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Noted Please read this with the eyes of mature young adults like we are today.
Please note that the following is age 18+ appropriate any of this I made when I was 14-15 and had nothing to do with it now. If I did then I would try to be more tasteful please understand during those ages and having hormones I was very unstable. So please don’t pm me of bullshit and crap saying that Soul you’re a fucking pervert artist and shit like that. Those comments will be flamethrower theoretically. This fan-fic is another fan fic from a site called power rings look up through the looking Glass Power rings and you should find it.
Let it begin

Ring! Sonic answers his cell phone in quick response. While inside of a forest; "Hello?" answered Sonic. "Sonic I created a Dimension separator like I said!" said Tails in excitement.
"Really that's awesome Tails! Don't move I'll be right there!" said Sonic quickly speeding off for Tails House. He finally reaches there in a one minute radius, “Okay I'm here Tails. What happened?" said sonic Coming from the front door of Tail's house. Tail's house filled with mess, tools, and paper balls of old plans. He's been pretty busy Sonic thought. "Over here Sonic!" yelled Tails. Tails was dirty with machine oil and burned fur as usual. "Oh Hey Tails whatcha doing with that cover up?" asked Sonic. Pointing towards the cover up that Tails has. “I glad you ask Sonic it’s what the humans used to watch movies a projector. I managed to use a blank film reel and chip off one of the Chaos Emeralds and used the chippings to put on the film reel. Creating Chaos Control!” explained Tails. “Wow. So can I go to Blaze’s dimension now?” asked Sonic while trying not to be rude. Tails shrugging like Sonic “I don’t see why not besides it’s the only dimension we can go to at the moment. Alright! Let me started up.” said Tails. 5 minutes later… The Film projector started to show a light to the wall like a regular Projector then as if God command it. The wall started too disintegrated to a full-fledged portal! “Alright Tails see ya!” said Sonic jumped into the portal showing no fear or regret. “Wait Sonic…” Tails called in frustration and surprised. His expression darkened a little bit. “Damn fool going to get himself killed like that… Micro!” Tails called on angry. A fly with video surveillance equipment picked up from the shadows and fled into the wormhole. Tails closed the dimension portal and immediately have gotten his Laptop and switched the feed to Micro’s fly feed. “Where is that guy now?”…
Blaze was sitting on her bed after a long hard day of running a kingdom. With laws, orders, and criminal judgments. Usually with thieves trying to steal food and what not. No one will ever try to question Blaze’s ruling. She missed Sonic because he actually loved her for her and nothing else not because she had money and ruling. She stared at the picture of Sonic as the tears poured on to her face. Blaze’s room feels hotter until a spark of blue flame. As Blaze began to scream she was silent by kiss. From the lips she had from before. Sonic came quickly blowing the flames away with the blue wind. As Blaze and Sonic kissed. It was making Blaze feel wetter down in her pussy. As Sonic began to unclip her jacket one button at a time. As He getting close to the last button, She glopped him and said “Take me now Sonic and make me forever yours!!”He did as instructed and took the pants. Sonic went inside of her; she was feeling a penetrating move like she did before. “KYAAHHHH!!” she screamed in enjoyment, as She screamed. It made Sonic goes even faster and harder, he never felted this good not since well ever! “Yes! YES! YES! YES! YES!” yelled Sonic. Sonic began to feel the intensity and heat. While they were in intercourse. Blaze’s flames turned blue and cooled making Sonic feel right at home. “I’m going to cum!” said Sonic as he was about to get out of Blaze. She wraps her legs around Sonic’s waist, “No Sonic! I want you to make me yours!” she said huskily. “Alright Madame.” Soon afterwards they started to do multiple formations and moves. That even a porn star didn’t even know, as the final move was placed Sonic was on top of Blaze both lying down as Sonic massive dick reached Blaze’s womb. “KYAHAHHHHHHHH!” As she screamed with tears in her eyes. She was close to a orgasm, Sonic was as well. One final pump and Sonic felt immediate joy and Blaze felt joy, like she was finally released from the inside. “OH SHIT BLAZE I’M GOING TO CUM IN YOU!” Said Sonic. “AHHHHHHhhhh…..” as Blaze orgasm was finished at last. She lay down on the bed, tired and exhausted, she never felt the same way as she did before. Sonic was tired as well, he felt asleep while still inside of her and so did Blaze. As they sleep, the two lovers founded themselves in each other dreams. Frolicking in the meadows, training together, and eating together. They were in their own little world for the time being. But like all stories all good times must end….
Hello thank you for reading this awesome porn fanfic, please to let you know that my fan-fics are rated (well I try to keep it) PG-13 to Rated M. I have no “secret” sexual pleasures or anything like that I respect all woman. No matter how I think what they’re speeches are whether it is to close down a porn site or a billboard that has a degrading posting of Woman. Sonic and Friends are not be owned by me. Sega owns all of them, this is just dirty old fan fic that I gotten bored to write.

This post has been edited by SoulTH: 01 February 2012 - 10:22 PM

Sooooo...you don't want feedback then? Maybe you should rewrite to how you would do something today. Also, proofreading helps.

This post has been edited by Marshmallow: 31 January 2012 - 01:25 PM

EDIT:

Well. Good luck with your fics. I didn't read much due to the warning.(And the fact it's an 18+ fic of a crack pairing of a video game that I abandoned years ago.) Advice: Work on your grammar a bit. Your fics will be much better.

This post has been edited by Tiggy: 31 January 2012 - 01:26 PM

Your English writing is very broken and weird.

Also don't link this shit in the Video game Thread

Or wh47? I c4n d0 wh47 3v3r I w4n7 45 10ng i7 i5 in 7h3 T3rm5 0f S3rvic3.

Heh don't know about 1337

This post has been edited by SoulTH: 31 January 2012 - 01:49 PM

You keep that up, and you are not going to last very long in this community, Soul.

"Blaze was sitting on her bed after a long hard day of running a kingdom."

hahahahahahahahahhaahhahahahahaha

Ahahahahahahahaha.
A beautiful fanfic, more food for Chris, and a cute title for you. What else can one ask for?

There is nothing I can say to make this any more beautiful.

This post has been edited by Sammy: 31 January 2012 - 05:30 PM

T.T thank you all for your comments
I'm here to annouce that I will make a another one except this one is
about ShadowXRouge or AmyXShadow who knows I need you guys feed back. *Taeshi I can also do BitterSweetCandy Bowl Fan-fiction so don't feel left out*
Well see you on the forums mates!

This post has been edited by SoulTH: 31 January 2012 - 06:14 PM

do one with cream the rabbit

Okay so do you want Cream X Tails??

I've never wanted anything more.

"Draw me like one of your Mobius girls..."

So yeah pick your poison!!
Suit-Case I am currently doing yours as we speak.
Thank you all for those wonderful comments again
Look up dudes!!
On the upper page I have made a poll which one

This post has been edited by SoulTH: 31 January 2012 - 06:57 PM

Blaze x Sonic? I do not approve, Blaze shouldn't be with anyone!
Amy x Sonic, Rogue x Shadow, Cream x Tails, Knuckles x Tikal, Silver x the most painful thing you can imagine.
Please pick one of those for your next one!

(In case you can't tell, I'm joking, but I seriously hate most of the Sonic pairings involving Blaze.)

I quickly eyed the text and came to the conclusion that in case your writings are still like this please cease posting them.

It's not even hilarious without a dramatic reading.

Esalaka I think I understand ya. You think that my art is pointless and shouldn't see the light of day right? Well I respect your opioin for being honest but I will never stop. This project will end when I say so. So don't read it or read or hey you can ignore it.

Can ignore it?

Oh, no, I can't. I'll be here every time telling you you should improve before showing your stuff to anyone. Porno is terribly hard to write without it becoming horrible and I doubt you'll be able to do it for a while.

Well, at least you got a fancy title for it.

esalaka, on 31 January 2012 - 06:58 PM, said:

Oh THAT'S how you get a title like that!
So I just need to post something suggestive, is that it?

mAceOfHearts, on 31 January 2012 - 07:04 PM, said:

You just need to impress SuitCase I guess

preferably in a way that makes yourself seem ridiculous

Ahahahaha I love this. I'm going to go tell Chris.

I suppose I should give some actual critique this time.
First: Blue flames are hotter than red flames, get your facts straight.
Second: You should start the sex scene more gently, and try not to use words like ´´pussy`` so early on. It's okay later on, but not in the start.
Third: Try to have the characters interact a little before they start having sex. It can't be that hard, I've seen people do it.
Fourth: If you want me to, I can give some reference work to improve all of this. (Feel free to consider me a pervert for saying this, I don't give a shit.)
Fifth and final: Have the characters act in character, that way it seems more believable. Zero_Starlight is good at that, you might want to ask him about how to do stuff like that.

Wait, why is pussy bad to use early on, but fine later in the story? That's like saying member (God I hate that word. It's so damned annoying.) and then suddenly being able to say cock, dick, rod, steaming hot fire poker and whatever else later on and it makes it perfectly acceptable and not hilarious or ridiculous.

I just think it kills the atmosphere if it's used early on. When the characters get ´´in the mood`` I think it's fine, since it's believable that they'd say it. They obivously wouldn't right when they meet.
When it's used by the narrator, he/she can just say that the peron got wet or erect, and not mention the genitals at all. I just think it sounds more classy, but feel free to disagree.

While pornographical literature may or may not be one of your talents, recognizing sarcasm definitely is not. I suggest you really haul your grammar up to mature levels if you want any chance of being taken seriously. Read through Meowth's and Maverik's NSFW work to see how to make something like this interesting without being tasteless, although your selection of characters makes this seem like somewhat of a forlorn hope. Also, get a proofreader. There is nothing that will help you more than a 3rd party's perspective on a piece of work, but I doubt that your parents would be very impressed if they saw this so I'd recruit someone from here.

Sammy, on 31 January 2012 - 08:25 PM, said:

Because I'm completely braindead, I could probably be that 3rd party.

mAceOfHearts, on 31 January 2012 - 08:02 PM, said:

Hold on let me solve this quickly. Blaze's blue flames temperature cooled down due to usage of the sex scene to stop the humid inside Blaze's room. To make it warm kind of cozy way. Blaze's flames is emotional based she always tried to keep a cooled head. If she lets her emotions go then she could have burn the whole kingdom.(hint that's Sonic cue to come in) That is why the flames was cooled. Because she felt romance in her soul.

This post has been edited by SoulTH: 31 January 2012 - 09:18 PM

if minty streams, I'll vocaroo this. if I end up doing it, i'll post it here

Sammy, on 31 January 2012 - 08:25 PM, said:

Sammy can you rephrase your statements towards the person your talking to. My parents couldn't give too shits what the fuck I'm doing so yeah.

Look, I'm kinda bored of being overly sarcastic to kids like you who don't know any better, and I'm not any good at it anyway, so just read what I said, get it into your little sonic-filled head, and apply it. For the love of God please don't be another Lt_Amazil.

This post has been edited by Sammy: 31 January 2012 - 10:16 PM

ShadowxAmy all the waaaaayyy along with RougexKnuckles

FAN FIC UPDATE!!!
Cream's now 18 why because I frown upoun Child Porn. I FROWN... Any ways the person who draw this is sure as hell not me. So give it up for Juana the hedechidna!! or someone I cant remember the name at the moment.So her she is...

I founded this pic on Photobucket I think I know who drawed it..http://i689.photobucket.com/albums/vv259/SonicFanGirl98/cream_the_rabbit_by_nancher-d46sbxs.jpg
Nancher you slitherous bastard... heh'
So that is the real 18 years old Cream well in my fan fic

Also, drawed isn't a word.

This post has been edited by Shada: 01 February 2012 - 12:32 AM

Shada, on 01 February 2012 - 12:30 AM, said:

Okay Number one Blaze has strong feelings for Sonic in this Fan-Fiction. And also the Sex-scene was not rushed that is a fact. Thank you for the critique and I'll take it by heart.

Hey guys I'm waiting

Waiting for what furfag? Chris's reading? Go ahead and make the TailsXCream and he'll read both I'm sure.

MikeXLucy works too I guess, but you could always do that one later.

This post has been edited by Itu: 01 February 2012 - 01:41 AM

Isn't cream a little girl................

This post has been edited by Supah: 01 February 2012 - 01:42 AM

That is why I made her into a 18 year old chick with double d boobs!!!

I'm sure some people here would love her as a little loli though. That's probably the reason she was requested. Heheh.

Ok then good luck with that.... Well i hate Sonic with a passion, so i'll just take my leave now.

Sick fucks

This post has been edited by Supah: 01 February 2012 - 06:29 AM

why are you idiots encouraging this

Because after google translating it and reading it dramatically it provides some entertainment.

Also it keeps him busy.

Confroting him directly or even telling him how he should act politely only results in him flipping out and spewing crap uncontrollably.

This post has been edited by Itu: 01 February 2012 - 02:25 AM

So instead he's encouraged to spew more crap

Good idea

He keeps it controlled here instead, and while he's in the streams he doesn't bother anyone else or post crap. Also he's relatively calm and civil there.

I dunno if I'd call him civil and calm in the streams really. Sometimes he aggravates me there, but I just end up not reading the chat when that occurs usually.

Also, SuitCase put the Cream idea into his head. I don't think Soul even understands what sarcasm is.

Eh, that's why I said relatively. People in the streams just ignore him when he says his crap anyway, unless it's baskey insulting him, which kinda forces him to be reasonable if he wants to be listened to. He's been getting slowly better, at least I can say that much.

At least much better than his IRC experience.

This post has been edited by Itu: 01 February 2012 - 02:48 AM

sorry Minty if I annoyed you and its hard to be sarcastic on the net.

I do know what is Sarcastic is m'am.

Taeshi, on 01 February 2012 - 02:13 AM, said:

I'm kind of shocked and hurt at the same time that all people of the forums. YOU! yes.. You Taeshi has decided that my thinking or creativity is idiotic.
The reason I write is the inspiration I feel every time I read your comic. When I cry or I laugh because of it more thoughts are being made on how to make Ms.Taeshi proud of my writing skills. This is not Bullshit what I'm saying is actually true and straight from the heart of my soul.

Okay... Fan-Fic annocement
As most people have disagree that I should make this into something what the public wants. So be it Who am I to not listen to the people's opioions. Cream the rabbit will NOT be a 18 years old slutty teenage girl. I guessing that people wanted her to be a kid, well whatever (shrugs then walks back into his chambers)

mAceOfHearts, on 31 January 2012 - 06:36 PM, said:

I agree about Sonic not being with Blaze but disagree about Blaze not being with anyone, I actually think that Silver and Blaze make a pretty good pair! my top picks are ShadowxAmy RougexKnuckles CreamxTails (or Cosmo, whichever)and SonicxSally

This post has been edited by Sliviathewolf: 01 February 2012 - 03:41 AM

SoulTH, on 01 February 2012 - 03:02 AM, said:

Welcome to the real world, where just because you admire someone or their work it doesn't mean they're going to respect or like you. Especially when you spew retarded shit.