BeachSideCheese, on 28 November 2011 - 06:27 AM, said:
I call dibs on this story turning Maximum Overdrive very soon.
Can AC/DC do the music for this, too?
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- matty_batty0
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"Halloween" had a nice twist, I think I see why you didn't really like it with all the plotholes, a decent read though.
"Curvaceous Catburator",from the start I like your "the Blur's were chirping" line, nice touch, I am not that great with spelling and grammar but shouldn't that be "Blurs" instead of "Blur's"?
One small typo I found at the start
Should be "rear-ended"?
I really have no idea where you are going with this story...It is weird. Look forward to see what you do with it, I imagine Lucy trying to make Mike love her now, getting hurt then going on a killing spree
"Curvaceous Catburator",from the start I like your "the Blur's were chirping" line, nice touch, I am not that great with spelling and grammar but shouldn't that be "Blurs" instead of "Blur's"?
One small typo I found at the start
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She pictured streets filled with speeding behemoths, and then she saw herself, moseying along, praying not to be read-ended by one of the monsters...
Should be "rear-ended"?
I really have no idea where you are going with this story...It is weird. Look forward to see what you do with it, I imagine Lucy trying to make Mike love her now, getting hurt then going on a killing spree
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- 28 November 2011 - 12:25 PM
- BeachSideCheese
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Zhefyr, on 28 November 2011 - 08:18 AM, said:
Can AC/DC do the music for this, too?
Sure
I have no problem with listening to Who made who.
- #803
- 28 November 2011 - 03:01 PM
- Meowth
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Chapter 0 of Curvaceous Catburator
EDIT: Fixed the issue.
EDIT: Fixed the issue.
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- #804
- 24 December 2011 - 03:18 AM
- Meowth
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New story, Once in a Blue Moon, has just been added.
A young man decides to take his girlfriend out for a movie, but it doesn't take long for the movie to become the last thing on his mind. This story contains Omorashi.
I wrote this story several months ago for a competition, but due to the rules regarding said competition, I was not allowed to post it anywhere else until the judging was complete. Now that the judging has finally gone through, I am able to post it. And for anyone wondering, I did win the competition, walking away with a small, cash prize.
A young man decides to take his girlfriend out for a movie, but it doesn't take long for the movie to become the last thing on his mind. This story contains Omorashi.
I wrote this story several months ago for a competition, but due to the rules regarding said competition, I was not allowed to post it anywhere else until the judging was complete. Now that the judging has finally gone through, I am able to post it. And for anyone wondering, I did win the competition, walking away with a small, cash prize.
- #805
- 28 December 2011 - 12:07 AM
- Meowth
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New story(NSFW): The Many Stories of Samantha Pt. I
A man tells stories of the various things that occurred involving his best-friend's, beautiful, older sister. Omorashi content.
A man tells stories of the various things that occurred involving his best-friend's, beautiful, older sister. Omorashi content.
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- #806
- 02 January 2012 - 02:56 AM
Ha, these are really good, albeit a little short. Are they commissioned or something?
- #807
- 02 January 2012 - 01:30 PM
- Meowth
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Well, Once in a Blue Moon was done for a competition, so it wasn't meant to be long. The Many Stories of Samantha is supposed to be multipart, so it isn't exactly over.
It is worth mentioning that in the fetish community, shorter stories are usually more popular. Even multichapter stories usually fair better if they keep each chapter - or "event" - under about 2k words. It is easy to put too much build up into porn, especially this kind of porn.
It is worth mentioning that in the fetish community, shorter stories are usually more popular. Even multichapter stories usually fair better if they keep each chapter - or "event" - under about 2k words. It is easy to put too much build up into porn, especially this kind of porn.
- #808
- 02 January 2012 - 09:38 PM
- Meowth
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Hi, I've recently found myself needing a bit of money. I have been wanting to purchase a gift for a friend, but it turns out it is just a bit out of my price range. In order to make this money, I have decided to temporarily lower the cost of commissions by 25%. In other words, you will be paying a mere 3/4 of a cent per word, as opposed to the old $0.01 per word - the typical price among writers.
I have done commissions and art trades before, and all of them were well-received. There are also the many requests, competitions, and independent stories I have done over my writing career as well.
If you do decide to commission me, feel free to post here or send me a private message.
Thank you!
I have done commissions and art trades before, and all of them were well-received. There are also the many requests, competitions, and independent stories I have done over my writing career as well.
If you do decide to commission me, feel free to post here or send me a private message.
Thank you!
This post has been edited by Meowth: 07 January 2012 - 11:27 PM
- #809
- 07 January 2012 - 11:15 PM
- Kapitan Fryface
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Meowth, on 07 January 2012 - 11:15 PM, said:
Hi, I've recently found myself needing a bit of money. I have been wanting to purchase a gift for a friend, but it turns out it is just a bit out of my price range. In order to make this money, I have decided to temporarily lower the cost of commissions by 25%. In other words, you will be paying a mere $0.75 per word, as opposed to the old $1.00 per word - the typical price among writers.
I have done commissions and art trades before, and all of them were well-received. There are also the many requests, competitions, and independent stories I have done over my writing career as well.
If you do decide to commission me, feel free to post here or send me a private message.
Thank you!
I have done commissions and art trades before, and all of them were well-received. There are also the many requests, competitions, and independent stories I have done over my writing career as well.
If you do decide to commission me, feel free to post here or send me a private message.
Thank you!
So wait, a 100-word story that would normally cost $100 will now only cost $75? Hot damn, what a steal!
- #810
- 07 January 2012 - 11:19 PM
- Meowth
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Dr. Klaus, on 08 January 2012 - 04:16 AM, said:
the original Journey is no longer available.
What seems to be the problem? Was it deleted?
If it has been, I have no way of knowing or reuploading it, because my computer is no longer capable of logging into several sites.
- #814
- 08 January 2012 - 04:28 PM
- Meowth
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Alright, so I'm not entirely sure what happened, but apparently Suitcase got a message from one of his admins saying that there was an issue with the disclaimer. They told him that the story would be deleted in a week, but my account wouldn't be deleted.
All of my AFF stories had a similar disclaimer.
I don't understand what his admins had to do with this. I don't know why I wasn't given the message. I don't understand why my account was deleted. I'm not even sure what account they were talking about, what the fuck they were administrating, or why they were worried about disclaimers at all. On top of that, I don't understand how someone would have authority over Suitcase on disclaimers (he even mentioned how he changed the disclaimer on his story).
Consequently, Suitcase decided to ignore me after giving me this message (like so many of the people on the IRC love to do when you stop being interesting), so I am completely in the dark on what happened, on who did what, and on what to do.
Sorry guys, I'm not sure who is to blame here, but I can assure you I had no control over this. I will see what I can do to bring them up (assuming I still have them).
And thank you for the messages Borg and Klaus. If I hadn't been told, it is possible I would never have found out.
Also, on a more positive note, I am currently working on a commission!
All of my AFF stories had a similar disclaimer.
I don't understand what his admins had to do with this. I don't know why I wasn't given the message. I don't understand why my account was deleted. I'm not even sure what account they were talking about, what the fuck they were administrating, or why they were worried about disclaimers at all. On top of that, I don't understand how someone would have authority over Suitcase on disclaimers (he even mentioned how he changed the disclaimer on his story).
Consequently, Suitcase decided to ignore me after giving me this message (like so many of the people on the IRC love to do when you stop being interesting), so I am completely in the dark on what happened, on who did what, and on what to do.
Sorry guys, I'm not sure who is to blame here, but I can assure you I had no control over this. I will see what I can do to bring them up (assuming I still have them).
And thank you for the messages Borg and Klaus. If I hadn't been told, it is possible I would never have found out.
Also, on a more positive note, I am currently working on a commission!
- #818
- 08 January 2012 - 10:32 PM
- SushiJaguar
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Well god damnit
What am I gonna do for hot PxT now
What am I gonna do for hot PxT now
- #819
- 09 January 2012 - 09:46 AM
- Meowth
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New story, (NSFW) Denial, has been uploaded.
Paulo's dad has to go away for the weekend on business, and Paulo is stuck at Mike's house in the mean time. What kinds of shenanigans will ensue?
Finally, some MikeXPaulo action. This was a commission from Purin. He didn't give me any specifications except the pairing - obviously, he understands the OTP.
Also, tell me how you feel about the writing. I attempted to make it a bit more terse than usual.
Paulo's dad has to go away for the weekend on business, and Paulo is stuck at Mike's house in the mean time. What kinds of shenanigans will ensue?
Finally, some MikeXPaulo action. This was a commission from Purin. He didn't give me any specifications except the pairing - obviously, he understands the OTP.
Also, tell me how you feel about the writing. I attempted to make it a bit more terse than usual.
This post has been edited by Meowth: 09 January 2012 - 10:36 PM
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- 09 January 2012 - 10:34 PM
- Chris
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so, found something.
controller
sounds weird to me. I'm pretty tired though, so it might just be me.
fantastic story by the way.
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"You hungry?" Mike set his controlled on the floor.
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Mike and Paulo sat on his back patio, a large, red unbrella protecting them from the sun.
sounds weird to me. I'm pretty tired though, so it might just be me.
fantastic story by the way.
- #821
- 10 January 2012 - 01:12 AM
- Meowth
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New story: Good Times.
Omorashi content.
I wanted to let you guys know that my deal with the commissions is now over. I may do it again. The price is now back up to $.01 USD per word.
Also, I cannot replace my missing stories until I get Microsoft Word to open the documents, and while my computer is not functioning correctly, that cannot happen.
Omorashi content.
I wanted to let you guys know that my deal with the commissions is now over. I may do it again. The price is now back up to $.01 USD per word.
Also, I cannot replace my missing stories until I get Microsoft Word to open the documents, and while my computer is not functioning correctly, that cannot happen.
This post has been edited by Meowth: 22 January 2012 - 08:01 PM
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- 22 January 2012 - 07:30 PM
- Meowth
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I wanted to try something different: Renaissance Rot.
- #829
- 02 February 2012 - 02:56 AM
- Meowth
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Curvaceous Catburator Chapter 1 (again). (Now rated T)
Why do you people even read my shit?
Why do you people even read my shit?
This post has been edited by Meowth: 05 February 2012 - 03:52 AM
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- 05 February 2012 - 03:49 AM
- Borg Lord
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I don't know about other people, but I seem to be reading because I'm curious who that narrator is, whether he is impersonating Mike or something else is going on with that, and whether I will in time come to understand the pattern in the way the chapters are numbered. Stuff like that, I guess. And I want to see if Lucy can ever come to terms with being a car.
- #831
- 05 February 2012 - 07:53 PM
- Meowth
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Aloof, Dominating Daisy, Ace Illusion, Sultry Shadows, Journey, and Upon the Cross have all been reposted. Fear of the Dark and Fly Me to the Moon, to my knowledge, were not backed up. If someone happens to have saved them, I would grateful for the files.
EDIT: "I would grateful for the files." Yeah, that is what I meant to say.
EDIT: "I would grateful for the files." Yeah, that is what I meant to say.
This post has been edited by Meowth: 18 March 2012 - 03:55 AM
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- 18 March 2012 - 03:48 AM
- Meowth
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Oh, thanks, that's a good idea.
And I had considered doing that, but posting mature content on FF.net is against the guidelines. I guess it doesn't matter too much since everyone breaks the rule, but I wanted to avoid it.
Fear of the Dark was a rape fic with Augustus and Amaya. If I need to explain who raped who, then I somehow doubt you can help.
Fly Me to the Moon was a porn story with Paulo and Jasmine. Jasmine is excited because Paulo is going to take her on a date. Very fluffy and very romantic.
And I had considered doing that, but posting mature content on FF.net is against the guidelines. I guess it doesn't matter too much since everyone breaks the rule, but I wanted to avoid it.
Fear of the Dark was a rape fic with Augustus and Amaya. If I need to explain who raped who, then I somehow doubt you can help.
Fly Me to the Moon was a porn story with Paulo and Jasmine. Jasmine is excited because Paulo is going to take her on a date. Very fluffy and very romantic.
This post has been edited by Meowth: 18 March 2012 - 04:04 PM
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- 18 March 2012 - 04:04 PM
- Meowth
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Looking for Today
I wanted to write a story last night and asked for a topic. Taeshi said detectives. This was the result. This is not BCB related.
I wanted to write a story last night and asked for a topic. Taeshi said detectives. This was the result. This is not BCB related.
This post has been edited by Meowth: 30 March 2012 - 08:46 PM
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- 30 March 2012 - 08:46 PM
- Meowth
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I have just put up a new story, Avalanche.
Chapter One: Gravel
Has Mike's entire life been a lie? As he questions his relationship with Sandy, he begins to wonder what it is he truly wants and who he is. Can he find happiness? Or will he forever live in the shadow of his doubt and fear?
Chapter One: Gravel
Has Mike's entire life been a lie? As he questions his relationship with Sandy, he begins to wonder what it is he truly wants and who he is. Can he find happiness? Or will he forever live in the shadow of his doubt and fear?
- #837
- 01 April 2012 - 09:04 AM
- Smash Genesis
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I wasn't a big fan of this, tbh. The dialogue was wooden, especially Mike's hamfisted inner-dialogues with himself.
These examples in particular stand out to me.
This part is particularly hamfisted and wooden. Just saying "So? I don't have a strong sex drive is all." would have communicated the same message much more succinctly.
I really think you could have just had left it at the second "You're not gay!" By this point you've already communicated the message that he's in denial about his homosexuality, and the rest is just plain redundant.
Aslo, the whole concept of this fic kinda hits a pet peeve of mine: I really hate it when people take a canonically straight character and make him/her gay/lesbian. It's like, no, these people already go one way, not the other, why are you messing with that, because it's out of character. I mean, if somebody took a gay/lesbian character and made him/her straight you'd have at least ONE person complaining of homophobia.
These examples in particular stand out to me.
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"So? So? That doesn't mean anything. I don't have a very strong sex drive. That's it."
This part is particularly hamfisted and wooden. Just saying "So? I don't have a strong sex drive is all." would have communicated the same message much more succinctly.
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"God damn it!" Mike said under his breath as he sat up. "You're not gay. You're not gay. You're not gay. You're not gay. Think about it, that doesn't make sense. I mean… it is okay if someone is gay. That's fine. No one should be scared of being gay. There isn't anything wrong with it. It's just, you aren't. If you were, you'd be honest, right?"
I really think you could have just had left it at the second "You're not gay!" By this point you've already communicated the message that he's in denial about his homosexuality, and the rest is just plain redundant.
Aslo, the whole concept of this fic kinda hits a pet peeve of mine: I really hate it when people take a canonically straight character and make him/her gay/lesbian. It's like, no, these people already go one way, not the other, why are you messing with that, because it's out of character. I mean, if somebody took a gay/lesbian character and made him/her straight you'd have at least ONE person complaining of homophobia.
This post has been edited by Smash Genesis: 01 April 2012 - 12:40 PM
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- 01 April 2012 - 12:40 PM
- Meowth
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I appreciate you taking the time to tell me how you felt, although I'm sorry you didn't enjoy the story.
And as for the dialogue, I will keep an eye out for the hamfistedness. Dialogue has always proved to be a very difficult thing to write -- at least for me. Most things which fit in a story sound fake, and most things which sound good in reality don't work at all on paper. Finding that middle ground could be a full time job on its own.
And as for the dialogue, I will keep an eye out for the hamfistedness. Dialogue has always proved to be a very difficult thing to write -- at least for me. Most things which fit in a story sound fake, and most things which sound good in reality don't work at all on paper. Finding that middle ground could be a full time job on its own.
- #840
- 01 April 2012 - 10:30 PM
- Meowth
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Chapter 3, Mirror Mirror.
I would like to thank Carstonian for his very helpful critique of the story.
So, I worked particularly hard on this chapter. Actually wrote it, deleted it, and rewrote it, taking a very long time to plan each sentence. I hope you all enjoy it, but regardless, let me know how you like/dislike it.
I would like to thank Carstonian for his very helpful critique of the story.
So, I worked particularly hard on this chapter. Actually wrote it, deleted it, and rewrote it, taking a very long time to plan each sentence. I hope you all enjoy it, but regardless, let me know how you like/dislike it.
- #842
- 08 April 2012 - 07:53 PM
- Meowth
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I have a new story, Issues. It is a BCB Fanfiction. Jasmine starts having second thoughts about Paulo. This is the result.
Also, Chapter 3 of Ally is up.
Also, Chapter 3 of Ally is up.
- #846
- 28 May 2012 - 04:02 PM
- Catalyst
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Oh, man. So I was sitting down to eat and I like doing some reading while I'm eating. I though to myself, hey, I should read some of Meowth's new works, so (wanting to save Ally for... later) I opened up "Issues." Bad idea. I know this may be the effect you were going for, but WTF!
(I have been reading your Avalanche and Ally stories and have been enjoying them, so keep up the good work there.)
(I have been reading your Avalanche and Ally stories and have been enjoying them, so keep up the good work there.)
- #849
- 05 June 2012 - 04:45 AM
- Meowth
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I appreciate you taking the time. And yes, Issues... has some issues. It was definitely different, and while I accept that most of it is pretty ridiculous, I do maintain the feeling that there is a lot more in that story than meets the eye.
As for Avalanche... Honestly, I kind of gave up on it. With school, it just seemed like a lot of work. And since there wasn't really anyone reading it, I didn't see why I should continue it. So I moved on.
Ally... I can understand why you didn't read that one out right. I originally didn't even plan on putting them here, but I figured "why not," and I did.
As for Avalanche... Honestly, I kind of gave up on it. With school, it just seemed like a lot of work. And since there wasn't really anyone reading it, I didn't see why I should continue it. So I moved on.
Ally... I can understand why you didn't read that one out right. I originally didn't even plan on putting them here, but I figured "why not," and I did.
- #850
- 05 June 2012 - 05:51 AM