Thank god you didn't spell it 'Camero', or I would have had to kill you.
He figured they were all pets or something.
Waitaminute, that gives Cars a whole new definition of creepy. Many people are tied to them through bank loans, relying on them for transportation to work and school. huh.
a nearly ancient yellow Camaro with black racing stripes. Kind of a long name for this guy, but he didn’t really care.
Should have put the make of it in there, Chevrolet. Or, even though it only appeared on 67/69s, "Camaro By Chevrolet."
Paulo tried to find a way to turn the car off or brake or anything…every time he tried he’d get a jolt of 1 million volts of electricity
I'm no electrician but that is a bit far fetched.
It is fairly okay, but it has tons of small typos and the formatting is horrible. Use line breaks when speakers change, new paragraphs and such. Wall Of Texts are not easy to read.
Basically a rip on the Michael Bay film, which is alright I guess. But I'd like to see you take it in a different direction if you continue it.
This post has been edited by DLancer: 10 October 2012 - 12:11 PM