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  • That doesn't sound like a rape. That sounds like suprise sex
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View PostJake, on 31 March 2011 - 03:39 AM, said:

@Craft
I don't know about him lighting his head on fire or anything like that. He tends to keep his magic to himself in school.
Like I said, you wouldn't know the difference between him and the other students if he wasn't flying over the streets or saying chants under his breath.

Well that is just it. At the moment he would never do something like that but that is the point. It would subconciously be his own little rebelion but when you are having the diolog he could be thinking more about just how nice it would be to not have to walk today and how the onlything stoping him form doing it is the expectiations of these humans. These danm judgmental humans. "I- I think I want to." and then he starts to lift and his relaxed legs swing jsut a little bit as the tips of his toes leave the ground.
It seem nice but the implied part would be that he wanted to
and it didn't matter at all what people wanted him to do anymore.
While wrigting the scean he should sut give off the air of bliss but everyone else should seem weirded out and just a bit scared of this new chainge.
  • #99451

Yeah, Akira was intense.
Ellison and Lovecraft are also pretty good at those.
EVVYBODY DIES YAY :D

We could make two endings. One good, one dementedly lugubrious.
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View PostJake, on 31 March 2011 - 03:43 AM, said:

@Klaus
I'm a sucker for happy endings.
We already have things like Death Note for sad endings...

Happy? the question is, happy for who and in what way. If you did it right you could have the sorcerer die and still have a happy ending. Just never make a spell at the cost of his life. Overdone.
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Alfdsjflksadjfsd worst Wednesday ever. Any hoo, what's the haps chaps?
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View PostCraft aids, on 31 March 2011 - 03:49 AM, said:

View PostJake, on 31 March 2011 - 03:43 AM, said:

@Klaus
I'm a sucker for happy endings.
We already have things like Death Note for sad endings...

Happy? the question is, happy for who and in what way. If you did it right you could have the sorcerer die and still have a happy ending. Just never make a spell at the cost of his life. Overdone.

See: Castle in the Sky (close enough)
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View PostScotch, on 31 March 2011 - 03:47 AM, said:

I like pointless endings. The type of ending that makes you feel as though it may as well have never happened.

And if you really hate downer endings you'd do very well to watch something like The Mist or The Skeleton Key.

You would motha F in love FF I.

This post has been edited by Craft aids: 31 March 2011 - 03:51 AM

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View PostLeaving_a_Comment, on 31 March 2011 - 03:50 AM, said:

Alfdsjflksadjfsd worst Wednesday ever. Any hoo, what's the haps chaps?

We're collabing on Jake's story. Just backread about a page. that's all that's necessary.
  • #99457

Backreading is for pussies, PUSSIES I SAY.

This post has been edited by Leaving_a_Comment: 31 March 2011 - 03:52 AM

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You also might want to check the thread in C.A.
You will know which one.
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View PostLeaving_a_Comment, on 31 March 2011 - 03:51 AM, said:

Backreading is for pussies, PUSSIES I SAY.

Just scroll up, you lazyass.
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@Craft
Hmmm...
I like it.
His eyes would be unfocused as he stared up at the ceiling, arms and legs hanging limp as he slowly hovered down the hallway.
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View PostLeaving_a_Comment, on 31 March 2011 - 03:51 AM, said:

Backreading is for pussies, PUSSIES I SAY.

Then I am a pussie, and you have a dick. Lets get on that!
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Also: aljfksdjf The ending of the Mist, the novella was a 100 times better cause at least there was hope. But I still enjoy the movie.

At Craft: :nope: I would like to think that if I truly had a penis I wouldn't put it into the every living thing that walked by. Which would in a sense, make me a pussy of a man.

This post has been edited by Leaving_a_Comment: 31 March 2011 - 03:54 AM

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Hello Comment.
Hey, have you read my story yet?
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View PostJake, on 31 March 2011 - 03:53 AM, said:

@Craft
Hmmm...
I like it.
His eyes would be unfocused as he stared up at the ceiling, arms and legs hanging limp as he slowly hovered down the hallway.

I had his eyes closed with his books in his folded arms on his chest. Finaly peaceful.
Yours sounds dead.
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Let's hear it for necromancy!
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@Craft
Yeah. The Thousand Yard Stare.
Often found in the eyes of solders who has had to face more battles than any man should have ever faced. It's basically zoneing out in a moment of bliss. Your eyes are open, but you can't see...

This post has been edited by Jake: 31 March 2011 - 03:58 AM

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IN other news...

6:24:23.
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He could totaly kill himself and then control his body from beyond the grave.
OH HOLY HELL!
The body would only last so long! It is the perfect way for him create a happy ending and be unable to enjoy it that has never been done before. Like, he learns his lesson right before dieing. Then he gets pissed and violently murders whoever done it while yelling an explenation about hos he only has a few hours until his nerves stop working.
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That's true. Backreading is for kind, considerate people. The kind of kindness and consideration that is often attributed to pussies.

True, I did find that that ending was just a little bit too stark. It just seemed pointlessly bitter.

Zombie superhero. That just seems even more disturbing. Where's the hope in that?
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View PostJake, on 31 March 2011 - 03:57 AM, said:

@Craft
Yeah. The Thousand Yard Stare.
Often found in the eyes of solders who has had to face more battles than any man should have ever faced. It's basically zoneing out in a moment of bliss. Your eyes are open, but you can't see...

Oh! Well then lets get really creapy and have him looking down at the people but not seeing them. Then they can all be scared but you could still write it in a way that seems peaceful and happy. That last part would be hardest but it is importaint.
  • #99471

Exactly Scotch! I mean there was no point to it! It was basically "Hmmm I don't like this possibly happy ending and the audience will hate it. GOTTA BE DARKER AND EDGIER." To a Stephen King story to boot!

Not yet Jake, but I will when I'm not in a terrible mood hun. You would NOT like my critiquing when I am in a foul mood.
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View PostScotch, on 31 March 2011 - 04:00 AM, said:

That's true. Backreading is for kind, considerate people. The kind of kindness and consideration that is often attributed to pussies.

True, I did find that that ending was just a little bit too stark. It just seemed pointlessly bitter.

Zombie superhero. That just seems even more disturbing. Where's the hope in that?

At no point has the hope in this story been directly for himself. His only wish at the end would be that his childeren get along without him. He could still try and manage that. That would be his final peace.
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@Craft
Yeah! And students are walking under him totally freaking out!
Some will do things like waving their hands infront of his face to get a reaction, but he would just continue floating down the hallway.
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Ok, butt you have to remember, he is happy. The reader needs to somehow know and feal that he is happy.

The underlieing hidden parts of this would be that he is abandoning their rule and no longer will he obey them. He now will do what he feels like for the first time in his life and if feals GREAT.
If you are willing to do the multipul personality thing then this would be the moring after he gets the comforing voise when he first loses some of his need for people.
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@Comment
Alright...
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And if there is a kid who actualy likes him but the Sorcerser thinks of as jsut anouther human he could just look up and tilt his head in confusion but still smile a bit while everyone else runs around and the seconed personality could see this.
  • #99477

@Craft
That sounds like a plan!
Although, I'm still shakey about the second personality...
But it's going to have to be late in the comic. This will be a big turning point for him.

... Now that I think about it, we haven't even given this character a name yet!

This post has been edited by Jake: 31 March 2011 - 04:13 AM

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Don't.


Also, I just thought of something rather ballsy.
Then again, it could jsut be seen as a hook.
I want the one person in the school who actualy likes him, if they exist, to be male. I wish to say no more. It would put you out.
  • #99479

I have to go now.
6:42:46. LEEKS
  • #99480

@Craft
Not give him a name?
But how is everybody going to address him?

As for friends, I'm thinking of one regular friend, and there HAS to be a love interest... Perferably one sided.

This post has been edited by Jake: 31 March 2011 - 04:20 AM

  • #99481

Exactly. Don't get me wrong. I love a downer ending when it's properly nuanced. Such as my other example, The Skeleton Key. There they coupled a downer with a perfectly executed twist and it just makes you say "no. Aww, What!? No way! damn. nice."
  • #99482

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View PostJake, on 31 March 2011 - 04:16 AM, said:

@Craft
Not give him a name?
But how is everybody going to address him?

"Hero" "sorcerer" "scounderal" "Young man" "Student" "You" "Sir" "man"

But no one but the possable one true freind who he doesn't realise is a good freind will ever say his name. In fact, jsut have the freind use a nickname.
  • #99483

I am Jack's laser beam eyes.
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  • That doesn't sound like a rape. That sounds like suprise sex
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View PostJake, on 31 March 2011 - 04:16 AM, said:

@Craft
Not give him a name?
But how is everybody going to address him?

As for friends, I'm thinking of one regular friend. And there HAS to be a love interest, perferably one sided.

Sure. He can have the hots for someone. He could even get laid at some point. In fact, you could have a carfully laid out conversation with that person where the Sorcereer is convinced she only likes him becase he has powers. Losing her could be what gives him his MPD and small amount of freedom form the chains of the rest of humanity.
  • #99485

@Craft
Actually... I was thinking one sided as in a girl likes him, but he dosen't realize it.
He would shrug off all of her attempts for a relationship with all of the thousands of girls that try to be noticed by him, but later realizes that she really does like him.

This post has been edited by Jake: 31 March 2011 - 04:26 AM

  • #99486

Hmmm It's been a while since I read Skeleton Key, but it seems that there were a few that I've always liked. I think one about a woman who has to walk on the outside a building was one...
  • #99487

Then what makes this girl special?
  • #99488

@Scotch
I don't know...
That's what I'm trying to figure out.
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View PostScotch, on 31 March 2011 - 04:26 AM, said:

Then what makes this girl special?

She's his sister :P

SEVEN FRIKKIN LEEK-FILLED HOURS

This post has been edited by Dr. Klaus: 31 March 2011 - 04:28 AM

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@Klaus
*falls out of chair*
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No way, she would be jsut anouther person and if she is just like all the reast then there is no reason to give her more airtime then anyone else.
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Hello.
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  • That doesn't sound like a rape. That sounds like suprise sex
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View PostScotch, on 31 March 2011 - 04:26 AM, said:

Then what makes this girl special?

Yeah, this.
There is jsut no place for it with the rest of the story. It doesn't fit.

Totaly contradictory to your themes.

View PostLeaving_a_Comment, on 31 March 2011 - 03:53 AM, said:

Also: aljfksdjf The ending of the Mist, the novella was a 100 times better cause at least there was [i]hopeAt Craft: I would like to think that if I truly had a penis I wouldn't put it into the every living thing that walked by. Which would in a sense, make me a pussy of a man

It is really horrable to hear a woman say that.
  • #99494

Craft, I've accidentally thought up the 2nd part of your song's chorus.
  • #99495

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Post the whole song with at _____________________________________________________ between the lines form min ant the lines form mine.

Also, that catchy huh?
  • #99496

Oh, I'm sorry. I was referring to a movie. The one with Kate Hudson? It mighty not be very well known. It's a very slow somber movie that revolves around voodoo. Not really a blockbuster to most people, but amazingly made, nonetheless. What were you referring too?

@ Klaus - XDXDXDX-...yes

Maybe she could be his one true soulmate, if you want to have anything like that in your story. Or maybe she possesses the Golden Ruby of Rialu Hikaroooo.
  • #99497

Would it make you that?
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View PostScotch, on 31 March 2011 - 04:26 AM, said:

Then what makes this girl special?

She's a man :P
  • #99499

Annnd I've forgotten what I've thought of. Yay, morning mind.
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