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Sparkfur's Art and Writing Thread (Taking Requests!)

Poll: Sparkfur's Art and Writing Thread (Taking Requests!) (27 member(s) have cast votes)

What should I do more of?

  1. Graphical Art (e.g. Wallpapers, avatars) (11 votes [21.57%])

    Percentage of vote: 21.57%

  2. Writing (13 votes [25.49%])

    Percentage of vote: 25.49%

  3. Traditional Art (9 votes [17.65%])

    Percentage of vote: 17.65%

  4. Digitally Drawn Art (10 votes [19.61%])

    Percentage of vote: 19.61%

  5. Comics (8 votes [15.69%])

    Percentage of vote: 15.69%

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Like I told you on your profile, since it's for NaNoWriMo, I'm not paying as much attention to spelling and grammar errors as I normally would - that is to say, I'm apying them absolutely no attention if I don't spot them while writing.

Since you've found no actual plot-related issues, that's a very positive review ^_^

I posted Chapter one, if you'd like to check that out :)

This post has been edited by Sparkfur: 03 November 2011 - 04:11 AM

  • #151
  • 03 November 2011 - 04:10 AM
Don't worry, NSSG, I haven't forgotten about you. I've just been busy.
Gabu, I'll accept it, though don't expect it for a while.

Also, I'm really surprised I actually have to say this - I kind of think it's a compliment of sorts that I do - guys, you're free to use art I've made (specifically, avatars) as long as you ask me first.

Vaporotem, I'm looking at you.

This post has been edited by Sparkfur: 06 November 2011 - 09:13 PM

  • #152
  • 06 November 2011 - 01:07 AM
New Avatar: Made from scratch.

Posted Image

Not sure if I'm actually gonna use it much, though. Prolly gonna switch back to either my Lucy v. Augustus one or my Paulo one.
  • #153
  • 06 November 2011 - 07:00 PM
Posted Chapter two of The Cult of the Wizard.

The Cult of the Wizard Chapter 2, a fantasy fiction | FictionPress
  • #154
  • 07 November 2011 - 03:37 AM
That was actually pretty good ^-^
  • #155
  • 08 November 2011 - 02:43 AM
Thank you! :D

Now for something completely different remarkably similar!

Posted Image

I used the path tool for lineart this time.

I can't decide how much better it looks, if at all.
  • #156
  • 08 November 2011 - 03:51 AM
It doesnt look that bad!
  • #157
  • 08 November 2011 - 03:54 AM
Haha, thank you!

Chapter Three is up for the Cult of the Wizard, by the way.

The Cult of the Wizard Chapter 3, a fantasy fiction | FictionPress
  • #158
  • 08 November 2011 - 05:10 AM
Aaaand now Chapters 4 and 5 are up!

The Cult of the Wizard Chapter 4, a fantasy fiction | FictionPress
  • #159
  • 11 November 2011 - 12:32 AM
So's chapter 6.

R&R about plot-related issues are welcome.

CHAPTER 6
  • #160
  • 13 November 2011 - 04:00 AM
A short story for you all, a slight AbbeyxTess fluff, heavily overshadowed by the DWAAAAAAMA.

Mantra, a bittersweet candy bowl fanfic | FanFiction

And yes, even though there's no real AbbeyxTess, I'm counting this as your request NSSG :P
  • #161
  • 15 November 2011 - 03:53 AM
Ehhh...It wasnt really bad per say, but it feels sorta...rough I guess?....

This post has been edited by TheMysteriousMan: 15 November 2011 - 02:28 PM

  • #162
  • 15 November 2011 - 02:28 PM
That was rushed and, if I were to recieve that as a commissioned piece of work, I would be dissapointed. The pacing is absolutely atrocious; why does it skip so suddenly from the one scene to the other? Where's the tension? In the situation given to me as the reader, I don't give a shit about Daisy dying, because there's no build-up, no tension, no interest shown in your writing style. Maybe if it wasn't so rushed forward, the scene with Alejandro throwing a firebomb may have been interesting and perhaps tragic, but it comes out of nowhere with no context; it feels like you've just grabbed the first idea that came into your head, and dashed it onto the page as an excuse. Try and think through what you're writing, and think about it in your head before you commit it to page; does it fit? Will this work as a concept? Does it flow right? Maybe even just sketch a rough draft of what you're going to write, so as to give yourself an idea of what needs to happen to make it work as a concept. A timeline, too, would help in this sense; I know it's only a short story- perhaps a little too short for this idea to come to light properly- but even so, it will give you an idea of the right pacing to use.
That said, however, you're obviously proficient with writing; although the concept is deeply flawed and the pacing is rather off, the grounding is sound and, if you hadn't rushed this quite so much, it would have worked, and worked well.

This post has been edited by Sammy: 15 November 2011 - 06:13 PM

  • #163
  • 15 November 2011 - 06:10 PM
  • Borg Lord
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I agree, it does seem rather rushed. I would also like to point out that "his fists clenched in to fists" sound weird (it should probably be "his hands clenched in to fists") and you mention Augustus watching the wedding when I'm pretty sure you mean funeral.
  • #164
  • 15 November 2011 - 09:14 PM
I think Sammy and Borg just summed up what I was about to say, it does seem very rushed and it leaves me wanting more. I wanted it to be longer and I wanted to get some emotion in the piece, you've rushed it so bad that there basically is no set up.

Also, "he died the same way as Kurt Cobain" why the comparison? It's extremely vague, why not flesh it out more? He died from a shotgun wound to the head, but where in the head? The chin, the mouth or the side? Was there a suicide note? Where was he found? What about a suicide note?

I do love your writing, but this was just really rushed and I wanted more emotion out of it, a bigger set up.

This post has been edited by Shada: 15 November 2011 - 09:32 PM

  • #165
  • 15 November 2011 - 09:31 PM
Eek, more revision neccesary than I thought! e_e

Thanks for the crit guys, it really helps - I'll go back and re-write the piece.

On a different note, todays page made me really sad ;_;

So it's my avatar now.

Posted Image
  • #166
  • 23 November 2011 - 05:23 AM
Damn, your avatars and fine.

And I would love to see the revised piece! :smirk:
  • #167
  • 23 November 2011 - 05:30 AM
I think that's
My favourite yet!
  • #168
  • 23 November 2011 - 06:34 AM
Thanks ^_^

I'm slowly revising the piece from scratch, so it'll take a while.

I'm going to be streaming making a new BCB wallpaper in about 5 minutes though, if anyone's interested.

Spark's Gimp Work - live streaming video powered by Livestream
  • #169
  • 25 November 2011 - 07:44 PM
good stream.
  • #170
  • 25 November 2011 - 09:18 PM
Thanks :)

Here's the finished result:

Posted Image

You can download the background-sized version here

This post has been edited by Sparkfur: 25 November 2011 - 09:21 PM

  • #171
  • 25 November 2011 - 09:21 PM
I love your streams man. EXCEPT THE THING AT THE END YOU PRICK.
  • #172
  • 25 November 2011 - 09:21 PM
great stream indeed
  • #173
  • 25 November 2011 - 09:21 PM
It seems the things became more amazing when I left :C

Also, the final result is pretty good :D
  • #174
  • 25 November 2011 - 09:23 PM
Haha thanks :D

So, I failed NanoWriMo - due to other more pressing things (I became addicted to Skyward Sword... >_> ) I only reached 20 000 words. Oh well. I'll still continue to work on the book, and possibly even edit! :O

Also, come December (lolirony) I'll be...

  • Re-writing the AbbeyxTess story
  • Editing TCoTW
  • Working on The Drakon War (My primary book)
  • Finishing a story I'm working on - a BCB/Doctor Who crossover that takes place between pages 4 and 5 of December.
  • Working more on BCB:OOT. The latest pages sucked.


So yeah - some stuff to look forward to in the coming month.

Midterms looming doesn't help >_>

I'll edit this post with a banner I'm working on when I've finished it - it's a Zelda banner :D

This post has been edited by Sparkfur: 30 November 2011 - 04:36 PM

  • #175
  • 30 November 2011 - 04:35 PM

View PostSparkfur, on 25 November 2011 - 09:21 PM, said:

Thanks :)

Here's the finished result:

-imagesnip-

You can download the background-sized version here
You know, I was on Candybooru just the other day and I saw this. I looked at it and thought, "Wow! This is beautifully done, and it really fits the feel of the chapter! I wonder who made this? Wish I could do something like this."
And, like a moron, I forgot to check the author. But I decided to give your thread a look today, and wow! Never expected that. Thanks for making my day. :D

This post has been edited by Boringamus: 01 December 2011 - 12:06 AM

  • #176
  • 01 December 2011 - 12:06 AM
Thank you, Boring :D It's good to be appreciated #^_^#

Here's that banner that I promised, by the way. didn't turn out nearly as well as I'd hoped :(

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  • #177
  • 01 December 2011 - 04:15 AM
You make cool stuff.
  • #178
  • 01 December 2011 - 04:49 AM
Why thank you.
  • #179
  • 01 December 2011 - 04:51 AM
  • Chris
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personally, I like your traditional stuff. but the graphical and gimp is nice as well!
  • #180
  • 01 December 2011 - 08:11 AM
Waitwaitwaitwait... do you have sketchbook arts that you can post? :D

This post has been edited by BasketCase: 01 December 2011 - 07:55 PM

  • #181
  • 01 December 2011 - 07:54 PM
No, I don't - I had no paper on hand at the time, so I filled up the last page of my sketch booklet with notes for my Hebrew exam :( So I currently don't own a notebook...

:-(

Thanks, Chris :P My Graphical/Gimp stuff has been really sub-par lately, though, so I should really work on getting up to my former level :/

6. DRAW MOAR FANART!!!11!!1!1!!ONE!!!ELEVEN!!1

You're welcome, Casey.

I have nothing else to do, so I'll do some sketches on the lined paper I have available. I've actually had the second page of BCB:21 Guns done for a while, just been too lazy to upload it.

Should really get on that.
  • #182
  • 01 December 2011 - 09:59 PM
I feel vaguely guilty about my lack of update.

Here's a poem.

Hale of Bullets
Spoiler

This post has been edited by Sparkfur: 05 December 2011 - 07:09 PM

  • #183
  • 05 December 2011 - 07:09 PM
  • Borg Lord
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Do you really mean "hale"? Because "hale" is not even a noun, and if you're trying to do something clever with meanings it is entirely escaping me.
  • #184
  • 05 December 2011 - 08:14 PM
Hail
  • #185
  • 05 December 2011 - 08:22 PM
http://en.wikipedia....ki/The_Crucible
There's a character called John Hale, for those who haven't read it, who essentially confirms the witch hunt.

It doesn't really work though because they were hanged, not shot... but oh well.
  • #186
  • 05 December 2011 - 09:41 PM
Casey wanted more fanart.
I was bored at school.
I doodled.

Please excuse the lined paper.

Posted Image

I drew another thing, but my sister sat on it :nope: I'll see if it can be recovered.
  • #187
  • 06 December 2011 - 12:14 AM
Fan art drawn. art approved XD
  • #188
  • 06 December 2011 - 12:22 AM
And let's be honest, this is totally gonna be the conclusion of BCB - Abbey goes back in time and becomes a Nazi, and Daisy goes back and joins the US Army in order to stop him.

:nope:

This post has been edited by Sparkfur: 06 December 2011 - 12:33 AM

  • #189
  • 06 December 2011 - 12:27 AM
Stream

Starting in about 5 minutes.

Colouring the above lineart - will have music, likely orchestrated Zelda.

Click Here
  • #190
  • 06 December 2011 - 01:42 AM
Picture finished. Took slightly less than 2 hours.

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I'm really quite proud of this :)
  • #191
  • 06 December 2011 - 03:23 AM
Abbey's head looks a little funny, and his armband could be a tad better...

BUT IT'S A PRETTY DAMN GOOD DRAWING. HOLY SHIT.
  • #192
  • 06 December 2011 - 03:39 AM
HEY.

WHAT.

WAY TO DITCH AND THEN COME BACK JACK.

Thank you #^_^#
  • #193
  • 06 December 2011 - 03:40 AM
SORRY, MY LATINO ASS INTERNET CONNECTION SUCKS.

And is jumpy and stuff ._.


...

...

:-*
  • #194
  • 06 December 2011 - 03:43 AM
Interesting faces? I guess that's a style. You seem to keep constant with the colouring, so nothing there...Oh wait. The shading. It looks like the light source is in the middle of both of them (I know that in a stand off like this, there is normally no real light source, but a problem needs to be fixed). You see the 'dark' eyes? That suggests either a tilt in the head (chin down) or a light source from the top. In either case, that means that there should be more shading going down the side of the face towards the lower part of the chin.

The rest seems fine. Since your style does not include muscle structure and stuff like that, maybe you could make up for it with a bit of a shift of perspective that allows for more bent joints? Example: the elbows. You could make them a bit more exaggerated through a different way of holding the gun.

Muscles revealing joints:
Spoiler


Gun handling:
Spoiler

  • #195
  • 06 December 2011 - 03:54 AM
Thanks for the crit about the shading and such, Swimmer :) The light source is indeed coming from between them - it's implied that their tension is the light source.

I actually wasn't intending this to go beyond a quick doodle, so that's one of the reasons why the muscles (or lack thereof) looks so weird.

Also, I tried putting the shadows down, but it looked weird ._.

Here's the other thing I doodled at the same time. I refuse to colour this. I think this fills my quote of fanart for now - time to get back to writing :D

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  • #196
  • 06 December 2011 - 04:20 AM

View PostSparkfur, on 06 December 2011 - 01:42 AM, said:

Stream

Starting in about 5 minutes.

Colouring the above lineart - will have music, likely orchestrated Zelda.

Click Here
Goddamn history class, making me ditch my internet to do homework all night...
I wish I could've seen the stream. :/

I like the results! Very interesting, and nice to look at. :)
Overall it's wonderful, though something seems a bit off about daisy's right leg... :unsure:
  • #197
  • 07 December 2011 - 01:01 AM
Maybe it's the fact that it isn't hidden by her other leg, like Abbey's is?

Thanks a lot ^_^
  • #198
  • 07 December 2011 - 07:00 PM
HOLY SHIT LOOK
It's not art or writing.

I've been trying my hand at music-writing in Noteflight, and while I'm not very good at it thus far (I also found out that synthesized saxophone sounds annoying as hell) I wrote this.

Yes, it's a working title, and a work in progress still..

http://www.notefligh...bd2ae45e7387c6c
  • #199
  • 08 December 2011 - 04:48 AM
I just made this for the 7 Deadly Sins contest on dA.

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  • #200
  • 11 December 2011 - 07:57 PM
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