh, also sent you an email.

yeah i sent u 1 back

*Blaze uses glare*
*Taeshi was paralyzed, it may not be able to move*
*Taeshi is paralyzed, it can’t move!*
*Blaze uses Close Combat!*
*Taeshi took 999 damage*
*Taeshi fainted*

*Ved uses splash*
*Blaze took unimaginable damage*
*Blaze fainted*
*Ved lost the game*
*Ved is sad*

*Trivia*

Which ear does Alex have half bitten off?

*Update*

Will try to update tommorow

@Blaze

I’d say McLeish would be a cross between a West Highland White Terrier and a Scottish Terrier. You can take liberties and remove a bit of hair at the front of the face. On another note,the stuff about Cabarosa being 2 hours away is confusing…

Oh Snap!

I meant to say on a plane, and since every football team has a private jet they can just fly

New chapter soon. Epic fight scene

Chapter 16, Friends?

Alex slammed the phone down and sighed. He was already angry at Jack when that scottish recluse McLeish had called. 5:00am in the morning. Who even calls at that time?! Alex stretched his back, he was far too alert to get back back to sleep. He walked down the stairs to his front room and turned on the lights. He then picked up a book and opened it. He read through a couple of pages when there was a knock on the door, Alex walked to the door and opened it. Alex was startled when all he saw were 2 red eyes staring back at him!

“Aghh!” Alex screamed jumping back! “What the hell!?” He screamed at the eyes as he heard laughter, a hand reached up and pulled something off the eyes to reveal Jack standing in front of him. “Oh man, you should have seen your face.” Jack laughed in hysterics. His laughed disolved as alex grabbed him underneath both shoulders and thrusted him in the air. “You little shit!” Alex shouted. “What the hell man, it was a joke!”

Alex held him strong then thrust him backwards, Jack flew threw the air and landed in the stance that sprinters asume before running. He then launched himself at Alex, he connected 3 simultaneous blows to his stomach before being sent flying back through the air from a turning kick. Jack tried to sit up but he was winded! He stopped for a second to get his breath back then evaded a double punch from Alex to land a 360 degree axe kick to Alex’s face.

Alex was struck right in the nose and blood spurted from it. He quickly checked to feel the injury. “Nothing too serious.” He thought before making a knife-hand strike to Jack’s neck! The chop had been rather strong and had caught Jack off guard, he couldn’t breath! He kneeled down, struggling to breath! Jack eventually recovered and Swung his legs round, knocking Alex onto the floor!

So there they were, both squirming around on the floor, landing punches wherever they could, until Jack finally screamed. “Stop!” Alex stopped his assault and started wheezing, “Glad I freakin got that out my system!” He laughed, which set off Jack too.

“Sorry man.” Alex apologised. “How can i make it up to you?” Jack thought for a second. “Come and sit with me and my friends at lunch tomorrow.” Jack smiled. Alex thought about Jack’s request. “How about you bring your friends to sit with mine?” He asked. Jack nodded and walked away rubbing his neck. Alex simply walked inside and went back to sleep.




Heh heh, no bloodlust for Jack just yet

Alex, Jack
Pleaz stopp all of teh vilence
U iz scarin kiddies evrywere
Booo!

All I have to say is this! Apparently we are very excited! We use exclamation marks every two sentences! We must be really, really uppity about sowt! We really must use the exclamation mark, because we are so ecstatic! Proclaim it to the world!

Not to be an asshole, but do you see what I mean mate? It’s becoming a growing thread as you write your chapters. You should really proof read your stuff a few times before posting it…

Heh, a funny reunuion.
And not to worry, it’s not the season yet.
And this gives me a few more ideas…

umm Pron I dont understand what you mean? explain?

Alex was struck right in the nose and blood spurted from it. He quickly checked to feel the injury. “Nothing too serious.” He thought before making a knife-hand strike to Jack’s neck! The chop had been rather strong and had caught Jack off guard, he couldn’t breath! He kneeled down, struggling to breath! Jack eventually recovered and Swung his legs round, knocking Alex onto the floor!

I marked in italics the places where you put the exclamation marks mate. In this short paragraph, there’s 4 exclamation marks. If you tried reading that out loud, it would make no sense the way it’s accentuated. By putting so many exclamation marks, you are cutting the flow of our story. In this particular paragreph, you needn’t have put any exclamation marks. You could feel the rsh without ‘em, now it just sounds like you were drinking too much caffeine when you wrote this and need to take a piss really badly. Sounds brusque, but that’s the way it reads.

ah i see, i will take that into consideration, but I think that since it was a fight scene it would need them? I guess not.

Exclemation marks make the world go round!
In fact if you don’t us exclamation marks 4 times a day men in black suits kill your whole family!
There called the Exclamation-Squad!
But now I’m happy!
I’m safe from the squad.

@Blaze

I understand that this was a fight scene. But the flow of your words should make the people feel the tension and excitement of the story. I think only the thoughts and spoken words of the characters should have any marks. And they should be used sparingly because a simple highlight like I did shows that it forces breaks in the rhythm and it looks (and sounds) awful…

Yeah I understand

God, I sound like a teacher! XD

Heh, just wait till I have to draw that. ;P

Make sure no one at home sees it.
They might worry about you

next chapter on Saturday ^^

I’ll bump this up, whether someone wants to reread this or if Blaze decides to update later.

Yeah We are still waiting. It’s 6:25 PM here already.

Really?, It’s 1:28 in Michigan.

Well, Blaze and I are on GMT. What’s your time zone?

EDT Wow, half you day is already gone.

Yep, and that’s why tomorrow I’m going out instead of staying home again… my extra holidays are nearly over now.

Ah, well have fun tomarrow.

Yeah, I will.

sorry for not updating, havn’t been able to write, been throwing up

Aww, get better soon.

Yeah, can’t wait for your random story that makes no sense!

What a moron…

*Blaze uses Glare on Polaris*
*Polaris is paralyzed, it cannot move!*
*Blaze uses Draco meteor*
*It’s a critical hit!*
*Blaze gained 1 exp*

OK? How are you feeling mate?

a bit better, I managed to eat and not throw it straight back up

I’ll try and write some more but it may be a while…

Ok do take your time…

Chapter 17, Wishes come true.

“A stereo is just a stereo, nothing important about it at first glance, but when it is switched on, you’re room comes to life. The sound blasting around the room, the echoing noise can be made louder or more quiet to test your hearing. The stereo is a very versatile invention, can play CD,s, the radio or tapes. The man who invented the stereo was obviously a complete genius…”

“Ok Conor thats very nice, but it hasn’t helped us make any progress…” Strickland said looking at his watch. He was conor’s psychiatrist, and had been for a few months. “Dont you see? I think of her like a stereo.” Conor screamed back angrily. “Conor have you been drinking?” Strickland asked.

Conor slapped his hand on his head, he was so tired, Luna was dominating his mind. As always… The dog had stolen his heart, then ripped it to pieces. The kids at school had started calling him a recluse. But they can say what they want, he was going to get over her, and he knew exactly how.

Conor was going crazy trying to think. He just needed to find a way within his mind to free himself. See, his heart was trapped inside a vault, this vault was protected from pretty much any battering it is possible to unleash upon it, this was Conor’s thinking. He needed a reason to stop loving her to open the vault, but his 15 year old mind wasn’t strong enough to crack the code! ((“first exclamation mark yet Pronkat&rdquo)

“Thats it!” Conor screamed. “I know what I need to do… But first I need you to cancel my sessions Strickland. I’m moving to Cabarosa.” Strickland raised an eyebrow. “Well thats unexpected, but I have to do what you say Conor.” He spoke softly before walking out of Conor’s house. When he had gone, Conor retraced his thought trail, to the part where he looked at the vault. He could see it in his mind, the steel box looked intimidating…

He moved the box closer, and picked it up, he then thought the words. “Lets just be friends.” And a sense of euphoria rushed over him as the door to the box flung open, the euphoria was so strong he had to close his eyes as it swept over his entire body.

Once he had recovered, he walked to his table and picked up his phone, punched in his dad’s number. “Hello?” His father answered. “Dad It’s me, I want you to come and get me. I wanna move in with you.”

gah, need feedback

Hm, incoming ex-boyfriend.
Looks like his intentions are good, but what is his plan?

It’s a nice improvement, although I’m not a writer so I can’t really say what faults are there.
It is smoother however.

i wrote the next chapter 3 days ago, however my computer F***ed it up so I have to rewrite it


should be up soon