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This is a request comic of Visionay's character called Max, so have a fun reading.
Story by Visionary
Art by Kou

This post has been edited by Kou: 15 December 2010 - 01:54 AM

So does Kou live with Libida now?

Also, the line "Just my morning trip to don't get rusty like these grandmas from the neighborhood" should read something more like "Just my morning trip. I don't want to get rusty like these grandmas from the neighborhood".

Other than that, your English is improving

Maverik, on 15 December 2010 - 03:15 AM, said:

Actually, I was responsible of checking Kou's grammar, so... yeah

Kou, maybe you should try a more open circle to show age next time? I just recommend to don't draw it so closed. Makes it look like they have something in their mouth.

This post has been edited by Visionary: 17 December 2010 - 03:00 AM

Visionary, on 15 December 2010 - 03:22 AM, said:

I try that next time when she appear.

Well, the new page is here.


It's broken cause the controllers don't have buttons

This post has been edited by Kou: 16 December 2010 - 05:28 PM

Impressive, Kou. Really good, but I'd like to point out a few details, but it's nothing much.
-In first panel, you forgot to draw the end of his sleeve, making it look like he's wearing some sort of suit, or something similar.
-In fourth panel, you forgot an "I" in Maxwell's speech. The speech was supposed to be "I've been saving for some months, so I managed to buy one."
-In sixth panel, the overcoat of Max' tail should be on the tail, and not under.
-In the 8th panel I think you forgot to make the bandanna reach the other side of Kou's head.
-In last panel... well it's just me, but I think you made Maxwell look like far too much of a sore loser than I had in mind.

Either way, I'm really grateful you've been doing me the favor of drawing that comic for me, since I take far too long to draw comics, myself. I'll try to send you the rest of the script as soon as possible, ok?

This post has been edited by Visionary: 17 December 2010 - 10:58 AM

Finally the new page.

Now i know why i don't like to draw DBZ characters...

Visionary...ever the critic

Hya ha ha ha! Oh my Lord, my apologies... it's just that the way you tried to make them DBZ-like is utterly fascinating. Thanks for doing me that huge favor so far, Kou. I'm really grateful. Keep it up, Brazilian fellow!

Sammy, on 22 December 2010 - 09:33 PM, said:

Not ever

No DBZ reference is complete without...


IT'S OVER 9000!!!

The new page.

Who's gonna win this fight?

OVERKILL!!

spin spin
spin

Yay, new page.

Just one more to go.

This post has been edited by Kou: 28 December 2010 - 06:17 PM

ANGST ALARM

Look! I see the Angstbulance!

The last page.


Hope everyone liked the story.

Thanks for making that comic for me, Kou. You're the best.
I hope I can count on you next time I need a comic done.

This post has been edited by Visionary: 04 January 2011 - 03:30 PM

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!

i have to admit the Dragon ball Z reference is hilarious

This post has been edited by Meleeman: 01 January 2011 - 06:54 PM