It seems to do that when there’s too many words, put it in multiple posts.
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Ribbon(The murder of Lucy) Chpt. 1
Comment ID #58332
Comment ID #58336
I should do that…
Comment ID #58338
You should totally also add it to fanfiction.net so that A CERTAIN SOMEONE’S lemon doesn’t stick out like a sore thumb ;__;
Comment ID #58339
OH MY GOD I JUST READ IT ;_____;
AAAAAAAAA poor lucy ;_____; I felt really terrible at Sue’s part in the story, that must be so absolutely painful for her to do. At least everyone is living a generally good life.
Comment ID #58341
I would add it to fanfiction.net but…I’m still a bit confused at the workings of it. >_
Comment ID #58342
I thought it was pretty good, except for one thing: adding an in-joke about the characters’ last names in such a dramatic scene breaks the tension a bit too much.
Comment ID #58343
also HOLY CRAP
YOU’RE TAKUNICHAN
Hi O____O *waves arms rapidly* I know you man!! you’re like one of the freaken senior bcbreaders like Mae and shit wow
Comment ID #58344
Very cool story so far! I like how David and Paulo are bachelor roommates, I am sure that someone could make a cool fanfiction on that story basis.
But back to your story, I am very excited to see the details of the murder, but even more interested to see what the BCB cast intend to do about it.
Comment ID #58351
Miw-I know, but honestly I didn’t want to break the whole ‘their last names shall be a mystery!’ thing. It didn’t feel right to add last names. Sorry about that.
Taeshi-Yeah, I didn’t think you remembered me. Heh, still going strong for those comics of yours. I hope I don’t butcher your characters in this story. I apologize if I do.
Junior- Thanks! I couldn’t really think of the two actually settling down, so why not be craaaazy bachelors?? (I smell a sitcom. o_o) And yeah, I’m pretty excited too. I like writing dramatic mysterious things.
Comment ID #58353
Well, I can say I liked the story.
It was a pleasant read, manages to catch the attention from the beginning, and viewing the situation from the different character’s perspectives makes it a more complete experience.
I can’t really point out something really important that it lacked. It’s just my opinion but think it could have been a bit better if you had vaguely implied the kids had found something.
Awesome work. And +watch’d. ^^
Comment ID #58618
This is a good story, it should be up on top so people who weren’t around last night can see it.
Head back to the forum index.
Comment ID #58327
Read it hurrrr; http://takunichan.deviantart.com/art/Ribbon-BCB- Fanfic-170831330
Because its not letting me post the story on here…
Lindsay July 10, 2010, 11:43 PM EST.