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the 1st chapter (prologue) of Crossoverers....
This is a little prologue of the story happened in crossoverer...
[i tried to translate the whole chapter by Google translate but end up F---ed so i have to type myself]
Warning : NSFW (violence and death)


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somewhere in finland... at the mountain. The mountain was covered in snow due to the Blizzard... but inside the mountain... there's a little Base. The Logo on the wall show "The Army of Blue Tiger". All of the worker were working on some big machine that look like eye... and Coporal.Marche [by the name on outfit]an male humn watching it looking out forany intruders... since this month he had to eliminate 8 intruder who try to inflitate with his own power coz his henchmen weren't skillful enough to take out by themselves] and he walk back to the control room... inside the control room some scientist are working on some technical information which is too diffcult to understand so he walk to th General at the middle of room instead...

Cop.Marche : General Tiger... Everything was ok... no way that the intruder could inflitate again. We install the MDT [Motionsensor Detection Turret] , Guarding every Corner... no one will able to do...
General Tiger ,as name say he was blue tiger wearing in a full general outfit with an eyepatch turnhis head to him and interupt his speech...
Gen.Tiger : But those spy could find a way to inflitate somehow... and if it happened...
Gen.Tiger Walk toward him as threaten him a bit. basically he was scared of Gen.Tiger's Personallity which he could kill anyone Who he dislike...
Gen.Tiger : ...If anyone inflitated the base...you'll get demoted for your careless!
Cop.Marche : Y....Yes Sir... "Phew..."
Then General walk back to the main console, plant his hand on the finger scanner...
System Console : ...Access Granted...
Then the celing moved and 3 Big Screen slowly Come down and stop and General's line of sight...
Gen.Tiger : It's time to show the world what we have got now!!!

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Somewhere outside the base... At the outpost... 2 Guards Were Siting at the monitor. It's look like the stituation is normal... then one of them fall down to the floor... They Both alredy Death by Slienced Pistol as the intruder were looking on the screen and hacking the System to Deactivate the Securites, after that he move quiet but quickly to the vents... Then he take something out... then the blizzard cover the aera.. when the view is clear... he dissappeared (or enter the vents)

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Gen.Tiger : ...But now we only have one problem...
Cop.Marche : What is it sir?
Gen.Tiger : ...What's the name of this thing?
Then everyone fall to the ground in WTF!
Cop.Marche : (stand up)Sir! It's "Goldencat" Sir! Why you forgoted sir...
Gen.Tiger : Sorry but i think the jetlag make me forgoted the name...

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The Intruder make way to the power supply without being detected... as he drop from the vent.. he make some noise but no point for become slience since the engine's sound covered everything... and the guard were wearing headphone too...
Intruder : *Sigh* at least he wasn't looking at me...
The intruder removed his face mask slowly... he face show up a... male cat with a cute eye and Blue scarf on his neck... then his radio call in...
Radio : Are you reached the power supply yet 00Mike?
00Mike : (pickup the radio) Yes... now what i have to do next?
Radio : I don't know... but maybe sobatage the power supplies could be helped...
00Mike :I think s...
00Mike Turn back and defense from the attacker, who tried to club him with the lead pipe
Guard : Rawrgh! I won't let you do it!
The guard swing the pipe at 00Mike like crazy.... but all he hit is the stuff around... but 00Mike accidentally tripped and stuck near the Main Engine... which has no way to escape..
Guard : I won't Let you out... ALIVE!!!!
But 00Mike Evade His attack and his pipe hit the control panel... then the guard got Electroducted and fall to the floor...
00Mike : (look at dead guard) at least you helped my job...
System Console : (alert the whole place) Power Supply Got Damaged, System Mulfunction...

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Back to Gen.Tiger...
Gen.Tiger : Now we are going to perform the test fire
Scientist : But sir... Goldencat were Designed to disintergrate the system... but the side effect of person who affect are still lethal sir...
Gen.Tiger : That's the way i want it!... Prepare the Test fire!
System Console : Alert! Power Supply Got Damaged, System Mulfunctioned... Alert!
Gen.Tiger : What!!!
Guard : (run into the room) Sir!!! The intruder!!! he sobataged the power supply
Gen.Tiger : And what are yu waiting? Go get him now!!!

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Radio : 00Mike, The Base is on Alert! Retive the Goldencat now before General taken away!!! Hello.... Mike...
The Radio was Left there since the fight... 00Mike Head toward the Control Room as fast as he could...
Guard : He's there He's there!
00Mike Pull out Dual PP7 Slienced, As the guards came out of the corner... He Perform the Dolphin Dive And Shoot everyone in no time before he landed... then he take out the guard that came from another corner... and then he grabbed grenade luncher and continue along the hallway...
Gen.Tiger : Lock up the door now!
but 00Mike Shoot the grenade Luncher which Destroy the Whole Door instantly... and kill the guards who try to shoot him... then he dive in to the room land in front of Gen.Tiger...
Gen.Tiger : So you are 00Mike,Isn't it?
00Mike : Now i came here to stop you General... hand me the goldencat and i won' Kill you...
Gen.Tiger : ...ok i'll give...(lower his voice)but after you dead!
00Mike Turn back and evade Cop.Marche's Katana... ofcoursely he evaded but leaving him a long slashed wound on his stomach
Cop.Marche : Maybe you have to think again... Sir... go now!
Gen.Tiger unlock the panel and take Goldencat's Device and put in his Coat
00Mike : Well... do you think that could kill me then...
Cop.Marche : Maybe I'll find out... By Behead you!
Cop.Marche Slash 00Mike but missed... 00Mike evade his katana without any problem...
Cop.Marche : Rawrgh! (Upward Slash)
00Mike take the open chance hook his stomach, then grab his Arm and toss him to the ground... but Cop. Roll and kick 00Mike's gut and punch his face so hard that blood squriting from his nose...
00Mike : (rubbing his blood with his backhand) ...You got skill...
But as Cop.Marche Launch the punch... he quickly grab his hand, twist it and jumped, While Cop.Marche was in shock 00Mike Knee his face from above... Knock him out instantly...
00Mike : (Turn to Gen.Tiger) and now it's your...
Then instantly 00Mike Vision Covered in Blood! He Blink his eye And look Down... Gen.Tiger Stand in front of him... His Claw Stabbed into 00Mike's Body... straight to his Heart... and Grabbed
Gen.Tiger : ...i want to play with you more... but i have no time... GoodBYE!
But Before Gen.Tiger Removed 00Mike's Heart 00Mike Headbutt Him cause him to free from his heart and fall to the ground... 00Mike Walk Slowly due to the pain to Gen.Tiger and pickup the Goldencat
00Mike : That's the way it should don..
But then The Engine Exploded! Flame coming toward the control room 00Mike have no chance of escape. The last thing He saw is Flame is Engulf His body and then the explode blast him into the piece!

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Mike : Argggghhhhhhhhhhhhhh!
Mike spring from his bed instantly! and Faceplant on the floor...
Mike : Ouch it hurts!... wait a minute... A nightmare...
Mike Sit in confuse... What happened in his dream... Those soldier... Gen.Tiger... and Goldencat... What the hell is going on in his nightmare?!?
Mike : Whatever... It's just a dream...
Mike go take a bath to clean the confuse in his head... But someone Looking at Mike From Somewhere Far Away...
Unknow : Now it's started...

END OF CHAPTER 0

Comment plz...

Im not much of a critic, but from my point of view there were a few typos and u left out a couple of small details but other than that, its interesting. I'd give it a 7.5/10

There's more grammar errors than there is story, but otherwise it's passable. From what I could understand of the garbled text, it's too fast-paced; try setting up the story a bit more, and describing the environment/scene in a little more detail. Try posting it in its original language and have someone translate it properly, because this is just a mess.

This post has been edited by Sammy: 07 January 2011 - 12:17 PM

Sammy, on 07 January 2011 - 12:16 PM, said:

Message recived sir...