Bittersweet Candy Bowl

ok so Ark made a fanstory about BCB and dead space so he inspierd me to make my own story and this is a mix of warhammer 40k and BCB it is gone be maby a 6-9 chapter story that il post maby 1-2 parst of a hafl chapter each week (count on how much i write on school or home) i am done whit chapter 1 and 2 and i am sone done whit chapter 3 but i am only posting a preweiw for today and may post half a chapter later maby next week if i can hold out that long and when i have come to the last chapter the i got 2 suprises coming up one made by my friend yin on steam and me making somthing that i need to paint first but now lets put up the prewiew that i have made hope you all like it

chapter 2. what the f#@k is hapening

The dog didn’t understand what he had started but before he could do anything about it was too late (Augustus): get your hands of me you filthy vermin. And then Augustus blazed up in flames and David was sent flying to the wall knocking him unconscious as they looked at him they could see that his right arm, leg and parts of his face was burned away into ash luckily the burn had made a crisp of burned flesh and fur where his missing limbs used to be so he couldn’t bleed to death but at this point they didn’t know if he was dead or alive and panic braked lose most of the students when a brake for it to get away from the chaos but some of them stayed Tess and Paulo was running to David to see if he was ok and call for help on the cell phone but all lines was dead (Abbey): how could you such a thing Augustus why? (Augustus): why because I got the power to do whatever I want and now it ends here. As he rose his staff up in the air and punched it into the ground sending a blue flaming shockwave around him heeding towards the group and then it was only darkness.

I think we’re in the familiar territory of someone writing a fic who both, doesn’t speak English as their native language, and hasn’t written a story before.

First thing’s first. Learn to indent. It make’s it easier to read the story if it’s broken up into paragraphs. (Take this post for example. See how I’ve broken this paragraph away from the last one to distinguish that I’m writing about a slightly different topic?).

Also, learn punctuation. You seem to have a grasp of the basics. Capitals, colons & periods. But you need to learn how to form a sentence. You have 7 lines of text that you’ve presented as a single sentence with out a single full stop! It makes it REALY hard to read and keep track of what is happening.

On the point of dialogue. You can chose to write this one of two ways. As a script, or as a story. At the moment, this reads a little more like a script. In that case, every time you have a character talk, and you’re stating that that character is talking, you need to give them a new line, like so

—-

Abbey was sick of Augustus always trying to goad him into a fight.

(Abbey): Leave me alone you bastard!

(Augustus): Why should I? You’re so much fun to torment!

Abbey balled his fingers into a fist and struck the black and white cat hard, leaving a harsh throbbing pain in his jaw.

—-

The other option is to write it like a story, in which you need to let us know who’s speaking in the descriptive text rather than labeling it. Here’s an example of that.

—-

Abbey was sick of Augustus always trying to goad him into a fight. “Leave me alone you bastard!” He shouted in anger.

“Why should I? You’re so much fun to torment!” Augustus taunted back with a sly grin. Abbey balled his fingers into a fist and struck the black and white cat hard, leaving a harsh throbbing pain in his jaw.

—-

Pick whichever best suits your style.

Now, there’s a lot of grammatical issues in here, but I’m going to attribute that to language barrier issue. So it can’t really be helped until you get better at English. Just a few I noticed to give you an idea. (I have used bold to mark the wrong terms, and their corrected replacements).

“Tess and Paulo was running to David” should be “Tess and Paulo were running to David”

“they didn’t know if he was dead or alive and panic braked lose” should be “they didn’t know if he was dead or alive and panic broke lose”

“call for help on the cell phone but all lines was dead” should be “call for help on the cell phone but all lines were dead”

“(Augustus): why because I got the power to do whatever I want and now it ends here.” should be “(Augustus): why because I have the power to do whatever I want and now it ends here.”

So looking back, what you really need, is to learn tens. Past, Present & Future versions of words. “Had, Have, Will Have” as an example. Look it up and see what you can learn

As for the story itself? I can’t really comment. There’s BARELY enough story here so far to wet my appetite. But I’ll definitely come back to see how it’s progressing later

tl;dr
This fic needs alot of work to be good.

did you read it was a preweiw but ty for this il fix the parts that need to be fixed and punch my pc for changing thing that was right

oh i forgot the model i am making for one of the caracters in the comic if anyone can guess who it is then il make the one you whant me to make but not sandy or david since i cant find any heads to them that will fit

This seems Like it could become a great story and I urge you to develope it, I’m sure this will be ALOT better than Dead Candy Bowl.

But then, Twilight was better than DCB.. I_I

I feel a tremor in the Warp.


This won’t end well…

@sammy

well I haven’t read Twilight or seen the movies so I wouldn’t know but ya probably.

well time for me to start posting the story i dident do so much to chapter 1 since i think its pretty god right now and il try to post half a chapter every monday and maby friday if i know its ready and il look at the formu as much i can to answer questions if anyone have one so lets start this black crusade of mine

Chapter 1. The beginning of the end
It was night the moon was full whit a bluish glow and Augustus was walking home from school he knew that any chance getting the trust to Daisy again was long gone if it weren’t for Abbey and her friends then maybe he would succeeded in his plan but no it wasn’t supposed to happen. As he came home his parents and little brother was already eating diner he ignored his mom asking if he wanted join them for dinner and went straight for his room and slammed the door behind him his room was same as he left it earlier today it was still dark whit his bed at the corner and a TV at the end of the room on his desk he had a god deal of homework and some strange looking symbols carved on some metal medallion’s he went straight for his bed cursing Abbey and Daisy’s friends

(Augustus): I was so close if it weren’t for those friends of hers she would have been mine if I only had more power then I could maybe have had here in my grasp and I would do anything for more power.

As he said those words a cold voice whispered to him

(?): anything you say.

Augustus looked for where the voice was coming from as he looked to his desk he noticed that one of the symbols was glowing in a blue and purple flame looking form as it got bigger in power the voice become more clearly

(?): so you want more power you say well I can give you enough power to take whatever you want.

Said the dark cold voice

(Augustus): who are you?

Augustus said white a tone of fear in his voice

(?): just call me Tzeentch.

The cold voice said as the flames blazed when the name was mentioned

(Augustus): Tzeentch you say wait isn’t that the god of magic and change?

(Tzeentch): so you have heard of the story’s I see.

(Augustus): heard it I have read the story’s where you and 3 other powerful gods almost destroyed this planet by corrupting it to the weary core and that you all got repelled by titans in golden armor and blue glowing weapons that could cut a mountain in half so why should I accept your offer?

end of part 1-1 part 1-2 comes maby next friday

the changer of ways has come to bless our passing! all hail tzentch!

(will comment fo real when i have more time)

*update*
kk so i am gone post the new one on friday or soner but i also are working on som of the caracters to make the in to imperial soldiers of diffrent adaptuses il sone post some pictures when i am done with Paulo and Lucy and some of the others are alredy done but need paint and il post some work in progress art a frinde of mine if its ok for her so il have a bit of an ubdate next time but fornow hope you all enjoy the first part and more will come

*smal update* (for now )

kk so i dident get to finish some of the caracters since i am still looking for some parts to Lucy and some tools to make Paulo but Mike is done only need paint and some tiny parts after i have painted him but here is a link to some of the work yin is making and sothing that is coming sone but its work in progress so if you see somthing then it will be fixed later so hope you all like them and i dident make them yin did it

http://yinnyckelpiga.blogspot.com/2010/09/ work_24.html

*reads this and shudders* the monsters of the warp and the BCB cast….someone contact the Librarians. Someone has violated the adeptus astartes.

All humor aside, this looks like its gonna be really cool.

*has random thoughts of Paulo as a tyranid and Mike as a space marine*

…Lucy would so be a sister of battle

*rest of the update*
ok so in 10 houers i am gone have 2 test’s on alarm system and my teacher is like a chaos spawn to me so i may not survive so il post the next part of chapter 1
and maby this weekend il put up some pictures of Mike since he is most done and Lucy Paulo and Abbey will i post later when i am done with there heads and maby il post more if my steam page is still down on this pc but befor i post this next part il have to say this

@Trev: how the hell did you know Mike was a space marine? and if you wonder what Paulo is go and google Marbo but i bet you know who that is

Chapter 1-2. The beginning of the end

At first there where silent for I while then Tzeentch replied

(Tzeentch): you know the answer you want something that you cannot have in this state but if you accept this offer then you will have all the powers you want to get the one thing you desire but if you accept you have to do something for me.

At first Augustus just wanted to throw the medallion away but he knew that he was right if he ever wanted to get Daisy back then he had to do it

(Augustus): ok I accept but what’s the catch. As the daemon heard those words he smiled and he said

(Tzeentch): for my daemons to get to this world I need a sacrifice but not any kind of sacrifice I need a sacrifice of true love only in that powerful felling of losing once loved one then I’ll be able to brake the fabric of the univers.

Shocked to hear what Tzeentch was planning to do to the world either way he accepted the offer

(Augustus): so how do I get this powers you say I can get?

(Tzeentch): the medallion I use to contact you also can be used to transfer the powers you want to it but it may alter your look and if you take it off then a horrible pain will start building up in your body until your whole body incinerate.

Scared to know what may happen but he picked up the medallion and put it on at first there was nothing at first he taught this was just a dream or imaginary but then Tzeentch started mumbling some word of a strange languish that Augustus never have heard of then it happened a blue flame started growing on Augustus’s body and incinerating all that was in his room to ash then a blue flash as powerful the sun itself lighted up the whole area of his home then as it faded away there where only darkness the only thing that lighted the room was the blue flames still burning on some of the stuff in the room and Augustus that everyone had known was no more the one standing in the room was a robed figure holding in his left hand a staff and in the right a book that looked like it was alive as Tzeentch smiled in a sinister look he said

(Tzeentch): let the end of this planet begin.

so next part il post later this week or next week (if i survive)
comments are welcomed

*tiny update*
only some houres unrtil my death test so if i survive then il post whole chapter 2 later this day and start of chapter 3 on monday next week and some pictures of the models this weekend so get ready for more chaos powers and purging

PS. some may look that some lether dosent fit like when it says for I while when it was gone be for a while thats cose i got 2 pc’s and one has a fucked up office word so il fix that later.

*update*
I SURVIVED and now i know how it feels to get hi by a power weapon in the head but ya so i promised to put out chapter 2 now and half chapter 3 monday but i may be a bit busy this week since tf2 update just came out so chapter 4 or 5 will come a bit late
but lets start this

Chapter 2. What the f#@k is happening?

It was just as any other days Lucy and Mike meet up whit Daisy and Abbey in the park Lucy and Mike was still arguing about last game night about Lucy using always the cheap moves

(Mike): it is pretty cheap using the noob tube for the whole game.

(Lucy): well if had played as much games as you I wouldn’t need those tactics.

(Mike): it isn’t tactics only cheap moves (a bit like you).

It is surprising that Daisy and Abbey could hold it out whit them and there arguing

(Daisy): why can’t they just admit that they love each other’s instead of holding it in and tell lies to each other?

(Abbey): I would understand why they don’t do it.

(Daisy): ?

(Abbey): think about it Lucy is afraid that she will be rejected or get left behind by the only person she trust the most after her family and Mike is to confused of his feelings and one day he may have to make a big choice and when that day come then we can’t help him.

Daisy nodded for a while and was in here own thoughts until Paulo and David called out for them

(Paulo): so what is happening here?

Whit a smirk on his face

(Abbey): oh just the same as always those love birds over there is still arguing about a game as always.

Paulo looking behind Abbey seeing how this arguing is going

(Paulo): wow when Lucy is mad then it’s really arousing.

All looking at Paulo in a weird look except David since he was too busy looking at the butterfly flying around him and in that moment Paulo got hit in the stomach by Lucy knocking out all the air in Paulo

(Lucy): say that one more time and ill aim lower you pervert.

After that moment they all went silent to school but some of them had it hard to hold the laughs in when they got to the school they met up whit Tess at the school front yard seeing Paulo holding his belly like he was gone throw up his stomach

(Tess): what happened to Paulo?

(Lucy): oh he got hit in the stomach by a football on the way to school.

As she Kicked Paulo in the leg

(Paulo): yah a football.

He grumbled then they noticed that the school was about to start and rushed to the door as most of the students there but they didn’t get that far as they where half way to the door a blue flame started rising from the ground they all stopped in front of it thinking that it was just a leek of gas but then they noticed that it was a robed figure coming out of the flames as they took some steps back before the figure could get out of the flames at first there was silence the only sound you could hear was the wind and the crackling of the blue flames and then the robed figure spoke in a dark tone

(?): so we meet again Abbey.

Abbey looked shocked to know that the robed figure knows his name

(Abbey): who are you?

(Daisy’s thoughts): that voice it’s so familiar but I can’t put my finger on it.

(?): oh you may know me as the one you stopped from achieving his plans to get together with someone he loved.

Then in that moment they relished who it was

(Abbey and Daisy): Augustus!

As the robed figure took his hood off they recognized him but he was different he had the same look as always but he had a yellow eye in his forehead that looked like it followed every move of the terrified students and his normal eyes was black whit a blue flame in each pupil

(Augustus): yes it’s me.

(Abbey): what happened to you?

(Augustus): well as you know you stopped me from taking something I loved and I was all down until a god of unlimited power gave me the chance to take whatever I wanted so I toke it and now I got the powers to dominate this world and beyond.

Pretty much every body was shocked to hear this most was standing frozen in fear and shock except some of them

(Abbey): I won’t let you take here away.

(Augustus): oh I am not only gone take here ill also take the one whit the pink bow to she looks fitted to the sacrifice that is coming.

(Lucy and Mike): what?

Lucy just wanted to punch him the hardest she could but then Mike went in front of her

(Mike): I won’t let you take her as long as I live.

(Augustus): well we will see about that.

As Augustus pulled his hand back mumbling in a languish that they never have heard of then a flaming ball of blue and purple but before he could use it on Mike, David had slapped Augustus on his back getting him out of focus

(David): so you can use magic well can you pull a rabbit out of your hat or something more impressive? The dog didn’t understand what he had started but before he could do anything about it was too late

(Augustus): get your hands of me you filthy vermin.
And then Augustus blazed up in flames and David was sent flying to the wall knocking him unconscious as they looked at him they could see that his right arm, leg and parts of his face was burned away into ash luckily the burn had made a crisp of burned flesh and fur where his missing limbs used to be so he couldn’t bleed to death but at this point they didn’t know if he was dead or alive and panic braked lose most of the students when a brake for it to get away from the chaos but some of them stayed Tess and Paulo where running to David to see if he was ok and call for help on the cell phone but all lines was dead

(Abbey): how could you such a thing Augustus why? (Augustus): why because I have the power to do whatever I want and now it ends here.
As he rose his staff up in the air and punched it into the ground sending a blue flaming shockwave around him heeding towards the group and then it was only darkness.

hope you all liked it all comments are welcome

*bad and god news update*
ok since i just got to know that i am going to my grandmom this week so i eill not have the time to put out the pictures of space marine Mike but i am atlest done with chapter 3-4 now so il post on monday or later when i get back and i hope more will read this but for now may the faith of the Emperor of mankind protect you

a 40k and BCB crossover?

this is going to hurt someone terribly.

Slaanesh is gonna get rape-fest all over whore-cat’s ass
Mike’s gonna go through the painful Astartes conversion
Lucy’s gonna become a battle-sister
McCain will turn into an inquisitor
Sue as well
Daisy will be killed by a genestealer
Abbey and Paulo will join Imperial Guard
the rest will become target practice for orks or torture toys for dark eldar

because thats how it works

eldar will probably just try to interrogate them or something cuz the BCB characters are essentially from the past

oh and Augustus will become a daemon prince. whoop-de-frikkin-do

*update*
now i know they have a internet here at my grandmom so il post some stuff maby tomorow and maby chapter 3 to and some new picture that Yin has made and about the Slaanesh comment thats the resone i picked Tzeentch to be the chos god in the story slaan culd just throw out some catnip and it will be someones f@#k up sex fantesy (bet sock may like it) and the rest of the chaos god dosent fit in the story and the plotline but now i shuld just shut up befor i say it all (and its hard not to jsut be done with it by posting it all) well time for me to get started with Lucy’s bow and Paulo’s hear so bb and hope more will read the story and futere storys il maby make

*clears throat* hmm hmm… THIS HERES A WAAAAAAAAGGGH !

just making some fineshing tuches then il post the next part of chapter 3 when diffrent parts meet

*late update*
ok so chapter 3 is a bit longer the the rest so il cut it in 3 parts and since i am having a brake from school and work and got a lot of tf2 trades and warjammer 40k battles coming up this week then chapter 4 will come a bit late but here is atlest chapter 3 for now hope you all like it

Chapter 3. When different parts meet.

It is said that in space no one can hear you call for help but this time it’s different outside the radius of any normal scanner was 4 space ships almost as big as the moon itself followed by 13 smaller ones each one having a different mark either a metal hand to a dragon head but all ships had one symbol in common and that was a 2 headed eagle all ships was painted in green coolers but one stands out of the rest instead of green it was almost looking as it was made of pure gold and in this ship a great figure clad in golden armor whit eagle marks all over it that sat on a throne in the middle of the room where half machine creatures working on what looked like the control system and at the doors was more golden clad warriors taller than a normal person and carried a spear that looked like it had blue lightning’s on it then one of the navigators turned around to the big figure on the throne

(navigator): my lord we got a reading of psyker on this planet it looks like alpha level no wait it just went up to alpha plus level.

As the figure rose up from his throne and walked to the navigator

(The lord): alpha plus you say must be a daemon world if it has that kind of powers what is the planet called?

The navigator went true his data slat

(Navigator): we don’t have any recordings of this planet in the archive so it isn’t a part of the old imperial empirer.

(The lord): well then it looks like we have to purge…..

Before he could finish the sentence the navigator reported

(Navigator): wait my lord I read 2 more alpha plus psyker’s on the planet but it doesn’t have the same signature as the warp energy it almost has the signature as the powers you uses.

When the lord heard he went straight for the door

(The lord): can it be them, soldier I want a group of custodies down to the teleport room in 3 minutes we are going planet fall.

Down on the ground it was chaos, blue flames burning everything but in the middle you could see a yellow dot as a shield and in it was a group of friends shocked of what is happening David was still unconscious and the rest looked at Abbey and Mike that had saved them from death

(Lucy): Mike, Abbey what the hell are you all doing?

They couldn’t believe what had just happened before the shock wave could hit them Abbey and Mike had somehow got a shield of pure light around them all shielding from the flames

(Mike): I don’t know but as long as it works we will keep on going.

And then the flames stopped all around was thing either burned to ash or melted to a pile of sludge and in the center of the chaos was Augustus unharmed as he saw in the direction of them he was a bit surprised that they were still alive and smiled as he walked to them

(Augustus) so I am not the only one with powers here but I am still the strongest here.

As he smiled a flame looking sword appeared in his hand and smashed it in the shield, the shield was still holding but it took a lot power to hold it up and since Mike and Abbey wasn’t trained to use this power they easily lost this fight Mike went unconscious of the power he used and Abbey alone couldn’t hold it alone and was pushed back by the force of the last hit knocking him down making it impossible for Abbey to put up any resistance

(Augustus): looks like I won and now I’ll take my price.

As he turned to Lucy and Daisy and raised his hand and in that moment a blue flame swallowed both Daisy and Lucy and disappeared whit only ash left

(Abbey): Daisy! What have you done whit them.

(Augustus): oh don’t worry they are not dead yet, but for you it is.

As Augustus raised his sword for a final blow to Abby to end it all but before he could use his sword a bright light blinded them Bothe and when the light faded away a shot was fired right in front of Augustus whit a force that was not close to any normal weapons close to what they have seen

(?): drop your weapon chaos scum.

next part coming wedensday or friday comments are welcome

*small update*
ok so i have Mike sone done still need the damn paint do but i am going to GW tomorow to get some paint and armor units for my army but idk when il post some pictures of Mike il try to do it next week or when i can find a god enugh camera for the job, i stil dont know if il post part 2 of chapter 3 tomorow it cunts on if anyone whants a story monday or wedensday since i am a bit long away to be done to chapter 4 (blame tf2 and l4d2) but il see what i can get done and if anyone is in Oslo’s games workshop then il have the Mike model with me just look for the guy with a starcraft dog-tag so hope some enjoys this story and let me know if anyone whant me to put in some warhammer 40k caracters or maby some fan made BCB caracters (if i can make them fit in the story)
but you have to tell me there personalety but for now i have some more trading and planing so bye bye and have fun

*part 1 update*
kk i only got sec’s before i run to the train so all i am going to Oslo to the GW there to get some paint to Mike and a lot of armor units so if anyone whants to know more of the story or how Mike and the rest of the BCB crew will look like so just look for the guy with glasses and a dog tag and il see you there

*update*
kk i am back from GW gone a ton of units and paint now but i am sorry to inform to the few readers here that chapter 3-2 is gone be delayede until friday since i got to much to do right now and il try to get some pictures of Mike hope no one gets mad (for now he he ) if you have any complains then go to my steam acount (real emperor bacon) well see you all later now il have to purge the shit out of my enemys

*update*
ok il post chapter 3-2 in some sec’s and il see if il post up some pictures of Mike in the gallery still working on my big ass army i am up in 2 baselisk’s 1 deathstriker 4 fast attack’s 6 tanks and 124 soldiers and Paulo is gone lead my vet squad but for now lets start of the next part of chapter 3 hope you few readers like it

As they turned to see where the shot came from to see that there were 6 giant soldiers clad in golden armor pointing there spears at Augustus but it wasn’t one of them that had shot at him in front of the group of soldiers was a man a bit bigger than the rest of them and in his hand was a flaming sword but instead of the blue flames Augustus used he had in a blood red and gold flames and in his other hand he had a claw bigger then his normal fist and on top of them was a smoking weapon that looked that it just had been used

(The lord): drop it or we will use force.

Abbey looked at the golden warriors that pointed there spears at Augustus then looked at Augustus and noticed that he was frozen in fear before he said

(Augustus): no it can’t be he said you wouldn’t find this planet ever.

(The lord): that was the last warning chaos scum, custodes purge this traitor.

When the soldiers started shooting at Augustus a stream of bullets came from there spears with such a noise that it could break glass but before the bullets could even hit their target Augustus had already vanished in flames and he was gone only the ash marks was left on the ground

(Abbey): no he can’t do this HE CAN’T DO THIS!

Abbey punched his fist to the ground crying, Tess tried to walk to Abbey to comfort him but stopped seeing the giant golden armored figure walk to him

(The lord): as long as you have faith I will guaranty that you will save her.

Abbey wiping some of his tears before talking to the man

(Abbey): thanks for the help saving us here but who are you guys?

(Emperor): I am the Emperor of the imperial empire and this is my royal guards but I think we can take the introduction later first we need to get your friend’s some medical help.

Abbey had forgot of the rest in the fighting looking at the others he saw that Mike was still unconscious and David was looking worse by the minuet so Abbey walked to Tess

(Abbey): how’s it going with them?

Tess looked worried

(Tess): Mike is fine but it doesn’t look like David is gone make it and without medical help he will not last for long.

Then a big hand grabbed Abbey in the shoulder relishing that it was the Emperor

(Emperor): how’s it going with your friends?

Abbey looking at the giant man and turned away

(Abbey): one of them is ok but the one missing limbs over there is not gone make it if we
don’t get a doctor here right now.
The Emperor waved to a soldier then started clicking on some buttons on his wrist, then another bright light came up and when it faded away a red robbed figure looking more robot the man and a white clad soldier a bit smaller then the royal guards, they looked at the Emperor saluting him then he pointed at the body of David and they walked to him

(Emperor): these are the best medical soldiers in this entire fleet if you friend will survive then these are his best hope, but for now I want you all to join me to my ship so we can discuss the happenings here.

comments are welcome

*update*
well now i have posted the model of Mike hope you all like it and il maby take requests of caracters in BCB but the story may be a bit late then normaly since il work on the story a bit less well bb and hope you all dont go chaos

At first they questioned why they should follow him

(Paulo): why should we trust this guy he may be the cause of all this that have happened.

(Abbey): as you can see we don’t have much choice Mike is still unconscious and David can die if he doesn’t get medical attention and they helped us and I say that we should not disobey him.

(Tess): I agree with Abbey on this one.

And every one agreed to follow him

(Emperor): then it’s settled go to the custodes soldiers then we will leave shortly but first we need to get your friends stable for the trip back.

The white armored soldier picked up David that was still out of this world while a
Custode soldier picked up Mike that was still unconscious then they all went to the one Custode that was that was typing on his data slat before he pressed the last button he looked at the Emperor and he gave him a hand gesture that he could activate it, then a bright flash surrounded them blinding the group then when it faded away they saw that they were in a golden room where soldiers and robbed people going all around when the soldiers in the room noticed them they all grabbed for their weapons pointing them and the group standing there then the Emperor raised his hand

(Emperor): they are friends and will be threaten as such.

The soldiers nodded a bit before they took their weapons away and went back to their posts

(Emperor): now let’s get you all to the medical bay to see if you got tainted by chaos power’s and see what we can do for your friends.

(Tess): excuse me sir but what is chaos powers?

The Emperor looked at her knowing she was worried

(Emperor): yes well your friend that attacked you was tainted by chaos powers and he fully accepted it in cost of his soul and when chaos powers get used close to peoples without protective gear then they may lead the same fate so we will check if you have any taint and if you do we will see what we can do, ah here we are this is the medical bay.

The medical bay looked like a normal hospital as any others only that the whole roomed was full of highly advance gear and some areas you could see some soldiers in tubs with some horrible wounds some even missed half his body or head but it looked like some robotic arms was building up the body from the ground off, one of the Custodes dropped David in one of the tubes and put on a mask on him then he closed the glass door and the tube started filling up with a green liquid as they looked as the robotic arms doing their work on David, then they heard a scream behind them as they looked over where the scream came from they noticed that Mike was on the floor from falling of the bed whit a robotic figure with a giant needle in its hand

(Emperor): looks like your friend got a bit of a shock when he saw the medic drone.

With a bit of a smirk on his face

(Medical drone): pleas sir hold still we need to inject this medicine to have you stable and that you don’t faint again.

(Mike): hell no get away from me you homicidal machine.

Then before he noticed what happened a Custode grabbed both his arms and the droid struck its needle in the side of Mike’s neck

(Medical droid): there you go stability at 100%.

Mike was still wiping about it before he noticed the crowed in the room having a hard time not to laugh

(Paulo): gee Mike didn’t know you where such a sissy for needles.

And starting laughing

(Mike): did you even see the needle it was damn big as my finger.

Pointing to the drone still holding the needle

(Emperor): yes we are a bit sorry about that but you and your friends are a bit smaller than the normal soldiers on this ship so we didn’t have any smaller then that one but it’s time to check if you all have any chaos taint in you and I think he should be here shortly.

(Abbey): who is com…?

But before Abbey had the chance to finish his sentence the doors went open and a black robed figure came in the room and bowed to the Emperor

(Emperor): ah here he is let me present to you inquisitor Mcchilus.

Then the robbed figure rose

(Mcchilus): yes I am here my lord now where are the ones you want me to check for chaos tainted.

The Emperor pointed at the group in the corner of the room next to the tube David was in

(Mcchilus): as you wha… WHAT THE HELL HOW DID YOU ALL GET HERE?
Everyone looked weird at the robed figure

(Tess): excuse me but do we know you?

It was silent for a while until Mcchilus took off his hood

(Mcchilus): oh we know each other’s for a god time by now.

The group was shocked to see who this Mcchilus was

(All): MCCAIN!!!!!

Any chance of BCB + Fantasy?

well in warhammer fantasy they are only on one planet but maby i can make so a chaos summining goes wrong and opens a portal but that will be maby a later project

But they’ve got so much LAND in Fantasy. Losta possibilities!
Make ‘em with teh lizards er something. Killin’ dem Skaven.
Stupid rats.

Okay…tottaly fitting that Mccain is an inquisitor. tottaly badass

oh just whait its get better in chapter 4 i promis

well sone il have to post the next chapter and Xaxus il have a look into the fantasy+BCB thing but not right now first il have to be done here but il bring up a forum page on diffrent way they can come in the warhammer fantasy world in maby late november but for now il have to work on my army and il maby post a little secret project i have been working on

Alright, danke. :3
Looking forward to it.

ok i know its been 4 days since i last updated and yes i have been a bit distracted by fallout new vegas and the tf2 halloween event but i am also working on the next chapter and working a little bit on the fantasy one (got 3 diffrent storys that il put up for vote) but i am gone post the first part of chapter 4 this week so hope you all are are exited as i am since now the real fun is starting

sorry about the delays got a lot to do but il see if i can post it somtime this week blame tf2 and the army i need to be done with befor saturday il maby post out how it ended and see if any of the BCB models died

Just a thought… This would be SO much better if you wan it through Word or some other spellchecker before you posted… It would clean up your grammar a treat Great story bro, loving the plot

everytime I read the first post I ask myself, HOW THE FUCK DID MY FANFIC INSPIRE YOU!?! great story btw.

@Sammy
ya i know i am a bit bad about grammer >_> but somtimes i just have so much to do i forget it

@Ark
well you toke 2 thing you like in life and made a story and that inspired me to make this so this is ty to you and some friends on steam

and good news i have a little time so il post the story in some sec’s so hope you all like it and dont go Chaos

Chapter 4. Truth be told

The small town of Roseville was now a battlefield most of the town was either burning or in ruins luckily most of the civilians was evacuated before the first strike and they had contain the Chaos corruption from spreading to different towns, the first sign of Chaos was when a black tower raised from the ground in the center of the town and first contact with the horrors within at first it didn’t look like such a big of treat from the tower but later they will regret that they didn’t strike first out of the tower came the most horrible creatures a person could ever imagine some looked like stingrays flying in to the air around the tower others were like blobs that had legs and arms but no face and some was a headless robed figures with teeth’s for hands spewing out flames that melted everything it touched, after the first strike both the US. Army and the Imperial Guard with some space marine support were able to hold off the Chaos force but they could never get any ground since every time they tried they got counter attacked by the enemy and for every enemy they killed a new one would take its place, in the tower there where only darkness only some small flame critters flying around was the only things lighting up the tower with some few windows in a room almost in the center of the tower was there a group of rooms holding a few prisoners that would sacrifice to the chaos god Tzeentch in the 3 room to the left was a few known characters that had just woken up

(Daisy): ugh what happened where am I?

She looked around the room even in total darkness she could still see and noticed someone in the corner lying on the floor then she noticed who it was

(Daisy): Lucy!

She runs to her side to see if she is ok

(Daisy): she is still breathing only a bit unconscious, Lucy wake up.

At first she didn’t react but later (after much shaking) she woke up

(Lucy): ugh where am I, daisy what the hell is happening?

(Daisy): I don’t know last thing I remember is that we were at the school when Augustus attacked us and after that we were standing in some fire and all is black after that.

Lucy looked around the room worried as if something was missing

(Lucy): where are the others where is Mike?????

Daisy knew how unstable Lucy was and wasn’t sure how to tell her without getting her into an emotional stress and in the looks of it this is something you don’t want to make worse than it is but she knew she had to know

(Daisy): I don’t know but I am sure they all are ok you saw what Abbey and Mike could somehow bring up a protective barrier (but how they did it I don’t know it shouldn’t even be possible without a powerful energy source and a way to use it as a shield)

She wasn’t sure if it help or not but Lucy just turned away and started crying in the corner

(Lucy): oh god what if they are all hurt or they could be tortured in this building right now or worse they could all be dead.

Lucy was a total wreak it looked like she couldn’t even move of the stress she was suffering Daisy knew how Lucy was feeling but she couldn’t have her in this stage of stress so she did what she had to do she punched her knocking her off the side

(Lucy): what the hell Daisy what is wrong with you?

Daisy was still having her fist straight out but she was crying

(Daisy): WHAT IS WRONG WITH ME WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU I know that you get in an emotional stress when you are scared for Mike but you are not the only one scared think how I fell over this we are trapped in a prison, we don’t know what has happened to our friends and one I know was the one that attacked us so think how I feel over this.

Lucy was pretty shocked to see this side of Daisy but knew she was right and wiped off her tears

(Daisy): now let’s try to find a way to get out of here or at least know what happened to the rest.

But suddenly a blue flame rose in the middle of the room and 2 figures came out of it one had the same robes as Augustus but his arm looked mutilated and if you saw close enough you could see that some skin was moving around the arm like it was gone morph into something and in his other hand he held a body by the neck and throw it to them and looked over to Lucy

(Robed figure): even though my master won’t let me kill you now doesn’t mean I can’t torture you snow cat

With a smile on his face he disappeared in the flames, shocked to see the robed figure they turned to look to the body of the one he had brought to them they could see that even with the scars she had they somehow know her from somewhere but then the body started to move and rise up and then they saw in shock who it was

(?): Maishul?

ok i have a smale mixed update for the warhammer fantasy fans how dark do you whant the story since i ended up with a story of revenge betrayle and loss (il maby bring up the story next week but its not the done one just wip)
and for those that ask about the models well il maby be sone done to Carsone and next will be Tess, Reah and wild dog and i just got to my army to see how many points i get if i am done with it and the point number is god damn over 15,000P and i sak myself HOW THE HELL DID I GET SO MUCH MONEY TO THIS but ya i am not sure when i am gone but up the next part (since i work more then normal now) but il atlest try to put up one more story this month but for now il get my army ready for the dark eldar battle and i got a tactic that will destroy the DE so dont go chaos and il see you all later

well it has gone 12 days since i last updated this page and i would have done it soner if it wasent for the new games but well mostly this is a bit bad news and few good news so the bad news since i payed a bit to much for the games so i dident go to the GW in Oslo to get new parts to the models but that dosent mean i havent worked on some sadly i cant post them since they are not BCB related so i dont think Thas would like me posting models that isent BCB but i am happy to say that il post them all later on my dakka dakka page and il be going to GW the 27.11 next week so il get the parts i need there for some and a special caracter il be making from a game i played in other news the story will be put on a hold until the game mania ends since i cant focus when i got so many games around me so i think il be back on the story maby late this month but later il put up a link to the dakka dakka page and maby the battle report for the army (if i get in to a battle next week) so stay in the light of the Emperor and il see you all later

Holy paragraph.

just a tiny pre-update befor i start on it il be making a dakka dakka page for battle reports and other models il be making and more will come tomorow of the update if i remember ro post it and this image is a test if i could get this image of the prearmy and i am happy that it works

i should had mention it earlier but i was a bit busy on the model front but here is the page and il maby get back to the story 2/3 games i have i am done with

http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/list/ 329538.page