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How did you find this place? No one was ever meant to find this, buried deep in the depths of creative arts? Hisssss. But you must want a story, yes yes. Then you have come to the right place, yes, please, take a look at these fine works...

But yeah I don't know if I'll ever update this again so if you found this page, enjoy! Leave a comment! Don't expect anything anytime soon.

Especially not Tides.

Four Play (NSFW)
Requested and worked on with my good chum Doublet. Set a few years in the future, Lucy has finally gotten over Mike, but when a certain someone shows up in town she begins to question what she really wants. Oh and Jasmine is there too. Feel good endings and your favorite curvaceous cats for everyone!
Illustrated Four Play PDF (NSFW)
This amazing 65 page book illustrated by Doublet and compiled by Suitcase takes the story to a new level. The true way to read the story, don't hesitate to download and give praise to the artist!
Doublet's Art Thread

Me, Myself, and Mike (NSFW)
This is the first NSFW fanfic I did, because noone else would and Dr. John said I should do it myself. SO I DID. It's on the adult fanfiction site kiddos.
In this story, Mike find out that the best person to help cheer you up, if yourself!

Cracked (NSFW)
Cracked, the lovely story of a cat and a dog who are starcrossed lovers in a world that will never understand them.
Just kidding it's about when Sandy comes to Roseville and David cheers her up.

Silence is Golden
This was a gift I did for the Secret Santa to MiwAutru, it was fun to write in an afternoon.
Sue needs to give a gift to Amaya and she drags McCain along, what fun times ensue when Sue leaves the two alone?!
(Now on FanFiction.net!)

Sweet Spot
The crown jewel in the collection (not really it's just the latest) this tale finds our faithful protagonist Mike uncertain of himself until he stumbles upon a small batting cage and its sole occupant...
(Now on Fanfiction.net!)

WORK IN PROGRESS. HAH BY PROGRESS I MEAN NEVER GUNNA FINISH CAUSE I'M A GRADE A FLAKE.
Tides (temp title) (Note, only 13 chapters so far!)
Huzzah! It begins! More will be added really once I type them and yeaaaaah.

That's all for now kids, like it, hate it, do whatcha will with it.

This post has been edited by Ace: 11 February 2013 - 03:15 AM

you should draw

MMAM is a monstrosity and you should be punished. But the Secret Santa is good.

This post has been edited by Sammy: 11 January 2011 - 06:07 PM

Yeah but spacemouse I don't have those programs and I've been too frustrated with what I scribble to post anything besides what I have already on the booru...
Oh and I'm also too lazy/busy. That too.

Although that's kind of a lie since I'll be probably scribbling out another story between classes soon so..

Haha man, these stories are just awesome.

Had I heard that someone was doing a MikexMikexMike story, I would have thought it impossible to make it a good read, but you really pulled it off well. I especially love the whole McCain secret lab thing.

Cracked is yet another story I would have trouble believing that it could be done correctly, but again you surprise and make an interesting, well written story with a unique pairing.

Your writing skills are great and I would definitely like to see more work if you could provide it in the future.

So hey! New story, Sweet Spot, check it out!

I would have preferred to make a thread for it, but since I have a good ol' fashioned collab thread I figured I'd post it here. Please give it a read?

I didn't know you did stories, Ace. I must read! But first, let me take down these Elites in Halo Reach.


... Ace... this is good writing!!!!

This post has been edited by DieWeiBRitter: 28 January 2011 - 10:58 PM

Wow man, I love this story. I just really like the way you showed how Mike's life and thoughts were, not to mention the connection made by he and Jasmine. It was a touching story that made me think, and not to mention made me dislike Lucy a bit more.

I have to say, Sweet Spot was an incredible story. It all flowed perfectly, and tied together in the end very nicely. Truly, it is a masterpiece for the ages.

Sweet Spot is great! You're a great writer Ace

HEY GUYS YOU SHOULD READ SWEET SPOT.

It is very good.

And despite the title it's not a retarded lemon. This is probably my most favourite Ace fanfiction. Even if there's a bit of bat talk and it's all boring and nonsense. BUT IT'S GOOD BAT TALK

Just not the David bat talk and THAT IS ALRIGHT

Sweet Spot is to Ace what The Best Intentions is to Maverik. I only hope it doesn't end up looked over for the weirder creepier fanfiction >8(

Sweet Spot was really very good.

D'awww you guys!

But yes thank y'all for yeh praise, I was very worried that the story would just be too boring for people, altough the whole bat talk, ah well that's the theme no?

And yeahhhh creepier stuff well, they said it couldn't be for so I did it is all. Buwahahha

Yes Sweet spot was very good Ace.

I don't know how he does it, but he always finds a way to make unlikely characters connect.

Those were pretty impressive stories. I read both MMAM and Sweet Spot and I think I can say it was time well spent.
MMAM was... interesting, but the good writing and original plot got me through until the end.
Sweet Spot was a touching story where to unlikely characters have a meaningful conversation. Definitely a good read.

What you didn't read Cracked? Shame on you, you need to read that immediately.

"“David! No! Don’t, you’ll destroy me!”"

That was awwwwwwwwesome.

Cracked was funny to write, especially since I didn't have a path to really go with on that one at first.
Heh, but I secretly hate it because I got some facts so very wrong, like how far away Rickter really is, etc. Still, it wasn't written to be good! haha...

But these compliments make me smile! Criticism is also good however!

Oh and if people actually care about me writing more in the future, it'll probably be awhile because I won't be doing so unless I get more inspiration, and for now I'll probably be working on ubertoast's datesim writing for that if I can, so... yep!

alright sweet spot was pretty good

Wow. These are well written. Sweet Spot was definitely the show stopper.

I especially like how descriptive you are, it really paints a picture in my head of what is going on.

Me, Myself, and Mike was pretty weird,alright. x)
and Sweet Spot was really good.
Yeah,I hope you'll be writing more in the future.

Woah, Sweet Spot sounds like it belongs in a theater production or something.

Oh, I forgot I had a thread for awhile.

Uhhh let's see! Already thanked Mouse (Thank you Mouse)
Purin: Really? I somehow felt it wasn't descriptive enough, altough the image is in my head, I'm very very glad to hear that you can picture it as well, that's what it's about

Sion: Yes, yes MMaM is weird, it was because noone else would write that kind of story. Also Dr. John told me to. And yes I'm busy writing something else although... we'll see what happens with it.

Dr. Klaus: A... theater production? Really now... huh. Thank you very much!

So! I've been busy with well, mostly school, but I've been managing to scribble stuff in my spare time! And thus I have the first chapter in a story that does not yet have a final name but I'm thinking on Tides. Definitely a work in progress, but I felt since it seems like it will be long I should make it into chapters even if the original writing wasn't exactly designed for a chapter story, I'm making it work. I don't have a set schedule because of work and school and inspiration etc, so be forewarned. I usually hate posting things until they are done but whatcha gunna do it's going to take awhile. Oh and this will be on FanFiction.net as soon as they release me from their dirty 2 day waiting period. Jerks.

Anyways, if you want to take a look, here's chapter 1! More will be posted whenever I find time to type the next part! Enjoy

Tides: Chapter 1

This post has been edited by Ace: 01 March 2011 - 02:08 AM

Lol nice job doing introductions on different characters. I like that allot. I'm curious to see what will happen next with Jasmine and Paulo. I can hardly wait

This post has been edited by RedJack: 01 March 2011 - 01:49 AM

Welp, FF.net is allowing me to post now so here's chapter 1 and 2 on there now. Maybe instead of chapters I should call them parts...

Tides chapter 1 and 2

Well all I can say is: It begins. You'll understand.

Oh and thank ye redjack I felt like being different because I always feel like I'm cheating when writing fan fics because half the work is already done for me! Still, I lapse at times but at least I can describe characters?

Pfft what are the odds. (like 1:2?) Was pretty obvious that something like this would happen. After seeing the start of Pillow Talk, people would obviously assume such things to happen between those two cats :3

Oh and still good story.

Definitely up to par with your others stories. I particularly like how you put so much detail into each character, and must say my favorite was Lucy's. She was summed up so well in the first chapter, and each word seemed to only make me want to read more. Well done.

Chapter 3: Fall Leaves

Hah, making chapter titles is funny. I enjoy this one but it was supposed to be longer. I decided to make the next part longer instead because it might as well be another scene. Let's see how long that one takes to write since I essentially have to rewrite it from the paper form!

Another great chapter, Ace. While the description revolving around the scenery was in most ways masterful, I would say it was also a touch excessive. Just seemed there was a little to much emphases on their surroundings rather then them. All in all though, it was great. Honestly, I think Paulo's reaction was very believable, while at the same time it was surprising. Well played.

Chapter 4: Lamplight


Woah shit, man I have been busy busy busy. To any who read this, I apologize for the wait and this chapter, this is where my nervousness begins I hope you understand why. I'll finish this story eventually it may just take some time is all!

Wow these are getting heartbreaking, good work playing off the tension between Jasmine and Paulo. This Daniel fellow has something he's hiding I bet.

Chapter 5: The next day

I feel bad, been too busy spring breaking it up to even type 1,000 words. Geez. This one is short but it flows into another one easily enough and hopefully during friday night skype I'll have it done. But don't count on it. I'm not trustworthy for regular updates.

@JB: Thanks bro. At least this isn't heartbreaking today! I want to make it more so. Silly school and work coming back up.

Chapter 6: Flip

Yeah. So I felt like churning out two chapters. Want to fight about it?

I just read Chapter 5 and 6 and I enjoyed both of them. I thought they were composed fairly well, and as usual, the detailing was done very good.
I've noticed through reading various literature that people tend to focus on different things when they write, and your thing is definitely description and detail.

There were a few minor mistakes in the story though.

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I don't think "doing" was intended there.

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Surely "had" was intended instead of "head"?

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Well I believe "their" technically isn't incorrect, I think "the" would fit much better.

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"What are you...?" Sounds a little more fluid, although I may have simply been confused at the tone you were attempting to convey.

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I believe you meant "think"

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This sentence I had trouble understanding, but please allow me to explain...

Some of the sentences in the story seem a bit 'free-form'. What I mean by that is I think utilizing commas, ellipsis, and other grammar tools to control the flow of the sentence may be wise. You definitely had them where they were needed, but I think it would be a good move to maybe use some more so you have better control over how we perceive the story.

Detailing was fine, if not flat out great.

Ideas and context seem relevant, although I'm feeling like this Danial character will either turn out to be a real player, or a real Larken.

All in all, in was a good read, and I look forward to seeing more by you.

EDIT: typo

This post has been edited by Meowth: 27 March 2011 - 01:17 AM

Man, thanks alot for this Meowth, I'm glad someone was looking for technical mistakes like that. Spell check doesn't catch everything and I have a nasty habit about not re-reading what I write so... yes okay I'm bad at editing and you have brought this to my attention, thank you Meowth! As for the detailing I'm not really even sure I notice it half the time, does it seem excessive? I guess I go with that flows well enough for myself? And as for Daniel. Well. If you can be patient with me it'll all fall into place.

I guess tomorrow I'll work on more writing, tonight I've got a more artistic motivation and I need to find my nail files to convert stuff!

Kicks a rock

Oh. Hey. What's goin on? Cool, cool. Been two months you say? Interesting, interesting.

Chapter 7- Buoy

Oh. Hey look a chapter. That's interesting, now what's this doing here? Being all coming back after 1/6 of a year and all.

Anyways, I'm back to writing this! Chapter 8 should be done soon (like tuesday or something) and all will be well. Of course there is still no preset schedule, so if you wish to read, hey! Thanks! And if you were reading before hand, awesome! I have something new for you then for now. Enjoy.

Boosh Boosh! Two chapters within 15 hours of each other! Take that world!

No but seriously here's chapter 8.
Chapter 8: Life Raft

I enjoy my silly water themes. But yeah, this one is abit long word wise but it needed to be done and it's the duality to chapter 8. Also it's kind of an apology for being on hiatus for so long, so I threw you Paulo x Lucy freaks a bone.

Have at it.

BEST

CHAPTER

EVER

I like how Paulo's "damn hard" speech has become something so quotable, haha.

I also think David's fish catching fantasy immensely. That's such a David thing to do, you can actually write him correctly!!!

It sounds weird to say, but you're one of the rare few who can!!!

I laughed so hard at the "damn hard" quote I actually woke my neighbors Great chapter Ace. Keep em coming

@ Taeshi: Thank you for the very, explosive response! Made me feel like I can accomplished something! And yeah I really felt like reversal of the "damn hard" speech was too good to pass up and just seemed to work for me even if I had to tweak some actions to get to that point, heh.

@RedJack: Good, good, my plan to get you to wake up your neighbors worked excellently buwaahahahaha

Wow man, those last couple of chapters were great. The whole concept of role reversal here between Paulo and Lucy really portrays a balance in their relationship. I think the most profound line in chapter 8 was when Lucy said "You're going to get over her." I guess that might be a bit obvious to pick up on, but I like how that subtle drop of a line suggests that Lucy might be starting to get a handle on her own feelings with Mike's rejection and is moving on.

If you pretend this is a true extension of canon, that's twice Paulo has held steadfast against his passionate desires of Lucy, even when the shoe was on the other foot. Based off that. do you think this would be indicative of Paulo's progression of maturity or that he has always had this morality to contain himself in such situations? Sure they both have been in vulnerable states when being consulted by the other (Lucy in "Another Shoulder"), but neither of their advancements seemed to be justified by pure Lust. Lucy was probably a little more desperate in her breakdown, and everybody knows they have the physical attraction for each other. However, all in all, I feel like their relationship has developed into something much more, and they both are starting to realize that. It caught them both off-guard, as you have shown in your latest chapter. So as I was saying, I feel like Paulo has always had this high level of maturity, at least in relationships. He doesn't seem like a character in major need of development. I think as the story progresses (canon or your fan-fic) it's more about increasing the perception and awareness of his true maturity through his friends. Lucy, on the other hand, has several areas of development. I felt like chapter 8 has hinted at promising improvements. And I honestly believe most of the improvements Lucy has made (both in canon and in your fan-fic) should be credited to Paulo.

I am typically ambivalent when it comes to shipping, but it's difficult for me not to admit when 2 people are innately made for one another. In this case, you have really shown their compatibility. Whether or not they ever end up together is not the point, but how you have shown how strong their friendship has become is what makes reading this much more enjoyable to me. Also, I assume you are probably a PxJ fan, so I try to tread unbiasedly on the matter

*cough* I don't think it helped by reading Meowth's little NSFW commission fanfic on Paulo and Lucy. Suddenly I was jumping to conclusions, while not completely implausible, but misleading.~

Once again, great job.

This post has been edited by Purin: 28 May 2011 - 06:06 AM

Now that I think about it, I have to ask: when Lucy got close to Paulo and then suddenly realized what she was doing and left in a hurry, it reminded me strongly of Mike's thoughts and actions in the first part of chapter 23 of Friends Forever, how he wants Lucy so badly but then realizes that it's wrong and runs off to his bathroom (I have a feeling that the resemblance will not continue past the act of fleeing, though). Was this an influence, deliberate or otherwise, or is it just a coincidence?

@Purin: I enjoy going off extensions of the main plot because it seems more like something that could happen rather than something that is made for the sake of being made. What's funny is I rarely think much ahead as I type. That chapter was meant to end something like that but I didn't know how it would fit until I got there. I'm happy people seem to like it though, and it even got the Taeshi seal of approval! But, right, yeah, if it feels like an extension to you then I've done what I needed to do! Thank you!

@Borg Lord: Sad to say but I had fallen out of habit of reading Meowth's story much to my own dismay (I should be caught up again). I did not take a page from his book, but I mean if it's comparable to Meowth-times, then it's allll goood. Thanks!

Another chapter may come out tomorrow depending on how dead I am after work and food shopping. And other homework. And assignments. Anyways just remember that there is no set schedule sadly!

Alright! Got chapter 9 out. Not as powerful as chapter 8, but hey! You get two perspectives in one chapter, so there's that.

Tides Chapter9- Orange Dawn and Black Dusk

Yes, well, those chapter titles, well. Yeah. Have fun and I'll work on chapter 10 soon I hope.

Oh boy... Jazzys gettin feelings for Daniel And I think I see a conflict building up. David said they were goin out friday and, even though its a bit unlikely they would, I think he wants to go to the aquarium friday

Im seeing Daniel as a villain now.

Man, why all dem Siamese one's getting pegged wit da "evil" card? It's racist.

Daniel is clearly Augustus in disguise. There's no question about it.