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10/10
definitely one of your best.

The Second Person
Non-BCB

This post has been edited by Meowth: 21 November 2012 - 02:41 AM

The Second Person 2: Sensational

Meowth, on 20 November 2012 - 02:43 AM, said:

I am okay with this

YOUthful Imagination
Non-BCB. Very proud of this. I would appreciate it if you'd read it and maybe comment!

Meowth, on 22 November 2012 - 04:32 AM, said:

Holy shit, this is pretty good. It gave me warm feelings in my heart.

Thanks!

Okay, first off the simple stuff:

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Do you mean wandering? I mean, it could be either, but wandering would make more sense.

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I wouldn't use the quotation marks here. a bit of a stylistic choice, but the meaning is quite obvious without them, and as they are, they're a bit distracting.

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Consider revising? I feel no regret. I have no regrets. I don't feel regret. maybe it's just the plural that's bugging me.

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Not sure what you were trying to do here with the hyphens, but it threw me off a bit. I'd have just gone for the more traditional 'Comma': one that affords us sentience, great power and... Or maybe I misunderstood the sentence? one that affords us – sentients – great power, and... ?


Otherwise a pretty deep text. I had to read it twice to try and really figure it out (though that's probably the aim of it!). At first I thought the protagonist was meant to be the author, then the story itself, but now I think it's meant to be just a character, as imagined by the reader? That would make the most sense, what with the little Ohio background and whatnot. The trouble I have is that it couldn't be a recursive thing as suggested by the story. If a reader imagines a character, they won't usually create their thoughts along with it, except in so far as the text guides them, or if they later dwell on the character. So the character itself would be incapable of becoming a reader himself and creating a new character. Even if you consider it alive, it can't be autonomous. The reader's life must necessarily be much more complex than the character's, or the latter wouldn't fit in a book. With such loss of complexity, you could maybe have a character create another character and maybe even go three levels deep, but not much more than that. Unless of course, you suggest that characters can have a life of their own - outside the book, independent of author and reader.

I had fun reading it, thanks.

This post has been edited by Migrant: 23 November 2012 - 11:55 PM

I appreciate the review! As for the hyphens in your last quote: it is defining who "us" is.

Also, the end part I'd rather not explain. It is up for interpretation; though, your ideas are very interesting.

I don't know if anyone is interested in my writing, or even writing in general anymore, but just in case there are some people who are, I have decided to extend this offer!

I will be doing commissions again. One cent a word. Now, I never exactly stopped doing this, however, this time it will be different. For the remaining time that Bittersweet Candy Bowl is in Mix March Madness I will be donating 100% of the proceeds in order to purchase votes.

So that means if you purchase a story a from me, you will be both donating to a charity to help artists, as well as helping to support your potential favorite web comic, BCB!

The commissions are as they ever were. I will write almost anything. That includes disgusting porn, and everything worse. All you have to do is describe what you want, I will write the story, post it, you will send the money to me, and I will then donate an equal amount of money and provide a receipt. Or, YOU can donate the money and show me the receipt, whichever you prefer!

This post has been edited by Meowth: 18 March 2013 - 10:18 PM

How much does it cost per word for Weregeek?

what the hell is Weregeek

While I find this really sweet, I rather you guys not be mean about the comics I'm going up against! Maybe you should read weregeek to have an opinion of it, who knows it might be something you won't regret!! comic support!!!!

Ha ha, I actually didn't even realize the opposing comic was Weregeek until a few moments ago. Yes, I know, I am pitiful sometimes. I'm getting too invested in this competition. But I suppose it couldn't hurt to at least give it a the ol' college try!

Also, Purin will be making the first commission. It is for $7/700 words. He hasn't yet told me what he wants, but he has already donated the money.

So a person over DA has contacted me in regards to doing 6 stories, each 2k words a piece. That is $120 to charity, plus a $10 tip to me if I manage to do ALL the stories. I also still have to do Purin's PauloXDaisy, which is 700 words and getting close to finished.

What needs to be done:

• PauloXDaisy 700
  
• MikeXSandy 2k
  
• AugustusXDaisy 2k
  
• PauloXLucy 2k
  
• AbbeyXDaisy 2k
  
• MikeXLucy 2k
  
• LucyXMikeXSandy 2k

Excellent to hear that you are getting more chances to excercise your writing. I am assuming the charity is the webcomic bracket voting thing.

i'd save those votes for the finals if i was you

Jeepers dude

Are these normal porn stories or do they involve horrible fetishes

Every last one is babyfur

Ace I won't even ask what that is or how you even know that term. Instead I will ask: Are you doing any more Jasmine related stories... preferably with Jasmine being happy again? I thought for sure that you would be the first to try it after... recent events.

Serpents of the Eternal Sands Bathed in the Blood of the Ancients has been added!

This is Purin's PxD commission. He donated $7 dollars.

Supertails donated $120 and his stories are now priority.

Nicely done there, Meowth.

And holy shit Supertails.

<3

Purin, we both saw an opportunity to get some more wonderful stories out of Meowth and we both took it. Hopefully you enjoyed that pun .

All I can think of now is that Meowth must be Supertails' favourite whore.

wacko, on 19 April 2013 - 03:33 PM, said:

No wacko, just no . No one here is a "whore." Ugh, that's just wrong even for a joke. Meowth isn't my favorite writer either... he will have to settle for being one of my favorites(even though I haven't read all his stories yet... sorry Meowth ... at least you are in the top 5 along with William Shakespeare) We all know that Taeshi holds the spot for the best story maker around . Oh, and you are the best at grabbing my attention here on the Forums .

If you had any idea how much I donated for the tournament(apart from what my group had me donate ), the amount I spent on the Kickstarter(worth it d^_^), or how much I am planning to spend for the "gift" I am going to send to Taeshi and Suitcase(eventually, but I can't do it while they are moving and I want to make sure I have X and Y together before I go sending anything... I'm lame I know -_-)... then you'd have a reason to call me a crazed fan. Oh, don't look at me like that I just want to be supportive of Veronica and Oliver on all their endeavors . That is all... I think . Better not be a crush because I wouldn't know how to deal with that .

This post has been edited by Supertails: 19 April 2013 - 06:20 PM

It's okay, Meowth. You're still my favorite whore.

Supertails, on 19 April 2013 - 05:49 PM, said:

Ha ha. I GUESS I can deal with that.

Supertails, on 19 April 2013 - 05:49 PM, said:

Welcome to the club. Suitcase is pretty fucking irresistible.

Meowth, on 20 April 2013 - 03:08 AM, said:

You mean Taeshi and Suitcase are pretty fucking irresistable.
I can't believe I didn't say this earlier, how heartless of me .

He wants the D.(winkwinknudgenudge?)

This post has been edited by TheMysteriousMan: 24 May 2013 - 03:58 AM

TheMysteriousMan, on 24 May 2013 - 03:57 AM, said:

Yes he clearly wants Daisy(I know what you meant, but that doesn't mean I have to like it) .

Who wouldn't nail Daisy? Dem hips, amiright


also, the first of Supertails' stories:

Farmer in the City
Paulo mercilessly beats Lucy with his genitals.

RATED: M

Jordan: The ultimate cockblock

OH DEAR

Hahaha poor Jordan, the current situation makes him out to be such a party pooper when he's actually the chillest of the three siblings. This was pretty good though!! I like how you described them kissing without even saying they kissed.

I love reading fan fiction. Every story posted helps me grow in my own writing. All I can ever do when some one posts good stories is thank them