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a little comic i spawned, i didn't draw anything in a long time and after reading a certain comic made by someone here, i thought it was time to get back to work.
ThatGuy's comic inspired me to finish a comic that was 3 small panels, and now is a little comic page which makes not much sense, but i personally don't make alot of sense either.

i hope its readable.

and if you haven't already please check out ThatGuy's comic called Star Captian Rick.
Death is mah homie.

Woah woah, publicity. Thanks
Anyways onto your comic. Your art style isn't bad and you're better than I am at drawing backgrounds. Good thing you numbered the panels, it would be a little tricky reading it right the first time. I'd love to know how it is this guy is somehow all Billy & Mandy with Death because it seems interesting. I think that maybe you should try and work on this a little more so we understand what's going on. Panel 9 by the way, I'm not so sure what purpose it serves since it shows him with his fist raised but not exactly for what reason. In summary, I like the potential this kind of story could have, revise it a little and it'd be a great read.

I found the random Spasc to be pretty funny.

The biggest issue with your comic is paneling. Generally, you want all of your panels aligned so it can be easier to read from left to right. Your panels from 1 through 5 is okay, but all of the sudden I have to read 6 through 9 from top to bottom. 10 through 12 is fine though and I had no issues reading that part.

the raised fist was part of the little 'victory' he had when he acquired pictures of boobies, these pics were made during the little accident in the bathroom. Death stays at the house of Elinn, a friend of the guy you see here ( still need a proper name for him). both this guy and elinn are Asperions, humans with the ability to see ghosts, phantoms, wraiths and ghasts ( which explains the title 'me ghasta').
Ghasts are spirits which are invisible to the naked eye, but the retain a physical form, so it's possible for someone to bump into an invisible 'wall'. these 'walls' are actually ghasts. when Death and Elinn met, it was becuase of an accident. A kid who was walking over the street was supposed to be run over by a car, so Death was watching along the street, ready to take his life. But because of Death being a ghast, he was hit by the car himself. Elinn ( who was there at the moment ) happened to see Death being run over, and helped him up, mostly because he looked interesting.

As you may already guessed, Death was kicked out of Elinn's house because of the little accident in the bathroom, he tends to piss Elinn off quite frequently. so when he is kicked out he goes to this guy's house to crash on the couch. kinda.


hope it clears some things up, if anyone has any questions, feel free to ask me anything.

i'll be working on the next page, hopefully i will be able to make the order of panels a little better.

Sice my computer died a while ago, and due alot of school shizz i gotta do, this wont continue like this first page,
HOWEVER, my birthday is in 2 weeks and im anticipating a pen tablet, so if i indeed get a pen tablet i will try to make this comic with that.
but due my scanning program not cooperating with my new computer, i will probably not draw and scan it anymore like this.
my new scanning program watermarks EVERY last this on my drawings.

REVIVAL!
i finally got a tablet, and its up and running, hopefully i will be able to complete character bio tomorrow, and i have some ideas boiling up.

PREPARE THY SELVES!

first try drawing Death on tablet, main character is also done:


hope it works.