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Hey guys. I know you're all big fans of BCB, and people have already started making movies and possible theme songs, so I felt somewhat inspired to try to make my own melody for our favorite online webcomic.

Trust me, this is pretty simple. Nothing big, no special effects...Just me, a piano, and a recording system (And an old one to boot).

This is also rather GENERIC. I will warn you about that too, because I'm preeetty sure it sounds like something we've all heard.

Anyways, Rate/vote. Comment. Hate. Hug. Love you all. Enjoy! (Or not...)

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Edit: Yeah, as I mentioned, this is leaning on the generic side. If you could kindly find out some sources as to what it's related to (Since I have no idea...), that would be a great help. Thanks.

Double Edit!: Here's a revised, hopefully more 'intact' version of the song. It's a little faster, and I actually bothered to use a silent metronome...AND YET I still rush in a few spots.

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TRIPLE EDIT!: SUGGESTIONS!
-Is this mellow too mellow? Or do we need an UPBEAT?
-This is your song too, this is for the BCB community! If you can record your own unique additions to my song, please do.
-Or, if not, I can gather a few groups of my buddies to get their own instruments to create an actual 'Complete' rendition. Wootness!

Edit4: If you plan to add, which is more than simply just a consideration of what I should change, make sure to title it as a rendition, not the actual thing.
-What I know officially is:
•SushiJaguar is working on adding a bass rendition.
[[If you are planning on making a rendition, tell me, I will post it here...Just so no one gets confused.]]

-For renditioners (If that's even a word):
-Keep it in 4/4 or 2/4... A fast Quarter*Quarter*Half Note measure (For 4/4)or a slow 8th*8th*Quarter measure (For 2/4).
-Put in your work, pull everything out of yourself and add it into the song. A great idea can easily be overshadowed by the way it is delivered.
-Red Edit4, the part in complete caps.

This post has been edited by KekkonShiyou: 27 June 2011 - 12:53 AM

In my opinion it could fit with the ending theme, but the opening theme should be more upbeat. Nice song bro

That's a really nice song.

Oh god. That actually sounds like it could work.

It is nice, but you could do some work on your rhythm - it sounds like you are starting off in 3/4 time, but then you switch to 4/4, and generally you jump about a bit. But otherwise, very nice. ^_^

Really nice tune!! I find it quite peaceful and soothing
The rythm is a little off but practise makes perfect! I do also think it sounds like an ED tune too lol
There is something about it that I'm not too sure about, the chords on it sound a bit minor and maybe try going up one scale to see if it's better? I'm not sure
I try writing lyrics but I never know if they'd make sense or sounds good but I do sometimes give it a try
Overall, great job!!

I might take a shot at writing some lyrics, but I probably won't get around to it because I probably won't decide precisely what sort of vocal rhythm I think it should have or what sort of stuff it should say. It's so much easier to just steal other people's decisions.

Actually, scratch that. Apparently I can't do it, at least not currently. I can't figure out how to make the words sound right on my own. All the words I may write in my life cannot help me with my complete lack of musical talent; I ought to learn an instrument.

This post has been edited by Borg Lord: 24 June 2011 - 08:26 PM

What I think best happens with the lyrics is for it to come later as it's better to get the music done first. Then it's easier to do the lyrics as you'd only have to worry about the lyrics fitting in with the music. (Rhythm-wise)
But it's your choice!

This post has been edited by BonBonToro: 23 June 2011 - 09:01 PM

No, I mean lyrics for this song (it's not like I could write my own music anyway; it's wonder I have the musical talent to sing terribly). I'm just saying I'll intend to do it, but put it off by avoiding making inconsequential decisions (but decisions that have to be made nevertheless; there's always more than one way to fit words to music, even those ways often aren't very different).

Taeshi said that the lyrics to this song really capture the essence of BCB. Perhaps you might find this as a useful reference to base your own written lyrics off of.

I like the mellow and somewhat solemn tones that your theme gives off.

This post has been edited by Purin: 23 June 2011 - 10:02 PM

>Album / Collection: School Days VOCAL ALBUM
>School Days

Well I suppose that hasn't got much to do with the contents of the song I guess

Updated, woot. Need moar criticism, people! >_<

That's just bloody excellent. Sounds even better with the additional notes you put into it. It's looking good at the moment, I'd love this see this more extended.

You also wouldn't happen to mind if I try to make an 8/16-bit rendition would you?

This post has been edited by LackLuster: 24 June 2011 - 07:41 PM

I thought it was done pretty well over all, although I do have some minor problems with it (no pun intended).

For me, I feel there needs to be a little bit of variation. It seems rather simple throughout, and while it is true that simple can be good, simple for the sake of being simple is not. I think maybe adding some triplets on occasion, messing with dynamics, or maybe expanding your range might remedy this.

I also noticed that the rhythm was rather repetitive. It got old after a few bars.

Generally speaking, I'd love to hear this progress. I have to ask though, if possible, is there any way for you too upload the sheet music?

This post has been edited by Meowth: 24 June 2011 - 07:48 PM

Meowth, on 24 June 2011 - 07:44 PM, said:

I can make some... I'm not a professional piano player (Obviously, not even grade 3 -_-), but I have a software program, and I could maybe send you a file.

It would be appreciated if it isn't too much trouble, but if it is, I don't want to impose.

it's a good start i think the harmonies and accompaniment part could be developed more. but then again you don't have lyrics. I personally would like to help write the lyrics but i have an animation project.

i have done alot to your song. i'm gonna post it tomorrow.

Yes, the rhythm and pacing is much better now. It is still no Mozart, but it serves its purpose sufficiently for the time being.

Needs bass. I've got it covered.

To make this easier, I don't suppose you have a version without the lead piano? As in, only the one-two three, one-two three etc part.

This post has been edited by SushiJaguar: 26 June 2011 - 02:48 AM

SushiJaguar, on 26 June 2011 - 02:46 AM, said:

1. This is just a simple basis for what I would soon become its own finished product; I'm working on it (And sheet music for Meowth, which is taking a while ), and the reason why I posted it up on BCB was because I knew that it needed work, and that the community could help if they wanted to...This is for them, really
2. Thanks for working on the bass part, if you are . Would be appreciated.

I don't have much else to do at ten to five in the morning. Don't expect anything from me in record time, I've got blisters on two fingers an a inch-deep cut in another. I reckon my bass was made for masochists.

alright. i rewrote your song to 4/4 time because 3/4 is a pain and it sounds like a waltz. i apologize for the accompaniment piano part, it's terrible, but i think you could get an idea of what the song may sound like when it's finished. or at least how i would do it. Kekon's song.

This post has been edited by Meleeman: 26 June 2011 - 04:20 AM

Meleeman = Kekon?

Edit: LEAVE IT THE FUCK ALONE JESUS CHRIST WHAT DID YOU DO

YOU DESTROYED IT

GET THE FUCK OUT YOU HORRIBLE PLAGUE ON HARMONICS

This post has been edited by SushiJaguar: 26 June 2011 - 04:54 AM

SushiJaguar, on 26 June 2011 - 04:52 AM, said:

By the Nine!



What manner of sorcery is this?!

This post has been edited by Meowth: 26 June 2011 - 04:54 AM

I had that set. Fucking trapped tombs. Also if Meleeman is indeed Kekon then hahahah oh my god you freaking coward.

On a related note: that was not very good.
Go back to 3/4. It's not that complicated. You want some complicated shit try 10/8

This post has been edited by Meowth: 26 June 2011 - 04:58 AM

Delete, delete, delete. Wow, that was a good panic attack
Woot for confusion + questionable identity + Similar names.

This post has been edited by KekkonShiyou: 27 June 2011 - 12:52 AM

Kekon.

Not Kekkon. Chill the fuck out, kid.

i'm sorry. i guess i messed with it a little too much. btw i am my own person thank you very much. i just thought i could make it better. i guess not. i dunno i have a problem with 3/4 it just doesn't register with my mind. i prefer 4/4. i could rewrite it later.also as proof that i am my own person i wouldn't have fucked up the piano part so bad.

Meleeman, on 26 June 2011 - 07:20 PM, said:

one question was it just the piano part that you guys are complaining about or the other instruments i used? i know you guys don't like the 4/4 time i've made out that much out of your criticism.

KekkonShiyou, on 26 June 2011 - 11:41 AM, said:

i'm sorry alright. i didn't think that would happen. i've never had such a terrible reaction before. lol

This post has been edited by Meleeman: 26 June 2011 - 07:24 PM

Everything about it was horrendous.

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You mean a metronome part that goes "tick tock tock tick tock tock"? ^_^

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Ah, no. 10/8 is nothing; although it may be difficult depending on how you spread out the beats (3-1-4-2 would be harsh, for instance) the time signature in itself is barely a problem.

Now, 17/16 or 23/16, or even 5,75/4 (all of which I have seen), on the other hand...

No, not a metronome. I don't need one of those. What I need is the piano playing the basic rhythm of the song - the rhythm piano chords.

SushiJaguar, on 26 June 2011 - 10:49 PM, said:

its A, G, F#, A flat

SushiJaguar, on 26 June 2011 - 10:49 PM, said:

its A, G, F#, A flat

No, you misunderstand. Again.

What I mean is, O thick-as-a-plank, is that I need only the rhythm piano playing. Just that track, that is all.

Just got back from a trip ;-;
-Will start working on the song again.

If you want, I play guitar, I could add something maybe. Or maybe mandolin, I play that too.

I'm glad someone else shares passion for piano! I love it as it is actually and wouldn't mind making lyrics ^^. If possible, could you make sheet music of this because I'd be honored to play it in my piano. And who knows? I play violin too.

Mandolin? Ooh, the mandolin~

... Oh, dear. Now I want to hear a banjo voice, too. How rotten.

Since when can I write songs?... oh, name error.

Shiyou (From now on I'll call you that to avoid confusion, if its okay with you) I liked the first version the best, is seems too mellow, but the revised version feels too upbeat. maybe SLIGHTLY slowing it down will make it work better.

And no, I don't speak musician.

This post has been edited by kekon: 13 July 2011 - 03:09 AM

I liked it

Bittersweet Candy Bowl Theme 8-Bit (WIP)

Well this pretty much took me the entire bloody day. I wouldn't imagine this to have the exact timing to KekkonShiyou's version nor using the same notes. Critique would be handy though.

I liked it, but it sounds a little... I dunno what to say... 'blank?' (a better thing to say would be that the notes seem dead) at the beginning. It's definitley good! Great work in one day!