Bittersweet Candy Bowl

why are you guys even talking about what i said of course im not serious
its not like it was a troll attempt or anything it was a really dumb joke post that meant nothing
no ones getting angry at me but you and im not going away anytime soon so woop

oh wait theres a page thing now what

Yeah, I keep thinking that my page isn’t loading right, but it’s just that it went to a new page.

I haven’t gotten used to it yet.

@ Ninja

I meant no offense. I was simply trying to help. I apologize.

No you don’t!

I don’t apologize?

I feel it is important to add more information to the actual story. I have decided I will work on it….I just don’t know when. Between High School, looking for a job, and other writing projects, free time can be a bit…scarce.

This story will have romantic moments. Sorry if that ruins it or hurts it for you, but it will. Also, I am a LucyXMichael shipper. Again, I apologize. I do not hate Sandy though, so I will do my best to treat her with respect.

Also, I will most likely open ever chapter with a funny dream sequence. This may cause mood whiplashes, as Michael could be dreaming about Sandy and Lucy singing Barbie Girl together, then soon fighting a horrible, mutated monster that was once Paulo or something.

Ninja, what about if you’re in a mannequin store, the owner goes out and you have a new move to practise with your Ninja-edition Katana? And if they’re all broken by the time the owner gets back a mountain of chocolate will appear?

Wow, the first decent fanfic I have read in a while It certainly got Love Me out of my head (for a while) Make more chapters!!

The next chapter will be given within the month (I hope). It will follow along the real story’s timeline, so right now its Halloween, just like in the comic. I want to wait until more information is given about what the group is doing for Halloween.

Here’s the basic plot. Its nothing too special right now, but I would love for advice on how to improve it. The Soulless want to learn more about Michael and LEGACY and so they send down an organic drone to fight him and gain information on the planet Earth, as well as the two. Michael celebrates Halloween with his friends, but the festivities are cut short when the drone attacks their neighborhood and endangers Lucy. Michael must now fight the drone, save Lucy, and win.

Also, I’ve reconsidered the name Vanguard. Does anyone else have a good sueprhero name?

I like vanguard, that sounds cool. What about silver streak, because mike is gray and the suit is metallic.

Sentinel? Cus Mike is very noble, and he would guard… I dunno what I’m talking about really : P

Legacy?
I don’t know, I just imagine him panicking when Lucy asks and yelling that out as a name, and it made me giggle. Although I’ve been awake for 12 hours so the humor may be a little less then I imagine…

I thought about that, but I decided against it. For now, the Silver Streak seems like a decent name.

Worst comes to worst, you could have people ridiculing the name as silly in the story itself. It tends to take the sting out of it.

Yea, but it seams a little less valiant in my opinion. It’s just the word “streak” that gets to me. It seems less heroic and powerful, but I agree it fits the discription very well. Plus, I really liked Vangaurd, so mabye that’s just me. It just seemed like something a 15 year old would come up with trying to sound really cool, but at the same time it didn’t sound silly. I don’t know, I trust which ever name you choose will better fit the story you want to make.

Silver Sentinel?

YES. Just the right mix of teenage cool, actual cool, and that Golden Age Marvel/DC style of name.

Vanguard is a good hero name, but when the Soulless trick the Earth people to not trust Mike and LEGACY, it doesn’t make sense for people to still call him Vanguard, which means prtector.

I like Silver Sentinel.

Ok, I understand the logic behind it now. I can see why you would want to change it.

For Silver Sentinel, I could just get rid of the Silver for when people don’t trust him, or just change it to the Silver Scoundrel or something.

Hmmm…Silver Sentinel’s evil opposite could be….The Grey Gangster! (Laughs)

Opposite of guard…

How about the Metallic Marauder?

Also, does anyone know what I should call the Michael’s race? I mean…I obviously can’t pick humans! I was thinking about calling them all Earthlings, but simply calling the race Earthling all the time just seems…odd.

Like if humans were always called Earthlings, and we never used the word humans. Imagine that!

I was considering furrykind (humankind), furries (humans), furry (human), and furranity (humanity) as a good substitute.

@ Ninja

Also good.

You can’t be serious.

About calling them furrykind? Well until I get a better idea, that’s all I got. What else is there? Just call them dogs and cats?

Actually….

Well, I would suggest Feline and Canine, but it is a tad unimaginative. I would tend to stay away from anything “furry” related because Taeshi never intended (as far as I know) for this to be a furry comic, just a drama comic with cats.

You could just use humankind etc. with the explanation that if cats and dogs became sentient instead of apes, they might use the same name, assuming that the histories are approximately parallel.

Eh, I can’t really think of any other remotely useful options right now. I’ll post more if I think of it.

I don’t know. I can see how saying “feline and canine kind” or “felineity and also canineity” would be weird. Earthlings is probably your best bet. Or a slang term, something the Soulless are mocking them with.

Actually, *Ninja is probably right. Humanity would be best. I didn’t consider the alternate timeline theory.

Outside the box.

It’s where it’s at.

I’ll go with humanity, thank you both.

*bows*

*bows far less gracefully*

*Trips gameking218*

*hits face on floor*
I’m not gonna cry… not gonna cry… not… gonna…

*Surreptitiously gives gk218 a band-aid so no one will ridicule the poor child, then disappears.*

*Marvels at the amazing skill of vanishing, and puts on the band-aid, smiling to himself with the joy of this, a rare moment of kindness in an otherwise harsh world*

Humans can be idiots and brutes, but they always have the capability to do good, kind deeds.

Same Silver time, same Silver channel! Goodnight everybody!

*Walks to front of stage, bows*
Oh wait shi-
*Falls on face*

Here’s the next chapter. I apologize its not what I promised. This doesn’t take place on Halloween, but a week or two before it. It instead deals with Michael stopping his first crime and the Soulless Ones preparing to go to Earth. The hero is named and the public wonders if he really is the hero he seems to be.

Trust me when I say that the criminals he stops are not to be forgotten. Also, fun fact, Old Ones = Wise Ones. Old Ones is simply what the Soulless call them, as an insult.

Here you go.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6371509/2/Legacy

The Silver Sentinel Strikes!

I love alliteration.

Also, I made this. http://www.bittersweetcandybowl.com/candybooru/ post/view/1813?search=Edit

That intro… just… couldn’t get over that the entire time I was reading.

Also, for an intelligent thing, LEGACY really knows how to keep Mike’s spirits up.

LEGACY is….kind of a jerk. He’s just very blunt and points out the things people tend to forget. Like when someone is happy, you can bet he’ll be there to point out the problems they have to deal with.

And yeah. I’m wondering about whether or not I should keep the dream sequences. As the chapters get steadily darker, they may seem out of place.

Thanks for using part of my name. Funny thing about what Gameking said,
“It just seemed like something a 15 year old would come up with trying to sound really cool, but at the same time it didn’t sound silly.” Thats what I was doing, being 15 and trying to come up with a name that sounded really cool. apperently I suceded, at least partially

Whaaaaaaaa? You really didn’t need to put that at the end, but thank you. This is a very good chapter, and I burst out laughing when LEGACY gave the textbook definition of caution. Glad you’re continuing to do this. Also, I noticed some random little errors and wrote them down. You want me to post them here?

Yes, that’d be great. I always do try to improve my writing and correct my mistakes.

“W-what!” gasped the grey cat as he saw a familiar figure jump to hug Sandy.
Capitalization.
At least you still have me, Mike,” Carson smiled, hugging him and rubbing his cheek against Michael’s.
Do you need that comma at the end or not? Not entirely sure you do.
You fear I will abuse it. If it will calm you do, I will have you create a password that will lock and unlock my automatic, non-combat motor controls.
“do” instead of “down”.
The school day eventually ended and Michael walked to the exit. As he walked, he noticed that Lucy wasn’t there to walk with him. No surprised there, really.
“surprised” instead of “surprise”.
Michael sighed as he tried to headache and kept the wrecks in the air as best he could.
I… what?
He walked down the sidewalk, backpack already dropped off at his home, as he explained the holiday, three police cars drove by, sirens blaring.
You may want to edit this. It’s a little confusing to read. Maybe after “dropped off at his home” you could make it a new sentence.
“Wait. Before you activate it, can you make it not come out of my mouth? It-”
Caused you to experienced pain? Acknowledged.
“experienced” instead of “experience”.
“Someone put their fire out!” he ordered.
“their” instead of “that”, although it Is technically correct.
Aaaaand that’s all! Nothing bad, really.

Got them. Thanks!

Cool.

http://www.bittersweetcandybowl.com/candybooru/ post/view/1930

This is art made by a friend of mine. Any constructive criticism would be loved.